"If you throw yourself off a cliff I'll give you an extra piece of prey." Oh hell no. Oh hell no.
I absolutely loved this, Rainy! The idea is positively brilliant, and your characters are developed amazing, and definitely not Mary-Sues. It's hard to find a romance story that's not cliche, but you've pulled it off. Bravo, Rainster!
The only problem I saw was with Stormpaw asking her name. When he's introducing Featherpaw to his buttface-of-a-mother, he knew her name. But, right after, he asked her her name. (Two hers, ugh.) I was a little confused at that--did he know her name or not?
Other than that, though, I love it! I'm off to read Fancies right now.