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Please tell me which one you think is better!
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'''''Poem #1'''''
 
'''''Poem #1'''''
   
:A sleek stray night
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:A sleek starry night
 
:Giving off shinning light
 
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:To those who lack
 
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:The warrior ansestor's with power
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:Warrior ansestor's with power
:Even forgiving those who cower
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:Forgiving those who '''cower'''
   
 
:Each star a brave cat
 
:Each star a brave cat
:Better than a worthless rat
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:Better than a '''worthless''' rat
   
   
 
'''''Poem #2'''''
 
'''''Poem #2'''''
   
:A sleek stray night
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:A sleek starry night
 
:Giving off shinning light
 
:Giving off shinning light
   
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:To those who lack
 
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:The warrior ancestor's with power
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:Warrior ancestor's with power
:Even forgiving those who cower
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:Forgiving those who '''act sour'''
   
 
:Each star a brave cat
 
:Each star a brave cat
:Better than a worthless rat
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:Better than a '''cowering''' rat
   
   

Latest revision as of 02:06, July 1, 2010

Please tell me which one you think is better! I bolded the changes.

Poem #1

A sleek starry night
Giving off shinning light
Giving strength back
To those who lack
Warrior ansestor's with power
Forgiving those who cower
Each star a brave cat
Better than a worthless rat


Poem #2

A sleek starry night
Giving off shinning light
Giving strength back
To those who lack
Warrior ancestor's with power
Forgiving those who act sour
Each star a brave cat
Better than a cowering rat



Please tell me which one you like better!!! --♥Shinestar♥ 00:37, April 29, 2010 (UTC)

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