GUESS WHO FINALLY FINISHED READING THIS
YES, 'TIS ME, RAINY, THE WORST BFF IN THE WORLD
Okay so this comment basically covers the first two parts since that's what you have up right now.
I love the opening. Mischief is really intriguing and I'm curious to see how you fit her into the plotline. I also like how you mentioned her being really young; I dunno, that adds a vulnerability to her that being a rogue offsets, so we're all like, okay you're tough, but you're also lil'... It makes us all root for her to stay safe and for Brokenstar to leave her alone.
I LOVE HOW YOU BROUGHT HER INTO SHADOWCLAN THOUGH?!?!?! LIKE YESSS, UNDERRATED POINT OF VIEWS!!! You showed harshness in the Clan's initial attitudes towards her, but no harsher than ThunderClan's initial attitude towards Rusty in the original arc. A rogue entering ShadowClan's point of view... it's the most unique thing ever and I can't wait to see the story unfold in Mischief's eyes. Mischief and Ravenpaw... you picked really uncommon sort of characters to lead the story so far and I am SO psyched.
I hate Tigerclaw, but then what else is new? His coldness is really well brought out in your book; I can literally imagine the detachment of his persona... and poor Ravenpaw, he's just an apprentice and he has such an intense mentor :c I'm really curious to see how Ravenpaw's fate will turn out without Firepaw's intervention. So excited to see how far and what direction you're taking this alternative storyline. The idea is amazing and I can already see you're going to do an incredibly creative, well written job of it.
God, I've missed your writing, and it's no harm that you've gotten even better than you already were--didn't know that was possible. There were a few lines where I literally, kid you not, just reread them like five times because I was like, "what on EARTH, I want to write like that".
Love you so much and so glad you're back writing on here c: KEEP IT UP AND POST MORE ASAP! I can't wait