Talk:To Merit Bliss/@comment-26432133-20170407150215

(Contest Comment)

SPOILERS

ONE

I like this beginning. It's so intense and beautifully detailed and hooks the reader well. The emphasis of the bold words is used really nicely. Shadowpaw's a cute character, and I like how she looks out for her brother. Mosspaw worrying about if his dream was prophetic was kinda sad, because as the reader we know it probably was and he's just too sweet to be a villain D:

It looks like he'll become the leader and just mess up and the others will see him as a tyrant (at least, that's my guess).

JUDGING:

As only one chapter is up, all of what I'm judging isn't in the story yet. So I guess this kinda leaves the judging blank? xD

OVERALL THOUGHTS

The title's very interesting and I'm curious as to how it will tie into the story later on. I'd absolutely love to see where you take this story if you decide to continue it. It's looking great so far, and I'm sure it'll turn out to be an amazing story, Brighty.