Talk:Don't stop now-/@comment-5137480-20160422230712

review:

Overall, the plot intrigues me. I'll be watching out for more. but I have a few criticisms:


 * 'stop' and 'now' should be capitalized in the title.


 * No offense, but Prettypaw is a slightly ridiculous name. It probably wouldn't be canon and sounds a bit mary-sueish


 * You should probably be making a new paragraph every time someone speaks


 * It seemed a bit confusing and rushed to me. I'm not sure who anyone is and I don't know anything about the characters and then suddenly Dashstar is screaming and then he's dead. Maybe flesh the story out a bit more, explain the characters and the scene.

Sorry if this sounded rude, I'm still improving on constructive criticism!