Talk:The Starry Cat/@comment-5488450-20130726174121


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This is cool, I like the idea, and this series seems like its going to be cool. Your dialect is interesting and you use a various number of words as opposed to just 'said' or 'me owed' which was very nice. It's tense, and the sweet little romantic parts are timed perfectly!

A few things though: Darkcaln should be DarkClan, cos the Clan is always supposed to be capitalized. I also recommend longed paragraphs, and some more action. Dialogue is good but I want more of what is being done as well. Finally, as Rainy suggested below perhaps "fleshing it out" a bit more would be nice!

Nonetheless, this is really cool, and I can't wait to see where it takes you :)