Talk:Skystorm's Journey/@comment-8248793-20131217025734

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That was great so far! I would suggest breaking apart some of those big paragraphs. Usually, when someone new talks, you go to a new line (I don't do that sometimes but most of the time). If you have really long paragrahs, it'll be harder to read for some people.

I love Skystorm so far. He seems like great cat. The first dream was really suspenseful and it really got my attention. Shiningfur seems like such a sweet cat, and I think I'll go see A Bright Star sometimes :)

This was a great start, and I hope you do more soon!

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