Talk:Whispering Breeze/@comment-5342796-20150823201153

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OH MY GOD I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU ACTUALLY WROTE THIS, WITH YOUR AMAZING WRITING, FOR VALE... I LITERALLY CAN'T WRAP MY HEAD AROUND IT, IT'S SO GOOD.

Honestly, I can tell the effort and emotion put into this was so genuine, and you did an extraordinarily good job; the flashbacks were the perfect touch, and I really appreciate you going back through Vale's seasons and finding Ryan and Breezeflight's most significant interactions, and then giving us your version of Ryan's POV during these times.

Oooh so you changed things up a bit, having Fire come with Lily and Ryan? That was an interesting touch; I think the three of them actually have a lot in common personality-wise, so she does make the most sense if you wanted to add another cat to Ryan and Lily's escapade.

I feel so bad for Ryan; I know I've sort of skirted around revealing what and why he did what he did, but don't worry, you'll learn more of what actually happened in Vale very soon c: And this story made me remember how much I love him as a character, and how I owe it to him to at least give an explanation.

Sea, this was SO good. You're a phenomenal writer and your talent for capturing Ryan's emotion is unmatchable. I love you so much, thank you for doing this <3 *hugs you*

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