Talk:Flutters/@comment-25531638-20140509022525

I only read through chapter 7, so this comment is only for that part of the story (I'm going to finish it and leave another comment later)

Wow, I really liked being able to see things from Shadowfire's point of view. She's a very interesting cat, and I like the way that you actually made her afraid of what to do, instead of the brave and tough deputy of Snakestar.

I think you also used really good sentence structure all throughout the story, and good descriptive words :3 (that sounded nerdy, I know) The writing flowed at a perfect pace, which was a great plus to the story.

Shadowfire's dream was an interesting addition too.

And sorry, am I the only one who doesn't ship ShadowXHawk? Idk, I still like the way that she wants to have a romance with him, but can't.

Yeah, so over all, it seems like a pretty awesome story so far :D