Talk:Shattering Earth/@comment-11651046-20150501011206

This is very good so far! I can't wait to read some more when it comes out! Now for some constructive crticism/commenting:

First off, I feel like some of the chapters could be a tiny bit longer, though that's probably just me being unused to the length of fanfiction (I haven't read a ton of it for a while)

I also think that some of your events in it were a tiny bit rushed, though it was still very good!

I also think that some of your characters could use a bit more development at times, though that's probably me being super picky... My favorite character would probably be Robinpaw.

Overall, though, this is good! Keep up the good work!