Talk:StarClan's Whispers/@comment-8248793-20150601224342

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I can already see this is going to be a great fanfic! It has an amazing concept behind it (an apprentice struggling to find his place in his Clan) and I'm interested to find out what the title has to do with the story :)

I like how you portray Robinpaw. He's not one of those who just falls apart. I'm glad you don't exagerrate the teasing or you don't show that Robinpaw is completely stressed or depressed by his Clanmates' cruelty. I don't exactly love those stories :P

I also like Ashcloud. You make the warrior seem like Robinpaw's only chance, and it really shows Ashcloud's kindness even more. I really like that you highlight how important Ashcloud might become so early in the story, because I feel as though he will be more involved.

I didn't find any mistakes and I'm certainly interested to know more!

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