Talk:Seeking Revenge/@comment-5342796-20130914221539

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That was amazing Stormy. It was just breathtaking, well thought out, well written, perfect in every imaginable way.

Okay. Gonna start with the plot, and then go to characterization.

I love the opening. You brought in every character in the perfect way, and portrayed them in a way that left lots of room for development. And I can't really explain it, but as soon as you began the story, there was this sort of gray veil over it. Like gloom or foreboding, you know? Idk how to explain it, but it was certainly there, and it set the right tone for the entire story.

All the plot twists were amazing. They weren't those annoying overdramatic ones like "AND THEN IT TURNED OUT THAT HER FATHER WAS REALLY A PIE!" (Okay I'm overexaggerating there; I'm just talking about the ones that make no sense and are completely random). These were more subtle, with enough foreshadowing to make them fit into the plot perfectly, like the way Shade was rediscovered and lost again, or their sibling, or Jacques' slow favor of Scourge, or Spike's death(WHICH BROKE MY FREAKIN HEART GODDAMMIT)

Another thing in this story that I loved was the confused desperation that filtered through in Susan's voice. I mean, her life was completely a mess; Scourge offered protection to her, but he also did unspeakable things and practically ruined her life. At the same time, it was still all she had, wasn't it? It really made me think, and my heart ached for her the whole time.

The ending broke my heart into infinite little pieces. I just... I can't even, i'm sorry, I can't say anything about that except... that was just... beautiful and heartwrending and yeah.

You're an amazing writer. I loved this so much <3

