Talk:Dewleaf's Destiny/@comment-26936355-20190618080220

hey! i haven't been reading fanfics here for a long time so i was kinda curious to see the quality of them haha

and fate led me to your fanfic! in all honesty, this reminded me of the very first fanfic i had written- fresh, a little innocent (but in a good way), and oozing life! i could almost feel your passion for writing a story like this!

though i don't think i'm in a place to 'critique' someone's work, i think your chapters could perhaps go longer (haha so much for me to say this, i literally used to write 200-word chapters) and you could use more sentence structures to make your paragraphs flow better! what i've been noticing is the fact that your sentences are a little choppy and that the fight scene felt particularly... crowded? sometimes it doesn't hurt to use more adjectives (i'm a sucker for long, descriptive sentences, so that explains it)!

but overall- such an interesting start to your story- i'd even say i'm quite reeled in! i feel like dewkit's going to become a medicine cat c: it's really good! i hope you'll continue writing, and find your passion in writing, no matter on here, or on quotev, or on some other platform! keep writing, and may the stars light your path :))

(it's okay if you don't reply because i'll most likely not come on in a hundred years or so, but if you really want to find me, you'd be able to see my contact details (aka my different social media / website accounts) on here!!)