Talk:Burnt to Ash/@comment-25531638-20130724013830

Lets see.

Dawny: You're chapter was good. I like. At first, when you said that Leafshard was the mother I'm like *sigh* I don't think she read the prologue. But you proved me wrong and threw in a little twist that should cause some interesting development all throughout the story.

Brighty: I enjoyed the situation with Brightkit and the other kits. But Nightstar's affection seemed all too suddenly thrown at us, unless it's to make up for the loss of Windpetal. Is your chapter finished?