Talk:Creampelt's Quest: The Prequel AU/@comment-38866826-20191029011744

It's a good story, familiar, but still unique. I recommend adding actions between your dialogue to break it up and make it easier to know what characters are speaking though. Like 'Creampelt!' Grassclaw mewed happily. 'What is it grassclaw?" Creampelt replied, but Grasspelt gave an excited hop. "You don't need to go hunting yet!-" Like that basiacally. Just some tips, keep working on the story!!