Talk:Live On(Part One)/@comment-7235369-20140313121707

OMG YOU ARE TOO MEAN!!!!

~Spoilers~!

I really liked the starting, and, like Arti, I liked Hawk's speech. And then it got intense, with the new cats coming in, and Roanfur's death. YOU ARE SO MEAN!

And then I found three errors:

Near the start, it says Scatterlead instead of Scatterleaf.

"Brightsong, dat to the left! We have to secure these cats!" I don't understand.... What does 'dat' mean?

"The w[pale she-cat glared at us" I think you mean 'pale'... ah well, a little confusing, but nothing to major. 8^)

Overall, great story, and I can't wait to see what Part 2 brings!