Talk:I'll be your eyes, and I'll be your legs. (Jayfeather/Briarlight)/@comment-43907793-20191204010534/@comment-43907793-20191204141755

Okay. I just read it, and am ready to do the challange. Before I start, is it alright that I do more than just a paragraph? I'm sorry, I don't like writing short peices. That's just me... but I can always adapt to whatever you've set as the rules. :)

Also, I love the story, but I didn't see much of a deep and personal relationship between Brairlight and Jayfeather. Jayfeather almost laughed with Brairlight, that's great... but... I thought their relationship was going to get deeper, by how you wrote the title. That's the only constructive critisism I have for this. Otherwise, I LOVE IT! Great work and please continue!!!