Talk:Withered/@comment-5342796-20151230045314



Huh. This is very intriguing :O

Okay the poem bits at the beginning of sections are REALLY good. I wish I had that kinda talent with poetry; I can't write it for my life xD

I was a bit confused at the beginning at who the she-cats even were and why Snake was sneaking off to meet them if he was gonna introduce them to Amber anyway? Was it just a prank or is something else going on? :O

Well, obviously something happens because Amberbreeze becomes a warrior and is separated somehow from those good ole days

I know you said you're going to rewrite this but you've already got a good foundation and cast of characters going for you! I love your writing and I'm eager to see where you take this

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