Talk:Pumpkin Moon/@comment-24143898-20170427062208

Why hello there, Night. :D Here's Part Three of the comment that I promised C:

SPOILERS

Chapters Six, Seven and Eight:

Wait, what!? Honestly, the start of Chapter Six is definitely attention-grabbing, but I do not see at all why Gouda started to attack Flare. It's really sudden, and it seems a little bit weird for me, considering that in the previous chapters they appeared to get on decently. Maybe they don't get on as well as I thought, or one of them is hiding something, but regardless I was still surprised.

As for the rest of the chapter, it also kept up with that theme, although in a different way. Target is definitely a creepy and shady character, that is for sure, and he's quite interesting to see. I'm curious as to why he tried to attack Gouda - it's clearly not a one-off thing, seeing as he's done it in previous chapters as well. There's something behind him... but at least that Shade cat saved Gouda, that was nice (it's too soon for Gouda to die imo :o).

Oh wow, a lot of these cats have supernatural powers, do they? So far, from Chapter Seven, I'm getting a good impression of Shade - he actually seems like a nice cat, and I feel that we're going to see him throughout the story. I liked it when he made Squeak a cat again (which was not something I was expecting to happen until later on in the story, but here works) - it'll be interesting in the next couple of chapters to see her as a cat rather than a duckling.

Chapter Eight - I read the first few lines, and now I think that Sqeak and Gouda could be a thing later on. I have no idea why. don'tjudgeme

ANYWAYS MOVING ON

Wow, that was a surprise, seeing Flare's sister - there's twists and turns everywhere in this story, which definitely holds my attention. And woah, she's purple and white - once again, bringing across how different this world is. You've done an excellend job of creating this world, Night, I must say that - well done, and keep it up c;

This is great, Night! I didn't see anything that needed improving/any typos. Keep it up c;

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