Talk:Bellicosity/@comment-25630395-20170624190017

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pt. ii

oh I really like Dawnpaw! She seems super naive and young but I wonder if there's truth to her concerns. This was a really neat way of telling us what happened after part one, we get to fill in the blanks ourselves. I'm assuming Ivystar banished Swiftflight? And I wonder if he was really behind the attacks.

I'm really curious to see what happened. Since you haven't written much I'm a bit confused as to what happened but I'm sure it'll all be explained in your next chapter.

At one point you had Ivystar mistakenly spelt as Ivy star ("Let's get back to camp. Ivy star has enough to worry about as it is...)

This looks really good! Keep it up!

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