Talk:Flames of Love/@comment-11493954-20140126014515

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Okay, I already left a comment, but I'll do that again briefly now. :) And judge for the contest. :)

The storngest thing about this is the many things covered in the plot. The story was fillled with savory details, and yet the same event was never strectched for so long that it bored me. Each plot point kept me moving through the story, and was also quite original. I had lots to process and worry and wonder and mull over in this, while not getting bored, and not getting a sensory overload. That is quite a hard blance to accomplish. :)

However, the story's weakest point was also kind of related to the many things going on. Morining|x|Bracken was somewhat abruptly introduced,and maybe a little more backstory and hints throughout would have been less abrupt. I also found Red|x|Morning a little abrupt too. Maybe put in some more on how close they were, which may be hard because Redclaw died quickly (D:)

This was supreb, overall. I give it a 17/20 for a very new look on the my-mate-loves-someone-else thing and the fantastic description. :D