Talk:Echo in the Darkness/@comment-39524212-20200203121057

This is awesome!

You got off on an awesome start! The prologue immediately made me interested, and it made me want to read the story. There were a few really well-written sentences. Oooh and the prophecy was so cool!

Okay, the first chapter! Oh gosh you really surprised me there! I thought the squirrel was totally going to escape. It would make sense for Owlshine to be irritated about Echopaw taking his prey, but seeing him go furious like that makes me wonder if later on, he’s going to be a mean and unfriendly character. But that’s just a guess. Oh, and I have a question. Lunarheart is Echopaw’s mentor, right? Because it said that Grayflower nodded and her approvingly.... okay, moving on.

XD Birchpaw. Gosh I feel bad for Echopaw, loosing a littermate to stinky Twolegs (realizes I am a Twoloeg) Anyway, there were a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, like you were missing a few apostrophes, but other than that, it was great! I liked the interaction between Poppyshine and Echopaw. I wonder how long it’s been since Poppyshine died.....

Overall, it was a great story! You did have some punctuation mistakes, mostly in chapter two, but those are an easy fix! It was so fun to read and I can’t wait for more!