Talk:Days Until Heartbreak/@comment-15560748-20150826022119

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TWENTY-NINE So I think Hawk is kind of debating whether to trust Sari and Aura or not. But Sari actually has changed, whether she's with Ice or not.

The part where Aura tells her to focus kinda made me laugh; it reminds me of my best friend. Because [either] she (or I) will be thinking, and I'll just snap my fingers in front of her face and be like "Focus."

So this chapter was a good one, I liked everything that happened, and the characters seem in their most natural places (Sari:  "I said claw his flank not bow down to him! What are you, stupid? Did you trip over  air ? Roll to the left! No, not your right, come on, can't you hear me? Okay now, duck! I SAID DUCK, NOT FALL ON YOUR FACE." LMAO <3)

The part with Ice added a bit more suspense to the DUH plot, because we see things from his POV. It's like Ryan POV from Vale except Ice doesn't run away and leave Sari heartbroken (coughrainycough)

And Shineblossom is creepy. Just sayn.

Great chapter; looking forward to more!

THIRTY Again, Shineblossom is an absolute creep. Her POV made the chapter better :)

Their plan is also pretty worked out and stuff, so I have a feeling that something will go wrong with it :(

I also can't believe that Winter (Ivystar) would let Shineblossom do such a thing. But I guess that Shineblossom is two-faced.

AND KAYLI UGHH. I dun like her. But she would probably ruin Saria and Aura's chances of winning which is bad D:

NO AURA. Don't give up on me, and Sari and your group. But Sari now has to change her plans and stuff, so I'm hoping that all will be well.

THIRTY-ONE  I feel like Sari is treating Aura like a kit. "They're targeting YOU not ME. Don't you understand?" xD

But I'm really surprised that Ice wasn't nearly killed by the other cats. But it was probably only on Aura's orders.

PLEASE MAKE MORE DUH FIREY THIS IS AWESOME

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