Talk:Snow White; The third Fairytail/@comment-24143898-20150412044849

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Nee, the prologue. >:D Lilystar is going to be evillll, isn't she? :o I think that in this story, Whitekit is the Snow White - am I right?

The prologue was really well written - I commend you on that, and there was good detail in it too.

If there was one thing I would improve, it would be to break up some of those big paragraphs, especially that huge one in Chapter 1. Blazey, it makes it easier to read if you do so.

However, this is a great start, and I will be watching for more! <3

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