Talk:The White Raven/@comment-44944319-20200206094610

Oh wow, am I the first person to read this?

It's AMAZING!

I can already see that the plot will be awesome, and I can see Bluepelt's personality developing really well. It's really well written; the way Bluepelt insults Crowstar.

"You are not our leader. You sit on that rock like it is a throne, like SwiftClan is still in the clutches of Twilight. You are no leader of mine."

I do have some questions-

Who is Twighlight? She seems to have more of a kittypet name, not a clan name. She was, apparently, a leader without nine lives, so does that mean StarClan didn't approve of her? Also, with her name, if she was clan, then was her apprentice name Twipaw? If she was a kittypet before, then why did she not take a clan name?

Anyway, it's REALLY good! I can't wait for more. I would appreciate more depth in who Twilight was later on though, but I will certaintly be looking for the next update.