Talk:Blind/@comment-5342796-20130709181256

This is really, really amazing! Boy have I been missing out on not reading it.

Feather, you've always been an amazing writer from the moment you joined, but this story shows exacty how much you've grown, and how much you've improved. Seriously. The tone and voice of the story is flawless, and the action is well-placed. I like the way you included both action-packed moments and moments where Mysteryfeather was just hanging out with friends. It makes it seem more real, and her and Foxflash and Oakshard's relationship is a great addition to the story. Good thinking throwing Darkmist in there.

One error I noticed was at the beginning of chapter one, you had Mysteryfeather in first person POV, but then you switched to third. Happens a lot, nothing big.

Keep this up!