Talk:The Story of Icewrath, Featherswirl, and Craneheart/@comment-24036229-20131023010923

This story is nicely written and I like the plot, but I do have to agree with Zaffie that there could be things edited that could make this story quite a bit better than it is now, even better than it is now actually. I do have to agree that I can not really connect with Featherkit, but as the story grows I'm sure I will find that connection, after all you will be getting better as you write it, fixing mistakes. I am not that good myself... but I tend to find things in people's stories to nitpick about, but I am not really in the mood to do that. I look forward to seeing more of your story!