Talk:The Birds/@comment-25630395-20150801154925

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Liek Fallen, I find this concept really interesting. It's cool to see how the birds are now at the top of the order, though I find it strange to as how that would happen. I know it's a fanfic and all but would the cats be able to understand what these birds are saying? Your choice but it made it seem kind of unrealistic.

I think as a first episode this went really fast and plunged straight into the action. You set the pace for the season, but I think it went a little too fast. We didn't get a chance to be introduced to Aspenpaw, her setting, or the way her Clanmates cope with the birds. It's pretty horryifing that birds are picking up cats to kill, but maybe stress the point a little more? I think you could have added some more emotion because Aspenpaw was kinda sitting there going 'well here are these birds huehue.' idk. Just, it seemed like the episode kind of lacked emotion/vitality.

But you certainly left us on a cliffy, and I'm so in love with this concept. Nice job!