Talk:Gems/@comment-25531638-20130925033952

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Yay, I love the new additions to this story! It really makes me think about the gems in a new way.

My heart just about stopped as soon as Hollystar said that she had no idea who Violetrose was. Totally not what I was expecting. And the idea of her being a Dark Caster? That one really hit me as well.

And that rule about casting should bring some interesting complications into the story.

Towards the beginning, I really like how things build up. You didn't just burst into the story right away, which is always good, you more set the stage for things. If you know what I mean.

But there was just one thing that sort of stood out to me throughout the story. Here's an example:

Firebloom went and did this, then Firebloom did that. Firebloom thought about this. Then Firebloom began to walk away.

When things are like that, you should probably replace "Firebloom" or "Violetrose" or whichever character with "she" so it flows more easily.

Other than that, it was great.

Can't wait to see what happens with ShockClan.

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