User blog comment:Bluestar1246/Bluestar x Fireheart/@comment-34633311-20151128110009

This shouldn't be a blog, that's not where you post fanfics. You make pages out of them.

But I'll do constructive stuff anyway

Spoilers

Okay, for one thing, it was very confusing for me. Why would Firepaw just go up and kill Tigerclaw? Firepaw's six moons old, wouldn't Tigerclaw have won?

And how fast it went...ugh, way too fast for me. It literally zipped from killing Tigerclaw to the moonstone within a paragraph.

Bluestar suddenly wanting to be Fireheart's mate...that part really made me feel bit..weird. That's not part of her personality, and plus, why would she suddenly love Fireheart?

Overall, it wasn't great, but I won't say it's bad either.

(and use proper grammar, your quotations are very rushed. They're scrunched together and I really dislike that)

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