Talk:Chance/@comment-24519368-20170422173550

Tansypaw's character is so interesting, complex, and vivid. You did a spectacular job of establishing it in a short amount of time! Tansypaw's views/opinions on things being explicitly stated to the reader in her narration incorporates a personal twist and really highlights that this is her POV and how she sees the world and develops her even further as a character. This story is an example of first-person narration done  RIGHT.

Onto Lilyclaw, all I can say is that she definitely is manipulative if one wa to look at her behaviour in the present and in the past. It's not explicitly stated, but it's there if you look close enough. She so is manipulating Foxpelt into loving the frail Petalpaw and shunning Tansypaw. This can be seen in the change in attitude towards his two kits after Lilyclaw becomes his mate. The contrast in how he treats Tansypaw and Petalpaw is so obvious it could be depicted as black and white!

I am SO going to be watching this for updates, you've got a great setup here!