Talk:After The Death: Cometpaw Speaks/@comment-5848758-20131109192906

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Cometpaw seems like a good character, and I like him. I was left with lots of questions-I like it when a story makes me ask, 'What happened to him?'

But the chapters are incredibly short, and the plot feels very rushed, especially at the beginning. Go into more detail! A chapter should be more than a paragraph.

Also, there were a LOT of grammar errors. As part of the WFW 1 grammar team, would you like me to go through and correct it? It would make it much easier to read. :)

Nice start, keep going.