Talk:Withered Rose/@comment-5488450-20130726164206

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Wow, Brighty really really impressive. The way you channel all these emotions is just done so well. I love the settings, I love the way you designed the good cats, the bad cats, the neutral cats just all of it is marvelous! Only a few things I could point out:
 * Hickory isn't really a realistic name for a Clan cat, it's not really something they would know about, I don't believe
 * Sometimes the story felt a bit rushed which could cause confusion. I recommend slowing down a bit more and including a few boring parts as well so that the story may be easier to keep up with
 * Ivystar, as good of a job as you did in making us angry towards her, seemed a bit too prejudiced to me. I mean no Clan leader threatens to kick cats out because they are heartbroken. Still, thought her personality was well done :3

But this is really good, and the ending was cute to! Another thing I might recommend would be to make all the font the same because it looks a little odd else wise :)