Talk:Days Until Heartbreak/@comment-15560748-20150818032331

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20 chapters so far

Okay, so this story is really intense. Because this random tom Ice is hitting on her, starts to like her, makes Sari like him, then half-dumps her, and then takes her back, and then fully dumps her and yeahhh

So I found the story really interesting, the way Sari makes an anti-tom group but then runs off with Ice. I see her point about love, and whne she learns to love, she sees that sometimes she is correct, while sometimes, she is wrong. Sari also learns to help others instead of acting supreme to them, because in "My Inspiration", she sees that she is ranked the same as them, or even below them.

I also really love your charcater developent in this story. Sari isn't half-known, half-not-known, but fully known, and we can kinda guess what she might do next. Because Sari starts out as cold and cruel, and basically heartless, but Sari's time with Ice gave her a new perspective on life. A tom showed her to love, to forgive, and to have hope. Even though he kinda ditched her, he changed her life forever.

Now, lemme rant on ICE. Because he says he loves Sari, and it was sweet and all, but then he starts flirting with Shineblossom, and then goes with Sari, and then dumps her. He seems caring and sweet, but it also seems like he is just toying with Sari's feelings. It's not fair to Ice, having to deal with two she-cats, it's not fair to Shineblossom that Ice didn't tell her he doesn't like her, and it's also unfair to Sari that Ice didn't tell her that he's in a complicated position.

DUH is a wonderful story so far, and I'm happy that you're working hard on it <3

It's as good as "Don't Stop Believing".

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This is probably the longest comment I've ever written on WFW in my two years xD ^^

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