Talk:My Home/@comment-25630395-20170626033106

commenting contest for tier one

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I'm really intruiged by the society you've set up. Your introduction was a precise way to give background before jumping into the story. Jaliverynn seems very militaristic, and I'm curious to learn more. Why exactly do they hate the Clans?

Cairna seems interesting. The other characters also hold the promise of wonderful personalities though you haven't had the chance to flesh them out yet. I liked how the brief interactions between them already illustrate the group dynamic and different personalities.

My one complaint would be that this episode moved very fast. I barely had time to process one scene  before you jumped to another. With the large amount of  characters being introduced this made it a tad confusing, and I had to reread at times. Usually when introducing characters it's good to take a few moments for exposition.

This has great potential- I am excited to see where Cairna will head next. I have a feeling she'll leave and join the Clans o.o we'll see. Great job!

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