Talk:Prior Trials/@comment-25971176-20160116195526

late comment haha anyway

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OMG RO I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!

I love how the setting is a desert, and the way it's described. It's a nice contrast from the usual forest and river settings we see in warriors.

I love Sandpaw's personality, and I thought it was nice how this episode showed us who she is. Her relationship with her brother is really sweet!

I really liked the way you described Heather's death. I usually don't describe character deaths, because imo, that's so hard to do. The details you added were so good. I like how you showed us how her body was mangled and twisted, and how her insides were strewn on the ground. It's a lot better than just saying "Heather is dead." The description helps us see how cruel the cat/s who killed her are. And like Rainy said, I would like to know who killed her and why she died!

I noticed a few minor typos, like Sandpaw was spelled as Snap: " Snap snuggled closer to her brother"  but that's okay!

I really look forward to reading the rest of it! You're really good at writing, gurl <3

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