Talk:Flamekit's Prophecy - The Journey/@comment-34633311-20151228141423

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Okay wow. That went really fast. Too fast for me :O

One thing that I'm going to say is that your batte scenes are a paragraph and I felt that they could've been expanded. It, again, was also very, very fast. I was confused half the time because I didn't get the story!

I also thought there were points that were unrealistic. How could Flamepaw just go for Redstar's neck and then poof, he's dead? Wouldn't a Clan leader be a better fighter than that?

Overall, it was a nice read, but I think it could be a little slower and be more realistic.

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