Talk:Moon and Sun/@comment-8248793-20130918034630

Ooh, was this a collab?

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I like this story alot.

I think some of the chapters are very short, like the prologue, but I make short chapters too. Though try to make them longer.

Some grammar or spelling mistakes you made were like: On chapter Eleven, the title itself, you wrote "Elven" I think. But you didn't spell Eleven right.

The chapter titles, like the coding, should have been used for all the chapters. I noticed that you didn't finish coding it all. Maybe go back a code the rest.

Now for the story inself. I liked Moon's attitude. She has a fierce, yet protective attitude that I feel that I have. It makes a character strong, but weak in some ways. A perfect way to set up a character.

Sun's personality is the sweeter kind. Calm but smart. Shy but strong. Another good way to pair up these two characters. Moon and Sun fit perfectly because they're personalities mix together perfectly.

I think this story had a lot of emotion, though too much love xD It kinda changed the story a bit, but it did make it interesting.

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