Talk:Feathers & Fur/@comment-8754209-20131227002906

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It was fabulous! Inspiring! Bravo!

Okay, I adore the plot, really. Owls and cats dont merge together, but in this story it was really good! It has plenty of feeling and I can picture it in my head sometimes. I despise Sunheart and Mousefue

Suggestions:

Perhaps lengthen Chapter Nine and Chapter Eight. I can tell you were a little lazy (dont worry, I am really lazy) at Chapter Eight so expand it or just merge it into Chapter Nine

What bugged me though is that on Chapter Ten Jag and Skyflight were too sucessful in the death of the owls. Its just throwing them down a cliff, not very interesting to me. Try to realisticise the fighting, with Jag being injured because, no one fights and comes out in one piece.

I loved it! Off to read Jagged Pines!