Talk:Swirling Darkness/@comment-1703139-20130605164108

I like the prologue, very mysterious. I especially like the inclusion of Midnight, but if this was the Old Forest, would Rock be there? I forget, I need to re-read the series. Sigh.

Anyways, at the end of the first paragraph, I'd say cut out the word 'here', you use it several times and it sounds kinda weird.

Other then that, excellent beginning. I'll make sure to keep an eye out for this. :)