Talk:Thunderflames tale/@comment-26980659-20170129141702

Well, here's how you can improve:

Try to capitalize the proper nouns like Thunderflame and Hollytuft.

Also capitalize the chapter titles and beginnings of sentances.

And the part in Chapter Six where Thunder's mom says "what honey" should be "What, honey?"

Warrior cats don't know what guns, cars, houses, or gravestones are.

Other than that, this story is great, but it needs a plot. Otherwise, it's good!