Talk:Winxclaw's Choice/@comment-4751506-20131123152520

This is really interesting, Winx! I love the names, they're pretty realistic with the exception of Winxpaw, but I like them! I don't think Winxkit would know how to catch a mouse after just having been kitted though...

The only major problem I've seen is your grammar and conventions. They make it a bit hard to read the story. Something that would help the story's readability is making sure to make a new paragraph every time another character talks, and making sure to include spaces after the commas! There are a few words that don't need to be capitalized, but it's nothing that would be too hard to fix. If you like, the WFW Editors' Team can edit it - just the grammar, none of the plot / story / names - for you! :)

I really like this, though, I think you have great potential as a writer and I can't wait to see what you continue to write!