Talk:Famine/@comment-25531638-20130722231208

Nice chapters, both Brighty and Darky! Darky: you really delved deep into Pinepelt's misery, that made it very intriguing. But atrocious is spelled like how I just spelled it.

Brighty: You made a good, smooth transition between Songflower's past, and her present. The ending was perfect as well.

Just one thing that I'd suggest for both of you is just slow things down a tiny bit, not much (not saying I'm not guilty of going to fast x3).