Talk:Warrior Speech Fanfiction/@comment-25531638-20130712180503

This is an interesting idea that you've got here. I like how they are just speaking instead of everything happening. I also loved how Firestar and Bluestar started their speeches, it captured my attention. But since they are just speaking, maybe add some more description into their dialogue?

It would also be better if you went to the next line a few times, in each of the cats speeches. It makes it much easier for people to read. Also, since it is a fanfic, you could maybe add a bit of a twist into each of the cats' paragraphs? Most of us already know all about these cats' lives, so if you changed things up a bit, it would probably hold people's interest better.