Talk:Her last tear/@comment-25630395-20150124040906

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Great storyline! I feel bad for the kits and their names DX And how they changed their names seemed innocent and kit-like. This story has a good mysterious air to it, and the cliffhanger is really good!

I felt that some parts in the story were a bit rushed or sudden. Maybe try adding more details, like visual?

Great start! I'll be watching to see how this turns out XD

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