Talk:Permanent/@comment-5342796-20130729192138



Okay, from now on you HAVE to tell me whenever you update this, because this is amazing, and I cannot wait any more time than necessary to read this. Seriously.

This is one of those fanfics that makes me think back to when you first joined the wiki and be like "WHOA!" You were amazing then, but you're improved a lot, to like BEYOND amazing now. Everything is sooooooo amazingly written.

I remember you told me that you might not finish this series and I was kinda like, "daw". Um, no. Just no. You are finishing this. I demand it.

The part where Redpaw decided not to rebel was an interesting twist. This story is so full of surprises, like seriously. It keeps anyone on their toes. No cliches, just an amazingly interesting plot and tons of awesome characters. SmokeXGray = so cuteeeeee <3

Well, this was actually really cruel of you, but speaking technically as far as writing goes, the way you built Firestar up to be this amazing figure- and then cruelly cut him down(>.<) and killed him... that was a really good choice, even though it made me inwardly bawl my eyes out. I can see how Fire Division is slowly becoming a "home" of sorts to Redpaw, but instead of this being boring, you can feel the tension slowly rising. It's quite obvious that things won't remain this peaceful for long at all, and it really captivates your attention; Firestar's death is the final blow.



You better tell me when you update next, or else :D