Talk:Your Heart Is A Muscle/@comment-5488450-20130326155435

This was really good, Rainy, I think you did a really good job capturing a boatload of emotions with just one single song. Just like for Lilly’s Songfic, I had to think a lot about the score I wanted to give this one and I finally chose the score I did due to the factors listed below:
 * Your spelling and grammar were spot on; I didn’t catch any mistakes and while this may not be the most important part to your story; it does play a role in the score you get.
 * I like how you left the night at the beach completely up to us. We get to imagine what happened at that beach; we get to decide what Deersoul chose to tell Coaldust, we get to choose what set up the base for their relationship.
 * The flurry of emotions was really nice; and there was so much of it but somehow you still kept it under control with I found quite astounding.
 * I docked points because you kept switching tense between past and present. While it caused no confusion the flow of the story kept switching back and forth and it could get a little annoying.
 * For the chorus I felt like you kept repeating the same thought process without much development; I felt as though it was just Coaldust thinking the same thing over and over again.

It was great, it was absolutely fabulous, and I am now sure that I should read some more songfics from this collection! And your overall score-after much thought, I have decided, should be an 8.