Talk:Warrior/@comment--20151205000406

I really like the way you sort of jump into the story and don't waste time explaining everything, then do it on the way. The way you are developing the characters really leaves room for improvement.

The way you introduced Arctic was very interesting as well, making you want to know what is really going on in his head. And, luckily for all of us readers, we do! I like how his loyalty to the Raiders is all driven by his lack of family, and his loyalty towards Gwen (Is that how you spell her name?) is really sweet.

It is really nice the way that Arctic and Ravenflight fall in love at first sight, but have trouble getting together anyway. Arctic X Raven!

Ravenflight's story is sad, I feel really sorry for her, but it really helps build up personality.

The reason the Raiders and IceClan is fighting is really interesting; I mean, we got hardly any information on it, so it is sort of mysterious and intriguing.

I was really sad when you killed Aspenpelt, I liked him.

So, I really love this story! Keep up the good work! And sorry I am really bad at commenting: I try!