Talk:Roll of Thunder, Hear My Cry/@comment-8248793-20140613151957

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Okay this is amazing. Like a lot of people said below, you have a really good vocabulary and like it really adds to the story.

I love how the story flows, from how they talk about the hardships and the destruction of four Clanmates, and how a few were Sage-ears' friends and families.

I noticed how you used 'despicable' a lot in one of the paragraphs. It doesn't trip the flow of your story, it just gets at me because I read it three times x3 But I don't think that affects this a lot.

This may have been short, but I really like how you showed and developed Mousewing. She changed a lot, being from the scared she-cat who was about to face StarClan to the strong, new she-cat ready to lead her Clan.

I have to say, your writing is just beautiful and I've always enjoyed reading what you've written. This one really caught my eye and I think this one definitely deserves a praise :)

<3

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