Talk:Days Until Heartbreak/@comment-25630395-20150820161623

COMPETITION POST+ SPOILERS

Part Three weeee

SEEKING SOLACE.

>_>

what just happened.

I'm sorry, I'm kind of confused right now.

Did I miss something? That breakup was really... sudden. I didn't expect that.

Well, at least Sari is in the Clans now. I hope she gets her revenege >:D

EXCUSES

The pace here is really fast. I think it would have been nice if we got to see some of Sari's earlier adjustment to the Clan, but it still worked. It's great that now that Sari is out of her element, she isn't ruthless and confident. It's a nice way of showing us her character.

And wow. Ivystar, Winter? That was interesting.

VENGEANCE

Okay. This is getting annoying. Ice ALWAYS seems to turn up at the wrong momebt. ICE STOP IT GO CLIMB A TREE OR SOMETHING OKay.

I absolutely knew from the title that Sari would try her revenge on Shineblososm, and I was quivering with anticipation and happiness. And then it failed and I got MAD.

LOVE

Oh wow. That was sweet. So Sari gets to see some sort of beauty she prevented from ever existing. That's awesomely deep in a way.

And I need to know Ice's secret sooooo badly. I can't stand how he's always like: "you don't understand. just deal with it."

WHAT IS THE SECRET. SPILLLL.

TEARS

Oh. Another breakup. Sari should really be less foolish.

I don't kow what to make off Ice. He's nice one second and then in love with Shineblossom the next. You've built this up really complex and interesting, Firey! I don't ship Sari/Ice atm, but they are cute when they are together :D

MY INSPIRATION

Hmm? Ice said he didn't like Sari? Or is that just a dream?

I like how Sari helped the kit. It showed us that she was softer now, and knew what she used to do was wrong. And I am curious to see about this new home of hers. I believe this is where the Dash/Sari comes in :P?

NEVER AGAIN

Oh deep stuff. That's really interseting how Sari gets to see the kind of world she had boxed herself and the others into.

I'm so confused on my judgements of the characters. Like at first Sari was this hard rock, but now Aura seems unforgiving and Sari seems the softer cat. And Ice is good, then bad, then infuriating.

I also remember Sari saying something about how Aura would always come back and forgive. But now, Aura isn't and seems like she's determind to drive Sari away.

I love this story. Firey! You've done an amazing job!

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