Talk:Frostpool's Rage/@comment-26432133-20161228171220

I like the idea of Frostpool creating a Clan, but it feels rushed, especially since she didn't have any other cats with her. I imagine it could be written more like this: She's established herself as the leader of the group of cats. She decides she wants it to be a Clan and names it. Then, because she's still angry at the Clans, she doesn't want to take on the -star, she wants -pool. Get it?

Also, I don't think Eaglefang would just accept his new name. I wouldn't like it if my name was suddenly changed. The grammar could also use a bit of work. If you want to learn some grammar, I can teach you if you want.

This story has potential! Keep going!