Talk:Wrath/@comment-24143898-20150416031213

Boop (Copmpetition Post)

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Oohh, ShadowClan during Brokenstar's reign. That is a very interesting part in the Warriors series to write on <3

The beginning is scary. Now that I look over it, it's a bit of a 'What If' fanfiction, because you're indicating that Vonepaw's not going to die, right? I wish Volepaw hadn't died, so I like this <3

The first chapter, when Volepaw 'accidentally' kills Tansypaw... the death, like Stormy said, was very well written. I can't write deaths that well - that was something I really liked. :D

And the second chapter... Tansypaw returns. As a character, I really like Tansypaw, (why did she have to die? D:) and that prophecy (is it a prophecy?) seems to foretell doom. :o I hope Tansypaw appears again.

And Stormpaw... I don't like him, he should've died instead of Tansypaw imho D:

This is actually really, really good! Overall, there was good character development, and the beginning really did hook you in. I didn't see any mistakes, as far as I know :D.

I'm watching for more <3

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