Talk:The Tree/@comment-5488450-20130730203426

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Oh wow. This was really fantastic, Himg, you’ve got a lot of good stuff out there but I don’t think it’s unfair to state that this one would have to be the best! It’s just so magnificent and the pain, the memories, the dreams, the way you make them so sharp, so real, so relatable is really good.

I love all of the characters in this to no end. Sunpaw, Dixie, Beanie. Violet sounds like a really kind mother, his brothers sound interesting and very much like his fate and that connection was really cool. Also, I know they were supposed to be enemies and all but aw those kittens are so so cute<3

I also love the theme of fitting in. Sun has to leave the oak tree at first because he losses his mother and now he has to leave the twoleg place because he losses the attention of his new parents. It’s not really anyone’s fault-Dixie and Beanie have a right to love their kits more and, you know, kits will be kits. It’s just Sun’s time to move on and the way you reflected upon that scene was really cute!

And aww, the twoleg kittens that keep trying to pet him<3

Sometimes, I feel as though you are writing a bit faster than you need to. I’d like to recommend both slowing down in your writing, not the plot pace, a little bit, and going over your chapters once you’re done writing them to pick out the little slightly confusing bits that sometimes made certain parts harder to understand.

Wonderul, though :D

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