Talk:Patriotism/@comment-8248793-20131111043047

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OMG yes.! New episode! After the 47 non-War comments xD

I just love this battle. Adderscar being treated like a kit, Moonclaw just acting like the boss she is. But I hate her. The way you portray her makes you feel like she's so great. But when Gorsefur said. "Something broke. Something snapped." I could feel that something was about to go wrong.

You had a few mistakes. The scene where Adderscar and the medicine cat are, you wrote. "He took our exit...." It should have been "He took our entrance..." Because they had just entered.

I loved how gorgeous this writing is, and how it flows so smoothly. I definetly love the blood scenes, how Moonclaw is just as insane as Snowflight was, and Lionwing. It makes it like she's the new enemy.

<3 this, and write the next one soon!

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