Talk:Border/@comment-25630395-20170802184352

wfwa judging- SPOILERS

This pulled me in from the start! Often times shows that start with an action/intense scene can be very confusing, but you balanced it perfectly. The short interaction between Pebble and Rattle showed so much, it was heartbreaking and I could immediately sense how real the bond between them was. You made me sad, which is saying a lot since I have no soul.

Avalon? Like from the King Arthur stories? I felt that Rattle realizing he (she??) was dead moved very quickly. The realization was just sort of... there, with not much to support it. I also felt that the episode jumped pace and moved faster after s/he realized s/he was dead. Anyway, I was so sad to see Pebble in Acheron and I wonder what exactly Rattle had done? And why is Pebble in Acheron she seems sweet. Quick nitpick- Streak's dialogue didn't seem very natural... it seemed stilted, almost. Make sure that the dialogue flows well and you can actually imagine someone saying it.

You were nominated for best concept (by me :D), because I fricking love this idea. It's original and fresh- two dead cats? In heaven/hell? Trying to find their way to each other? Heck yeah. I've never seen anything like this done before and honestly, you need to continue this because it has so much potential. Well done, best of luck with WFWA!

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