Talk:We Are Young (Songfic)/@comment-5488450-20130326145925

Okiedokie; I've finally judged your entry and after much thought I've finally decided on your score. I'd like to first explain why you recieved this score, however:

Your spelling and grammar was pretty good-I spoted a few mistakes and there was a coupel words such as 'realized' that you continuiosly misspelled. Still, it didn't make it harder to understand the story so I didn't dock too many points for that. I really like the drama that was going on in this; and I feel as if you did a nice job keeping the story in line with the lyrics. There, were, however many confusing parts to it and a lot of questions you never answered. I got a little mixed up with the times of when things were happening and you never explained why Nightpaw's birth was a curse. Also, you mentioned Tigerstar at the beginning but I didn't see how that connected to the rest of the story. I also thought that Lilypaw and Nightpaw were a bit harsh; Lightpaw didn't even know that Nightpaw loved her and its not a crime to fall in love with someone else. If she had cheated onher that may have been a different story. I thought your word choice was pretty strong and your sentences had quite a nice flow. You did a great job using dialect and not actually saying the lyrics in your story.

So I finally decided to give you a 7.5 which is a great score, since I'm trying to give low scores-due to the fact that if I gave everyone tens deciding the winner would be hard xD