Talk:A Warrior's Heart/@comment-8248793-20150214231028

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This is a great start, and I'm excited to find out who's heart is the "warrior's", though I can guess it's Lightningpaw.

the prologue was a bit confusing, I wasn't sure who was talking and who had the kits. I figured it out afterwards, but the transition was a bit hard to understand. Though with a few revisions and a look over it you can fix that :)

Also, try to make a new paragraph everytime someone new talks. It makes it less confusing. I noticed that from chapter five, your words just clumped together. Perhaps you will go back and fix it, but it's hard to read with no spaces in between c:

Now to the story! It was definitely exciting, and I cannot wait to see what's going on in CliffClan, and what Lightning and Night will do! What is this 'storm' and why did Whisperpaw issue the prophecy instead of Robinbeak? I hope these questions will be answered later on :D

Good start, please do more! <3

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