Talk:A fallen rose/@comment-25250489-20150401043056

FUR FIREY'S CONTEST

This is a really interesting story! :D

I love how the kits in this story are full of energy and just act like kits. I can't make my kits in my fanfic act like actual kits, so I love it when I read other people's fanfics and the young cats act how they're supposed to!

And Blueclaw is so hilarious! I think it is so funny how he says completely random stuff that makes absolutely no sense.

There's a mistake that I've noticed though: It is stated more than once that the kittypet Cola is very young when Fallenpaw finds him. And yet, Fallenpaw's father says that he was a warrior a 'long time ago'. How is it possible that a fully grown cat can exist and still be 'very young' a long time later?

I've noticed that there were some spelling and grammer mistakes, would it be okay for me to edit those?

Other than that, this story is really interesting, please write more! :)