Talk:Wings/@comment-8248793-20150414040827

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I'll be honest, this is a really cute story! I just felt like it was a bit like a collab I did with Vee, though I'm sure you didn't mean to do so.

Dreampaw is really adorable, and I wish ThunderClan wouldn't be so cruel to her. I'm so really thankful you gave her a decent mentor, because honestly it's a bit overused with like an unlucky cat being scorned and getting a bad mentor and all that. I don't really enjoy reading a story in which one cat just gets ALL the bad luck.

You have a great way of writing; you really draw in th readers with your description and quick pace. Even though it seems slow, it actually goes rather fast and keeps us on our toes for more.

I love the character development, like Ambersky's personality? Perfect. Though I felt like you could give more of the ThunderClan cats background and different personalities. Most of them were the same, like all the cats hating on Dreampaw? There were too many that just showed that alone.

Also, I'm not sure if this is a plot for later on, but I feel as though Skyheart isn't included too much. She is Dreampaw's real mother after all, and I feel as though you just dropped her out of the story without letting her show much. idk, maybe you'll add her in later.

Overall, great story, I await for more :)

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