Talk:Would You Die for Me?/@comment-5342796-20160330015105



First off, I love the title of this 'fic. I know the forbidden romance thing is used a lot in Warriors 'fics, but the title is super intense and gives me the feeling that there's a lot more to this story than most.

This is a good start! You introduced a couple characters -- I'm eager to see more of the apprentices, especially obnoxious Adderpaw -- and Darkember, who I think I'll grow to like as a main character quite well c: You're a really good writer :O Seriously, props; you have great control over your language and don't have those pesky grammar mistakes/redundancies that take away from the story for the reader.

Would you like me to try to fix the coding at the most recent chapter? It'd be no problem if you gave me permission to edit the story; I could make it so the words are normally spaced out.

Awesome job! I can't wait for more c:

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