Talk:My Dirty Little Secret/@comment-28076378-20170611231508

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So I loved the first DLS, so I had to read this as soon as possible; drop everything i'm doing, throw it in the trash and burn it.

The prologue was interesting - and description beautiful! I particularlly liked how you said how everything looked alive despite Seedwhisker's unfortante situation.

I love Brownfire and Brindlefrost's relationship. I bet they would have been mates one day. also Ashenblaze is life.

The Clan's reaction to Seedwhisker's death was realistic; you can kinda feel their panic and horror. I wonder who killed Seedwhisker... *coughiwonderiftherellbeatwistcough*

It was a great thing Brindlefrost did when she said she'd become medicine cat. She threw away her warrior training - the very day she was made a warrior, and perhaps a future relationship with Brownfire for her Clan. She might regret it later but know she did the right thing.

And Brownfire. I really like his character! He reminds me of Graystripe. But if this will be anything like the first verson of DLS I know I'll grow to hate him, haha

I noticed a couple of spelling errors so here we go:

"With a sigh, Brindlepaw stood, shaking dry miss from her pelt."

"I was having and amazing dream. You and I were -"

This is a great story so far and I'm excited to finish it, keep it up!!

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