Talk:Violet Dusks/@comment-28076378-20170124154635

I've only read chapter one, and it was awesome!

Spoilers

I like Rabbitpaw... she doesn't love the shower of constant attention, but at the same time doesn't want to lose any of her poplularity. She seems pretty smart too.

I don't like Dustybrook so far. He's pretty annoying. But i like the other three apprentices, my favorite being Gorsepaw.

I really want to smack Dustybrook after he saves the apprentices from drowning. For one, can Rabbitpaw even swim? Does he expect her to jump into the stream and magiclly know what to do? If she did, she'd just end up like the others. I can't really say much to defend Rabbit about the branch. She could have jumped onto it. But I can't be mad at her as well, she was scared.

The part where the apprentices were arguing who Rabbitpaw likes more was funny and adorable too.

I wonder what the prophecy/omen was... I hope it's not like a Tigerstar sort of thing, with Rabbitpaw being Tigerstar in this case.

I did notice some errors, but they're pretty easy fixes. A few times there is a space between 'Rabbit' and 'paw'. And then after Gorsepaw won the battle with Rabbitpaw, ''Mintpaw didn't even glance at her. She was too busy talking to Mintpaw. ''I think you meant Mint was talking to Mist.

But anyway, this was a great story, I'll be reading the rest!

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