Talk:The Tribe of the Hawks Wing/@comment-24519368-20170417175043

Isn't Snowkit supposed to be deaf?

Anyway, I think you should vary the way you describe your characters, instead of using the formula of "so-and-so was a bla bla bla she/tom with (insert colour here) eyes and -extra details-. It's repetitive formula which disrupts the story's flow and gets boring reeeal quick.

I'll rewrite a passage for you in a reply as an example, let me choose a passage real quick...