Talk:Permanent/@comment-8248793-20130819164252

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I love this all.

Written in Ink: THe creativity of this part was very good. Pebblepaw's death made everything twist and turn, wretching our hearts. (good way to catch attention) And you kept me reading for the whole thing.

Written in Stone: Graypaw and Smokepaw are a cute couple, though I ship RedXSmoke. :3 But Smokepaw, his feelings are so deep, it almost made me cry when Graypaw was taken. (In this section or the next)

Written in Fire: Poor Graypaw and Smokehaze. I almost thought Redfur was going to get captured instead. That would have been intersting. xD Though I like your idea of mixing them together. Putting some fromInk to Fire and back, it can make them form together.

So I hope you finish this, cause it's very exciting. <3

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