Talk:Peach Colored Moon/@comment-5488450-20121220182535

Incredible. Absolutely incredible. Good job Feather I know this will score high in Rainy’s contest :D

-I loved how Eclipsepaw chooses Peachpaw over Lightpaw. Its almost like those princess tales where the prince likes the humble younger sister more than the stuck up older one, only even more pawesome -I also liked the unknown past you gave Eclipsepaw which we never learn but we know is very dark. Nurture and Nature are the two things that supposedly affect who we are and these two clash epically for Eclipsepaw giving a very interesting environment to the reader.

-Finally I thought making Peachpaw kill a cat was a little too cool. LOL, it is so unlike her, and yet she seems to make the sacrifice at the moment. She kills her clan mate so that she can live with her mate. It makes me wonder what might have happened if she had decided that it wasn’t worth taking Lightpaw’s life.

-The thing I thought could be improved was maybe making what you say a little less subtle. Like instead of just coming out and explaining that Peachpaw is this and that, sneak it into the story so you sort of learn it while you are reading instead of just having it thrown at you, which makes it a little harder to enjoy.

I loved this Feather, okay? I absolutely loved this <3