Talk:A Cruel Leader to Skyclan/@comment-1956227-20160829232401

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Wow, I like the concept of the story, where a deputy decides to usurp the current leader and becomes extremely harsh. The changes made in Skyclan are definately intriguing, if terribly cruel, but I guess that's why it's called A Cruel Leader to Skyclan.

Now for some constructiveness on my part, but mostly me being picky

I noticed a lot of run on sentences and grammatical errors, for example, in the third to last sentence in the last chapte,r you randomly capitalized while in the middle of the sentence :p, small stuff like that.

Other than that though, this is a very interesting concept for a story, and I don't really see stories about Skyclan, so it's new territory (haha) to me, and I can't wait to read more!