Talk:Pirouette/@comment-7235369-20170705133120

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Wow! I'm really enjoying this story so far- I've always been a sucker for stories that have a heirarchy and different classes that are treated poorly/with respect, depending on which class it is. The prologue and vague references to the Etoiles leaves me wondering who they are- are they a rebellion or former Tribe members gone rogue... Why do they have wings and no other cats do? A they just, as their name suggests, the stars?

I also adore the names you've given the characters. They're obviously not Clan cats but them being a tribe makes me wonder if they have full names rather than just a name like Artemis or Nix. Nevertheless, they're unique and I like them. And speaking of Nix, I wonder what she was on about when she was talking about the Etoiles. There's no mention of her in the prologue so I wonder if she was just bluffing when she said she knew where they were.

And awww, I like how Artemis wants to protect the baby bird from the rest of her Clanmates. Kind of odd when she's starving, but I find it cute.

Really good job so far! I haven't noticed any mistakes in the writing so far, but then again I am hopped up on antiboitics and tired. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this!

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