Talk:Permanent/@comment-25531638-20130908232241

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Just for Written in Ink: If I could write something this good, I would be so happy :)

This story was so original. Even though it's a fanfic, no one has written anything like it.

The beginning instantly pulled me in. I thought that it was so amazing, the way you did that, and the chanting of rebellion was a nice touch, and it really cements in the theme. Another good addition to the story was how Redpaw decided not to stay beside Riverleap because of the Counters. It shows that she isn't too much of a Mary Sue, which was good.

The battle was great, and Pebblepaw's death scene... it was utterly heart-wrenching. I could definitely feel Redpaw's emotion there.

It's kind of cool how Redpaw switches to the Fire Division with some other cats, instead of just staying in InkClan. Makes the story more interesting.

The end was um... *is running out of words for awesome* mind blowing! It warns of more adventure to come :D

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