Talk:Famine/@comment-8248793-20130817195547

Okay, so I'm really sorry, I haven't ever finished reading this, but now I have.

SPOILER ALERT

Um, one time in the last chapter, Brighty wrote "mouse" instead of "moss".

There was another mistake, but I forgot it.

Rainy: I love the language and the flow of your words, the description was very nice

Robo: Heartbreak was a brave cat, but with no feelings, that was a very creative chapter of yours.

Stormy: You showed the feelings of Night... very well. His hate and the battle was very descriptive.

Darky: Pinepelt's loneliness and feelings came out very well. He showed dislike for the Clans and Council.

Brighty: The flashback was very well written, and it seems that the Clan seems to hate her, kinda. Cause she did hurt Fishtail. Though you never explained what happened when he walked over.

Overall, I thought this a was a great collab so far. :D

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