Talk:Dewdrop's Revenge/@comment-29927652-20170131030958

Why would her leader tell her to leave if she hadn't done anything...? This is a bit confusing. Also, in some cases it is better to reveal than explain. For example, you wrote, Her leader, Fallenstar, had commanded her to leave! You could have put, Fallenstar's words echoed in her head. "Dewdrop, we know what you did. Now leave at once!" Fury blared in her heart.

Just some constructive criticism.