Talk:A Paw In Two Worlds/@comment-43345842-20190807203318

'''Long-ish comment inbound! (Written as I read through each chapter) '''

The prologue (part I) is very emotive. You're very goot at breathing life into your characters. They feel real and expressive, which makes the story flow better and easier to read. the clan cats have piqued my interest; they're a bit less friendly than the ones we're used to in the actual Warriors books.

The beginning of part II of the prologue hit me hard. Those clan cats really are ruthless, I'm a little bit shocked, and I don't usually feel emotions when reading fiction! I feel like Ari's father is going to be an important thing in the story in the future. I knew it! That prologue was also a bit of a shock, I didn't expect Ari's father to show up so soon. I'm really excited for future chapters now!!!

I really love Mist. She's bubbly, helpful and approachable, and I look forward to seeing more of her. I just don't hope she dies! I think Ari's character development is her learning to trust people and learning to (platonically) love again and to live with other cats and overcoming her grief through her bonds with others. Also I have a suspicion Amber will develop a villainous role in the story???

This is excellent so far, I can't wait for future chapters! :)