Talk:Darkness and Daylight/@comment-17759525-20151117150007

Can I make a suggestion here...?

What you have sounds pretty interesting so far, but slow it down a little. Jumping into the action can be good, but take the time to give a few more descriptions, let us get to know the characters a little before this cat's freaking out about the Dark Forest and knocking himself unconscious on a branch.

Try to add a bit more mystery, perhaps - you could show him waking up to find blood on his claws, for instance. At the very least, don't have him jump to drastic conclusions and knock himself out in the very first chapter! It just seems a bit abrupt, sudden, odd, etc.

I dunno. 'Course you don't have to take any of my suggestions here, but I think it'd make for a better story if you at least considered it :)