Talk:Breeze of Water/@comment-5137480-20130607114256

Okay. I'll at least try to do a big comment.


 * You spelled Clan as cCan a lot.


 * You could give the reader a bit more detail.


 * It has a beautiful ending which is really hard to expect.


 * When Mintpaw betrays the Clan... I don't think cats know what shows are. xD

Okay then. Done(ish?). I just realized this is for my contest. Roar.