Talk:Warrior/@comment-5342796-20151101164210



FOUR

Whoa whoa whoa. Your writing is so impactful and emotional aND I JUST

One thing I'd like to point out that I really like is the intensity. All these cats are such strong personalities, and you match their intensity and seriousness and attitudes perfectly. You can see the training and conditioning in all the words they say and the moves they make, especially the fly warriors. It makes you wonder what they'd be like if they ever fully let their guard down and trusted more than what they do right now.

I'm not really sure what's going on with Arctic and Ravenflight. Do they know each other better than we think? Am I missing something? It just seems that they'd have a stronger rivalry; I'm not sure why Ravenflight is so concerned with trusting him, or why he cares. Interested to see where that leads.

Sorry this was short bUT THE ENDING TO THIS PART IS SUPER INTENSE AND I HAVE TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS NEXT

FIVE

HA I KNEW IT. ALL THAT STUFF ABOUT WANTING HER TO TRUST HIM MAKES NO SENSE. ARCTIC YOU STUPID TRAITOR. Although in retrospect, what he does makes sense from his point of view.

I feel really bad for Aspenpelt; he's so sweet. A lot of Ravenflight's fly warriors are, despite the fact that their lives are all almost as hard or harder than her life has been. Wish she would let them in a little more :c Though after what Arctic just pulled, it's obvious why she doesn't.

Aww, I can't wait till the kits are born, though it obviously complicates things for the patrol. I feel like they'll give a bit of hope that someday things will be better and innocence can still exist in a world like this, even for the briefest of moments.

ANOTHER SUPER INTENSE CLIFFHANGER ENDING. WOW, FIREY, WOW. WRITE MORE ASAP! I LOVE THIS