Talk:Brightpaw's Doubt/@comment-32946794-20170810065130

I have some critisism for this.

So far it's okay! It sounds likely that an extremely overprotective mother like Brightpaw's would make her wait longer and even give her to a medicine cat.

However, two things don't really fit. First of all, the names of Prettykit and Perfectkit. I understand that she's trying to give them the best names, but I think that Prettykit and Perfectkit are a little too much?? For example she could give them pretty names, like Shinekit or something?

Second, I don't think it's realistic to portray Brightpaw's mother as a potentional murderer. I see that you're going for it with the plot and that she's really overprotective, but she doesn't seem that insane. And if she were insane, I thik other signs of it would show and others would recognize it in time? If she were that dangerous I don't think she'd even be in the Clan.

Other than that, this story seems cool! Good luck with it!