Talk:The beginning of ElectricClan/@comment-26184789-20150429010959

Good start, but I think you should start a new line when a different character speaks and not keep it in one big paragraph like this:

"I like cheese." Bob said.

"So do I!" Bobby yelled happily.

It makes it more open and you can see errors clearer instead of confusing your poor eyes who have to read it 3 times over to look for errors.

Looking forward to this!