Talk:Honeywish and the 4 stars/@comment-28057208-20160921091059

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PROLOGUE:

I like it! Very interesting and introduces the characters quickly and easily, though it's a little cliche for a prologue, I'll let it slide.

There were a couple of things that could be changed though, however.

Poppypelt was sitting in agony, her tail twitching.

Cats don't sit down when they're in labour, they have to lie down or there will be complications in birthing. Just my nitpicky stuff, y'know.

And the whole 'Honeykit was very caring and sweet'. How so? How is her personality that obvious when she was just born? She could've had a sweet face, but how would her characteristics show when she is blind and deaf and just brought into the world. Just my nitpicky stuff.

And I'm a bit too lazy to do the chapter one and two stuff... But they are a bit short. You don't have to lengthen them of course, author's decision :)

ALSO could I draw Honeykit?