Talk:Warriors: The New Era/@comment-5488450-20130725204008

This is really cool! I'm assuming this is one of your first fanfictions and that's really impressive :) Like the descriptions, the dialect, the suspense was all really good, and it's definetly something to be proud of. You can make it a long way if you continue to keep up writing like this :)

Some of the things I enjoyed were the charachters for sure. I enjoyed seeing some Bramblestar and Squirrelflight, and Mosskit sounds really cute too, as does Dewpaw :33 You did a good job describing the actions and the prologue had just the perfect touch of mysterious!

Some things I could point out would be to start a new paragraph everytime someone new speaks, which really helps readers from getting confused, and to describe the settings a bit more perhaphs. I'd like to know more about what their surrondings look like, even if we all are familiar with ThunderClan.

Anyways, this seems great and I really hope you don't ditch this!