Talk:Two Birds/@comment-8248793-20170517004233

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The prologue really gave me feels on how close Talonkit and Creekkit were, especially since you portrayed the protectiveness Talonkit felt towards her brother. I liked the them on how the sister was the protector of her smaller brother and how family really ties into the story (seeing from the little preview we get at the top).

I really love the connections you make with all the other cats, how Talonkit may be the favorite among others, but she seems to always choose Creekkit over others. I'm not one for narrators who suffer the brunt of abuse or being shunned completely by all, but I'll admit I have to take a liking in Creekkit because of his relations with his sister. But I wouldn't keep the weak kit act for too long because it could become overused and make Creekkit a flat character if you use it as a cushion and an excuse.

I'm excited to see your story develop, however, as there's only two chapters and there is obviously a lot more to go considering they are still kits and the preview is when they are warriors (and have been warriors for awhile I assume). I also know I should be able to get to see a lot of development between the two main characters, as Creekkit does not sound like the warrior he is up on the top while Talonkit does seem to mirror that a little bit.

Good story overall! I'm sorry there's not much analysis as you only had three chapters down for me to read. If I have time, I'll keep up with this story and give you more feedback when I can!

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