Talk:Flamekit's Prophecy - The Journey/@comment-33604303-20180106022503

Very nice but...

1. Too fast!

2. How is Autumnleaf a name? Cats don't know what autumn is.

3.Flamepaw became a warrior too soon.

4. Flamekit-paw-pelt. The title is Flamekit, and the character is a kit for about ten seconds.

5. One nip on the neck, bam-the Clan leader's dead, killed by a puny APPRENTICE. Strong app, or weak leader? Hmm...XD

6. Lily. Not Lilly. Cats only know what Lily is.

7. If there's a cat named after the Clan, that's a pewtty dishonorable name, unless it is the Clan;s founder, as in my case.

8. Minor spelling/grammar errors but feh, no biggie.

Sorry if I sound rude, but I am a critic. Oh, and did I mention spoilers? :P