Talk:Burn/@comment-8248793-20160430222808

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Oh man so much has happened in the five chapters that are up. I like the relationship you show between Grayson, Tyson, and Ginger. I don't know much about Kenna since we only got half a chapter of her and I've commented on that part already. But the way Ginger handled Grayson's treachery is very well written because it's realistic and it makes us see that this could techinically happen in a real-life situation.

I didn't expect Grayson to be part of the Shield. It completely caught me off guard, and I actually thought the Scepter would be proved guilty about Warren's death, but I didn't think Grayson would end up being part of the rebel society. I have the feeling neither group is going to be the right group for the main cast, but I may be wrong.

This took an interesting turn. I'm assuming Gertie could be a Shield member, or a Sceptor spy in diguise, spying on Kenna's rescuer friends. I find the fox incident suspicious, and knowing you, that was placed in there on purpose, more than just for Gertie to have a save home to live in.

I'm super interested in the rest of the story because there are so many mysteries and I know I'll love this story! Keep going :) (sorry for not commenting sooner!!)

<3

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