Talk:Leaf Falls/@comment-7213668-20130319020340

I spotted 2 Typos:

"He soon, however, found that being an apprentice really wasn't that bad and he didn't really mind mind it at all.

Should be:

"He soon, however, found that being an apprentice really wasn't that bad and he didn't really mind it at all."

This isn't a error, but it sounds weird imho. Its a suggestion, you don't have to use it through (:

"When Leafpaw woke up there was a lot of commotion stirring in camp, and he was quick to jump to his paws and dash out of his den to see what was going on."

Would sound better like this imo:

"When Leafpaw woke up there was a lot of commotion stirring in camp. He quickly jumped to his paws and dashed out of his den to see what was going on. "

Also, even if you don't use my suggestion, it should be dashed, not dash.