Talk:Wrath/@comment-26184789-20150314023408

Very nice I reccomend that you put more pressure down in Volepaw so we can kind of feel his pain. Like this

I hated Brokenstar so much. He is just a cruel cat. How could he have possibly come to leadership? His hatred runs through him so thickly its almost like blood!

Add more detail and hatred if thats what hes really feeling

Otherwise really good! No spelling errors and good details at the start, must say :)