Talk:Withered/@comment-26285531-20151230232309



eee you're done already and I haven't even started on Arcane. e.e

I've finished it, and it was really good! Although next time I would discourage copying from Docs, because its default format doesn't mix well with Wikia's and kind of generates weird spacesand such.

I saw you kept the same format, but you've incorporated it so it fits well with the way you write. Kudos for that! You illustrate Autumnbreeze's feeling and pain at "losing" her friends really well. I think in the first part of One, you cut off Autumnbreeze, and in Two said Owlmoon talks to Owlmoon (though if it's anything like Mirrored, that's completely possible :P)

I'm already starting to think of Owlmoon as really irrational and untrustworthy, the way she ignores Autumnbreeze like that and then goes off to talk about her behind her back. But all the same I felt bad when Autumnbreeze runs away as Owlmoon tries to make things better and talk to her.

(Piper - Pipes - from Heros of Olympus??) The ending was perfect though! I thought this was kinda short, and I'd love for it to be longer, but great job!

