Talk:Starlight, Heartlight/@comment-8248793-20130701151409

Dude, Gingerstripe! I really love this story! It was so sad!

But you had a lot of grammar mistakes, and I am not sure if you knew that. I love how you had a group of boys together but with one girl. But there was something wrong. You said that Blackfoot had always loved Fawnfire and had showed his love, but there was nothing explaining that in the story.

I also loved the poem in the back. Or song. It rhymed perfectly and matched the story!

I don't know why I am helping you with this, because you are my contestant, but I just love the story and want you to make it een better!

Good luck in the contest!