Talk:Fearless (Songfic)/@comment-26432133-20170318210056

This is really nice!!

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The first thing that strikes me is that the apprentices are really well written and not really young childlike as the Erins like to present them. I see apprentices at the elementary to halfway through high school age. Typically, an apprentice seems like a five-y/o or a 17-y/o, so it's nice to see some apprentices who come off as middle schoolers.

Brackenpaw and Cherrypaw are interesting. I like the not-cliche INSTANT LOVE!!1!1!11 and how I'm kinda shipping them because of their experiences together rather than the fact that one's a male and one's a female.

I like this storm! RiverClan, the typically fat Clan, is having a lot of trouble, and I love that little mention about negotiating with ThunderClan because it makes the Clans more interactive in a single sentence.

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Sorry this comment is kinda short, but overall this is a great story once again, Fox!! :D