Talk:Sky Guardians/@comment-17759525-20160305025245

SPOILERS

PROLOGUE

This seems like a very interesting idea so far! I will say, though, that the prologue does a bit too much explaining for something right off the bat. That is, it tells the readers exactly what the Maze Challenge is, but nothing important actually happens in this prologue. Consider adding to it, making it longer, etc.

CHAPTER ONE

The mystery surrounding this challenge is evident even in Fallen Clouds's everyday life. This really is a clever idea. (Though I can't help but think that if the cats who didn't win were still alive, they'd be able to leave. They'd be seen again. But maybe that's just me - and there's probably still something here that hasn't been revealed yet to the readers.

The end of this chapter is a bit... ominous?... as well. "Silently. Silent as a shadow." Is that significant to the plot in any way...?

CHAPTER TWO

"I wasn't going to compete. At least, I didn't plan to." Haha. That means Fallen Clouds will probably end up competing.

Does Skyteller know something no one else does...? He calls it a puzzle. He must know something... hm.

There's not a whole lot here to comment on so far, but it does sound like an interesting idea! Written well, this could turn out to be a really good story. You have a great start here. Keep up the good work.