Talk:On the Side/@comment-15560748-20150818163358

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I' definitely following this <3

I like how you portray Storm, and how the flashbacks were from her eyes. The flashbacks alos helped with us knowing what had happened.

I think Shade is a bit out of control, because she just left her sister to fend for herself, even though she's vert caring and kind. The grief seems too much for her.

Great job!

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