Talk:Hear Me (Night Visons songfic)/@comment-8248793-20141018141236

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This was probably the best of all of these! You're starting to lose the rushedness of your writing, and that's good!

MossXMartha is utterly amazing, I ship it so much, but I know Moss is going to die ;( I wish Flame didn't change so much, she was like my fav charrie until she became some kind of monster she is now.

I also think that you still should have elaborated at some parts, like this plan for leaving, his sorrow of not being able to leave, etc.

Elyssa is probably my fav charrie rn, excluding Moss and Martha. But like before, I felt as though she was ranomly deposited in the story so Moss could escape. I thought you should have used Little Snowflake, since we already knew her.

This was still good! I loved it :)

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