Talk:Bellicosity/@comment-8248793-20170630191459

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Ooh okay! I can totally see this fitting your prompt and I love your cover btw <3 the quote it features gives me nervous feelings for what they could be fighting and what the answer would be. (I totally imagined writing a scene where it was like "Would you fight for me?" and the answer would be "no")

I love the fact that you included a feature of love within the first part to alleviate the terror Fireflower gives when she mentions the prophecy. Ivystar and Dustclaw seem very cute btw and I admire her leadership character, although she was definitely hasty (obv a feature of her flawed personality, but it's a good trait! I'm glad you made your characters flawed).

So part one was a great eye-opener to the plot, and I honestly enjoyed the brief parts/chapters you included, to make it seem like we're building up to something important and you're not dragging parts longer than they should be. Concise and to the point, your writing is definitely pulling me in!

Part two made me feel a little bit sorry for Swiftflight because I know you and I know you'll find a way to twist this story into your own advantage and add in a plot that nobody will see coming. I'm getting the feeling Dawnpaw will get to keep her promise but perhaps cause the ruination of BreezeClan because Swiftflight will save the Clan (or should have).

Part three introduced cranky Hareleap who btw, I love. I've always enjoyed your characters because you give them such unique personalites and qualities that you don't normally see mixed into cats. I'm definitely worried about the aches he feel because you're never one to include a detail without implying something else. I'm also guessing by the lack of Cypressheart, the other character you were given, we are still building up to the whole "villain coming out" part. Which again, I love that you've kept your chapters short because it honestly feels like we're beating through BreezeClan's oncoming destruction.

Great start!! I'm glad I read this :) <3 You know I'll keep up and I already know I'm going to enjoy every bit of it <33

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