Talk:Jayfeather and Briarlight/@comment-38835407-20200101172225

In my opinion, I love the plot and the direction it's heading in, although I feel as if the story is too rushed and I think, fact check me on this, "love" cannot be a prefix? Anyways, I feel as though you should dive in deeper and develop their characters more, show how they fell in love with each other, how Jayfeather's personality changed over the course of their love etc. You can also lengthen out the time, make the duration of each event longer so you can develop, making it not rushed. I hope this helps :)