Talk:Seeking Revenge/@comment-8248793-20130910033616

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And the amazing story has been unraveled.I love the actions, the gory described in this story. It is rather long, though I never knew they were the kittypets who attacked ShadowClan. very interesting topic.

Susan is a vicious cat. Woah, she killed her own brother. The way she reacted to it was a little rough, maybe you should make her feel a little more ashamed. Sure, she was afterwards, but maybe when she found out, she could have felt horror and shame crawl up her pelt.

And the last part. Did she order her brother to leave? Because he killed Scorch? I'm wondering about that, since you never really explained that. Maybe have a last part, like an Author's Note, telling us about the later lives of our characters. Did Shadw go to StarClan? What happened to Jacques? What did Susan do for her life?

Other than that, I liked the development of the story, and how the anger and hatred had flowed through the two of them. I could feel every emotion within them, because you descrbed them very well.

I really liked this story Stormy :D

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