Talk:Mapleshade's revenge/@comment-5342796-20140127151209



Wow, is this one of your first fanfics? If so, and even if not, this is amazing. At the title, I was expecting it to take an entirely different course, but I see you're setting up Mapleshade's story from the very beginning--and you're doing an excellent job of it, at that.

The prologue was intriguing, and the scene with Lightningstar dying had the potential to be really confusing for the readers, but you conveyed all the action with a clear & descriptive tone that helped us keep everything straight.

And the first chapter ascertained the fact that I love this story; Maplekit, as Red pointed out below, is the perfect portrayal of kit-like innocence & curiosity and everything else so important to presenting a character so young. Your scenery and setting descriptions are really good, and thank you for making the other characters realistic; I feel like a lot of cats are made to hate Mapleshade for no reason in fanfics, and that's not really an accurate description of how a Clan works--this is a refreshing perspective on what her kit life must've been like.

For an introduction, this is seriously amazing, and we haven't even gotten to the main plot yet. I can't wait for more, and keep up the great work!

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