Talk:Thunder Rising/@comment-5342796-20151029030043



'Scuse me ma'am you're under arrest, your writing is too good and it's not fair to anyone else, how could you be so inconsiderate.

BUT SRSLY NINJA UGH THIS IS SO SO SO GOOD. It's written so well that you don't even remember that it's a huge deviation from the original Warriors arc and that it's missing one of its central characters? You do a great job of ushering in Ravenpaw's POV without being like "HEY RAVENPAW'S THE NEW FIREPAW". Like no, you keep to his personality, you just have your own take on how events would unfold--and you write it so well that it's perfectly plausible. There's a lot of suspense piled on, because we know what happens in the original arc, but with so many factors changed, we have no idea what the consequences of Redtail's death and Tigerheart's anger and ambition will be.

I love how you take the time to point out underrated relationships between underrated cats, to show the good and bad in every one of them. Mischief's POV is great; her youth gives her a unique perspective. Badgerfang's death was so sad, the poor little guy :c I remember how heartbreaking that was the first time reading Warriors.

Nice job slipping in the stuff about Brokenstar often sneaking out with his cronies and discussing stuff with them. Mischief's very observant; it fits with her personality perfectly.

Your entire story is really well written and your perspectives and sides of the story mesh well and compliment each other. Love you so much, this is amazing, keep up the great work <3333

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