Talk:A fallen rose/@comment-25630395-20141116083817

( I am refraining myself from typing Honorable Chair, Fellow Delegates. MUN has very longlasting effects XD)

Overall, good story.

Plot is interesting, I think that Cola is going to come back soon! Some humor (Blueclaw, I'm glad we created him) which is good. You have some grammer issues, like some missing commas and run-on sentences. If you like, I can fix that for you. Also, some words are not correct ( you said dye instead of die once). But again, overall great story! 7/10!

P.S- before adding any Blazepaw parts, talk to me.