Talk:Holding it Within/@comment-5019333-20141012192948

Follows all guidelines.

Grammar, Spelling: 3/3 (12%)

There were no grammar or spelling errors.

Uniqueness: 4/5 (16%)

''The reason I have taken off a point is because medicine cat X warrior settings are used frequently. The way you potrayed Cinderpaw, however, was very interesting.''

Creativity: 8/10 (32%)

''I never really thought about Cinderpaw's feelings for Firestar, so this was interesting for me to read. The reason why your score is has been lowered by two points is reasoned above. ''

Flow: 2.75/3 (11%)

''The ABAB pattern flowed along nicely. Your first stanza only bothered me, because the difference between the amount of syllables in "I really did" and "That feelings were well hid" was a little too much in my opinion because of the four syllable line in between.''

Idea: 3/4 (12%)

''What I understood from your poem was Cinderpaw's feelings about Fireheart. She had to hold her love within''. ''If her feelings were well hid, then how did she not know how to "hold her love within?" ''

I got confused, because I feel parts of your poem should've affected other parts of your poem.

Total: 20.75/25 (81%)

Overall, I really liked your poem Firey. It potrayed Cinderpaw's feelings very well. You write with great voice and details!

I will be grading Clever's poem today or tomorrow.