Talk:Assassin/@comment-8830647-20150715204202

This is interesting and an original idea. I like how Pinepaw's jealousy overruled his family loyalty.

A small error: brake should be break in '' "he likes me... but I don't, then again, how can I brake his heart?"''

I would like to see how Pinepaw would react about his half-blind sister becoming leader over him... and whether or not she names him deputy

In short, other than the minor spelling errors, I enjoyed this plotline and am eager to read more about it. :)