Talk:Plenette Aggressive ways/@comment-27704197-20160131213433

Original idea but you need to fix the grammar. And start a new line when the character speaks. You need punctuation when they speak too. Ex:

"I want a piece of cake!" Rachel whined at Frost.

"Too bad! We are out of cake!" Frost replied back.

Please also show a little more love between The mother's and kits. It seems as if they really don't care what happens to each other. Show them binding or something.