Talk:INSaNiTY/@comment-1956227-20170217234108

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All right, where to start?

For all the good parts, I've actually never heard of this song before, but it definately fits with the overall theme of what you're trying to get across. I don't think this is finished yet so I gotta wait for more to get the full thing xD

For constructive criticism... I don't know if there's a main part to this, but maybe an explanation of why her father acts like this towards his own daughter? (Knid of like an evil in an evil? Hmm... If it's explained in the main story, ignore this point.

"Ever since my father to lead" - This sentence doesn't complete in my brain, maybe "Ever since my father became leader?"O

Overall, really good witha  few edits here and there! Good luck in the contest!

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