Talk:Monster (Songfic)/@comment-8248793-20150220025952

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Wow Ripplepaw seriously needs to cool down xD It's kinda unrealistic for an apprentice to feel that hatred, but I'm one to talk (cough SA oops). So even though it doesn't seem right, I'm okay with it because it really brings out the emotion in this story.

The way you present Ripplepaw really catches the eye, it shows that Ripplepaw is weak, yet you later on prove that she's certainly capable of doing much harsher things.

I'm really sad that you killed Sparkkit, she was my fav <3 She was so fab xD Sunpaw kinda deserved it, though I'm confused on how Sleetfur understood Ripplepaw's actions. I also got a bit confused on why Sleetfur or Night...(Ripplepaw's mentor) didn't just tell Fernstar Ripplepaw killed Sunpaw.

Also, why was Sleetfur framed?

I'm curious to see where you go with the story, and what will happen to Shadepaw and Sparrowpaw. I also hope to see more of Ripplepaw's past and why she has a foster mother and what happened to the rest of her family. I also want to know why the four of them hated her from the start (well besides Sparkkit)

Good songfic so far, please do more, Vee! :)

<3

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