Talk:Firestar(Part 1)/@comment-4751506-20130114130123

In an effort to beat out Robo's superb comments (and probably fail), and because you are a lovely author, this comment is going to (hopefully) be long. :)

In the first portion (dunno where you'd categorize that, specifically), but you were speaking about Brookfall in the third persson...yeah, 'Brookfall took a step back,' but in the same paragraph you switched back to her first person view. I was just curious if that was intentional or not.

I do however, disagree with Robo on the portion about simple plans. I think the repetitive part makes it better, because you're adding more force to it. I dunno, Robo sounds like such an expert that I'm scared to contradict her, but that's just what I think. xD

I also really loved that end part (also like Robo said. Man, I'm just a copy cat [lol see what I did there] today!). 'I'm just a she-cat from the farthest reaches of WaterClan territory...' And then you proceeded to say what she didn't have, which made me really surprised because all the while she was keeping up such a strong facade, and this is where she sounded kinda like a Twoleg girl (being all insecure)! I did notice you didn't include Shadowsong in that list? (she's perfect! D:)

I still loved it though. :3

(and my comment hasn't beaten Robo's, but that does not measure my love for you or this story, so. <3)