Talk:Echo in the Darkness/@comment-44489924-20200131002655

I really love it! You obviously have a lot of talent. The start was especially good, I loved the phrase, 'A cold wind sliced through the ThunderClan camp as Moonstar padded from his den. Not being able to sleep was one of the many things that plagued him these past moons.' The title is also eye catching.

I noticed a few grammar errors though, once you spelt Clan like 'clan,' when it should have a capital. 'right in the middle of the coldest season but kits were kits, no matter when they were born, and at the moment ThunderClan needed them.' could have a comma added in, so it would read 'right in the middle of the coldest season, but kits were kits, no matter when they were born, and at that moment ThunderClan needed them.

All in all, I love it so far, and will be reading it eagerly each time you update it!