Talk:Permanent/@comment-5342796-20130726223743

Spoiler Alert ;)

It just keeps getting better and better!!! :O

This chapter was even more amazing than the prologue, which I didn't even think was possible! It's official, I adore Redpaw. <3 She's just amazing. And I have another thing noncliche thing you did that I feel compelled to point out, because I really like it. I like that you already have a romance between Pebblepaw and Redpaw. In-story falling-in-love type romances are cute, but they happen everywhere. It's nice to have an established couple already, though if I'm not mistaken there might be some drama in for PebbleXRed.(Maybe? X3)

Another thing I found interesting was the aging in this - twelve moons is apprentice and 16 is warrior? Very interesting. :3 I like that though. It's a cool touch.

Now for the plot(I'm done rambling about useless things xD). Already, we can see the plot developing at a fast pace in this story, which is really good. Everything is well-written, and the descriptions, the explanations, all go hand-in-hand perfectly. Riverleap/Riverstar/Inkstar's announcement that the Ink Division was now InkClan was really thrilling, especially with the whole "Re-be-lion!" chant you have going in this. :)

Oh, one more little thing I really like is the 3 liddle triangles you have when you start a new section thingy. They're so cool.

Loving this so far Robo, and I'm seriously beyond excited to see where you're going to take this series. :D