Talk:Demons (Night Visions songfic)/@comment-7410018-20141025160642

Spoilers~

This one had a lot of potential in the plot, yet I felt it was really rushed. I think it's really out of character for Mosspaw to join the rogues. And the relationship between Flamegaze and Mosspaw is a bit unclear. Are they lovers? Or just close friends? If they are supposed to be lovers, then I feel it's a bit fast. I still ship them, but I feel like you could build up more anticipation.

A few of the scenes, especially when Flamegaze was telling her story, were a little bit fast. i thought that they could use a little bit more description.

But over all, this was good, and I'm going to read the next one.