Talk:Permanent/@comment-5342796-20130726192917

Wow. Just wow.

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Holy crap, that was one of the best prologues I've ever read in my life!

I already love Redpaw- she seems like such an awesome character. And the set up of the story was really, really cool. The way you brought everything together - Riverleap's very relatable grief, the cats who didn't care that Inkstar was dead and were ready for change, the stuff about Counters - was really amazing. And can I just say that I really appreciated the way that Redpaw left Riverleap to the Counters? Like, that sounds really mean, but I think you get my meaning. It shows she's not a perfect little she-cat already, which would be REALLY annoying. So I just wanted to say I liked that touch.

The background about what is going in in the divisions and stuff was really well-put and woven into the story well. I did detect a couple of grammar errors - maybe like two itty bitty minor things, which is no big deal at all. Overall, I really loved this. Looking forward to more. :D <3