Talk:Two Birds/@comment-26432133-20170712213010

wfwa judge's comment + commenting contest + wfwa qualifications for either stork or brams

if you can't tell, i'm mashing them all together TO GET STUFF DONE

(slash being lazy but whatever)

SPOILERS

AAAA CREEKPAW I LOVE YOU

I honestly love Talonpaw and Creekpaw almost equally. You set up how Talonkit/paw was at first only trying to protect and help Creekpaw awesomely. She's a really fiery cat, and I love her for that. I just like her.

As for being constructive, I spotted a few grammar mistakes here and there that could be fixed. Also, the chapters are very short, though I feel like this is a very rough first draft type of thing- I can easily see the spaces in between chapters being filled in. I do really like how what you've written of this story is only scenes that drive the story forward, so great job!

Since Creekfrost was nominated for Best Hero, I'll comment on that. I don't think enough of Two Birds has been written for him to actually rise to heroism xD. But the prologue thing at the top serves to fill in for that, and I really love how Creekfrost refuses to kill Talonfang because of how close they used to be and how they're siblings, and he's also been a hero and kicked her out. He seems to be a wonderfully promising hero!

Overall, I really love this story and I'll definitely be stalking it for more. Great job!