Talk:Warriors: The Legend of FireClan/@comment-24155647-20140413042548

SPOILER ALERT

I like what's going on so far, but it's similar to Into the Wild and I'm not sure if 'pilfered' is a word. And the text is quite squished up, so I suggest to begin a new paragraph whenever a new character speaks.

I'm interested to see more and there wasn't much to say because there wasn't much text here. I suggest working on descriptive language and more extra detail, but otherwise this could shape up to be a good story.