Talk:Big Brother: ThunderClan/Week One/@comment-25330180-20131111160039

Very good job! There is one mistake though

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Ashfur: Ow... my head!

(Squirrelflight is bending over Ferncloud)

Squirrelflight: Ferncloud? Are you ok?

Ferncloud: Wha...? Shrewpaw?

Squirrelflight: Who's that?

Daisy: For your information, Squirrelflihgt, Shrewpaw was Ferncloud's kit! Let me introuce you to housemate number EIGHT, ICECLOUD!

(Icecloud wanders on to the stage)

Daisy: Hi Icecloud!

Iceloud: (shyly) hello

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You misspelled Squirrelflight, it's fine though, and for a fanfic that long its good to have only 1 mistake!