Talk:Sweet Tangerine/@comment-15560748-20150904002424

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Wow, I thought this songfic was really good :)

Though the way you switched from future and present and stuff kinda confused me.

Maybe you should make the lyrics a different font, and those parts as italics?

I liked the imagery, and the emotion. I loved the way you portrayed Ashfur, just the way the Erins did, which was awesome.

It was nice to get some inside to it, because the authors never really explained much of Ashfur's feelings from Ashfur's point of view.

Over all, I though that this was really good for a first songfic.

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