Talk:The Story of Icewrath, Featherswirl, and Craneheart/@comment-5848758-20131124150034

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This has a really nice plot line! I love the kits-they're adorable. My favourite character is probably Icekit because I find him cool.

There is a lot.you could work on. Like everyone has said below, they are too young to be so serious about love. You could've started the fic when they were apprentices, it would be more realistic.

And find the names unrealistic. Cats don't know what electricity is or a crane for that matter.

I dislike Featherkit strongly. She's too Mary Sue. She isn't very likable-having so many potential mates is very unrealistic.

However I do like the basic plot, and I'd definitely read more :)