Talk:Enemies and Friends/@comment-24740423-20150816222659

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welll i'd like to mention this here sentence -- "Coming," a pretty-aren't they all?-she-cat mews peppery, "We'll be there in a few mouse-tails!". It should've looked like this: ''"Coming," a pretty - aren't they all? - she-cat mews peppery, "We'll be there in a few mouse-tails!"'' Not sure what "peppery" means in the sentence. Aaalso I think mouse-tails is a measure of length, not time. Maybe heartbeats would've been better? ;v;

Amberpaw stop no Brownpaw isn't your crUSH LEAPS BETWEEN THEM

Flarepaw seems like one of those generic/stereotypical jerks who always act like jerks to the main character. (amberpaw should've shoved her out of the way to get to the prey pile in that one part lmao) I kinda hope she dies later or something psh

also I feel like Redstar wanted Brownpaw to be in the Beauty System so she could murder his parents or something--

and Rainpaw and Gingerpaw seem cool B)

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