Talk:Shame, Hope, and Darkness/@comment-25531638-20140113013045

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This is really interesting. I think the whole story moved at a perfect pace too, and the chapter wasn't too short. I kind of like Hollypaw for some reason :3

Although, I don't think you should give us each cat's personality so quickly, right in the beginning. Either wait for them to develop over the course of the story, or smatter their descriptions throughout the chapter. Oh, and you misspelled "witness" towards the end of the chapter

I can't wait to see what kind of depth you put into this :) Keep going!