Talk:Beginning/@comment-26285531-20160116171022



This is was really dramatic and  great for an opening to Survivors! You've got me completely hooked and I definitely want to read more now. :D

You opened up the story really well, with subtle descriptions that tell us just enough about the setting and characters to have an understanding of it and want to keep reading more. You put lots of description into describing a character's appearance and especially personality, which I found awesome because it helps us better understand as readers the context of your writing. c:

I'm also really wondering at this point what importance Cherryclaw has and why it triggered memories to Casper, not to mention why the Drurray Way Massacre is so haunting to Casper, aside from it being a massacre. You also ended the episode on a dark note, with Flamepaw being killed. Now that Sandpelt is out for death and the Trackers are in danger, I'm sure a lot more will happen in this show and I can't wait to read the rest! :) <3

