Talk:Jagged Pines/@comment-24320714-20131231045446

I-I can't belive so far!!! Im just a bit confused, is owlclan and thunderclan seperated? Meh. You made something that gets annoying though

Jayfeather rubbed his paw over Firestar's body and felt something rough against his pad, like a graze. Jayfeather bent down and he sniffed the rough bit. He felt it again. It was a mark, a graze, and flesh.

Jayfeather lifted his paw and let it rub around Firestar's body. He eventually felt his paw grasp his muzzle. Jayfeather slowly opened Firestar's mouth and felt his way around inside. He took out some kind of product.

Jayfeather began feeling the product. Small, smooth, and it smelled like apples. Apple seed! Jayfeather thought. It should be apple seed!

But Jayfeather felt sure that apple seeds weren't enough to kill a cat. Unless he had been as weak as Firestar. Jayfeather was determined to find more substances in his mouth.

So he began feeling his way around again,p. Jayfeather had enough and grabbed Firestar's head and pulled it toward him so he could see his neck. He felt liquid trickle onto his chest.

Jayfeather let go and glanced at his chest, though he could see nothing, so he felt his way around. He swiped up the liquid and sniffed it.

It smelled as sharp as thorns. Darker then night. Powerful then a badger. Poison then deathberries. Wait, deathberries? This was deathberry juice! Some cat must've poured it into Fierstar's mouth after forcing in the apple seed. But what were the marks from? To hold him down?

Jayfeather rushed to the medicine den with the apple seed clutched in one paw and the liquid on the other. Jayfeather put down his apple seed and tried to dig a hole with one paw, and he poured in the deathberry juice and dropped the apple seed in the hole, and refilled it.

You reapeadidly sayed jayfeather. It could have been better if you said he a bit more.

Otherwise its awesome!!! Love the cliffhanger! WHO WHO WHO DID IT???