Talk:The Monsters/@comment-24519368-20170502152321/@comment-27824661-20170502184855

Before I get started, Sunpaw was born a long long time after Thistlefang killed his brother, Sunpaw's father, Kingfish's great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great grandfather is  Thistlefang.

Prologue

1. Smokeflame has a mate it says right here. "''You stole the love of my life." ''

2. The white she-cat is a Starclan cat, I thought it would be way more interesting than Smokeflame's spirit.

3. After Thistlefang killed his brother, he regreted it because he feared for his son. Sunpaw  is not Thistlefang's son. Thistlefang never had a second mate, the love of his life regeted him for his brother, Smokeflame. Thistlefang doesn't care about his second mate, he only cares about his son.

4. I will work on grammer and spelling. I can't tell you about the future yet, you will have to see and read the story. :)

Chapter 1

1. Thank you :) I love her eye color as well

2. Youll have to see ;)

3. Sunpaw can be a suprising she-cat, she tries to be the best she can be even if she over over exaggerate her moves

4. Yes, but Sunpaw was telling more about her friend.

5.    Sleepingkit will not have an important role in the story, but I know for one thing Kingkit may have a part to play in the story. You'll just have to find out.

6. Sunpaw is NOT Poppyfern's mother. (Poppyfern was the mother of Thistlefang's kit) Sunpaw is the daughter of Kingfish and Frostbite.

7. Sunpaw says goodnight well because, she gets really tired. (I might changed that.)

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8. Sunpaw can't control it. When every she is sad or angry, she turns into Eclipse, but sometimes at night she turns into Eclipse, but she doesn't know it because she blacks out.

9. I changed that.

And 10. Thistlefang and Smokeflame are dead, they have been for generations.