Talk:Double the Darkness/@comment-27725192-20170629004939

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This is so good!!! The font is pretty but kind of hard to read with? Anyways, wow Hailstar and Ravenfire are evil pieces of dung. I love the description and the cruelty weaved into this fanfic although I do wonder why they became evil in the first place. Were they bullied? Did the same thing happen to them? Were they raised wrong? I'd really like it if you added the reason some time in the story. :^)

A nitpick - every now and then, I see sentences that...don't sound correct? Like missing a word or two? I am able to fill them in myself with context clues but it is confusing and you might want to go back and fix those at some point. But Flame, this is really awesome! Don't abandon it! Always update if you can! I'll be watching the Editboard... :)

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