Talk:Shattered Angels/@comment-5488450-20130326190925

This has some minor mistakes such as spelling and grammatical issues but I felt it was still really great.the words that you chose to use weren't very strong-however, the way you placed them together made your story full of emotion. There we a few confusing points such as exactly why Maplefrost hated her kit-she has to have some reason for that. I felt as though you could have included a bit more story butt what you have is really string and powerful as it is! I think it goes quite well with the song; I only wish that Wingpaws death had been more complete. I GIVE YOU A SEVEN! HUAZZAHHHH