Talk:Darkcough Rising/@comment-1703139-20121208192354

Robo- Your prologue was excellet. To the point, but it also made me eager to read more. You have a very distinct, well done, suspenseful style of writing and I can't wait to see what you do with the epilogue.

Rainy- Brookfall is a great character, one I could easily identify with and your writing is very much akin to what one could expect to read in the actual Warriors series. You made Brookfall's story unique and alive.

Silver- You almost made me cry. Ambershine is a great character and I could feel the pain radiating from her, the helplessness. You have great talent.

Feather- I liked oyur chapter, I would maybe suggest even more anger from Snakefang that everything he has ever wanted, had thought was his is being torn away from him. I like the glimmer of hope your chapter ends on, but I would also like to see you expand on his anger.

Nighty- So after I was almost brought to tears by Ambershine, Moonsky and Flamebird finished me off. Your writing was beautiful, emotional, and had a certain wit and charm that made the fact Moonskywas sick all the more heartbreaking to the reader. Excellent.

Misty- I was a little confused by your chapter and I felt like it was shorter then the others. I could tell you had an interesting story going, but I felt like it was rushed. I'd love to see you expand that and make it more in depth.

Ninja- You had a very easygoing story, it was interesting and well done. :)

All in all I was enchanted and kind of terrified and made to sob by this story and pleasantly surprised by the awesome skill you new users have. I'm super excited for the rest of this. :)