Talk:Roar (Songfic)/@comment-25531638-20131110185401

Is this finished?

I like the song choice... this song makes for a good songfic. What you have so far is pretty good, I would just suggest maybe making Brambleclaw less... brutal? You can do whatever you want with it, but it's hard to sympathize with him when he's trying to murder Squirrelflight for something that she already apologized for. And one more thing:

Spoilers For the 4th series

Ok, I put that there, just in case you haven't read it. Honestly, I thought that Squirrelflight was the one to murder Ashfur until Hollyleaf came back in the 4th series. So this is an interesting take, on how likely it was that Squirrelflight was actually the murderer.