Talk:Dusk's Omen/@comment-24766822-20150907180202

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This is quite the interesting start to a show. The characters already seem surprisingly developed, even though the story has only just begun. Their personalities seem full, unlike some stories where the characters are only halfheartedly written. That's a difficult thing to achieve; nice work!

You know, Bluepaw and Leafswirl remind me somewhat of Goosefeather and... Bluepaw. Goosefeather and Leafswirl are so similar in character, both seemingly mad and ignored because of it. Was this similarity intentional, as a tribute to the actual canon?

It must be very hard for Leafswirl. I couldn't imagine never being listened to, always ignored by everyone... even your own father! But I'm secretly betting she's going to prove every cat wrong with that prophecy.

I do kind of feel sorry for Leafswirl, but I don't think it's fair of her to hurt poor, sweet little Bluepaw!

Anyways, this episode was well paced, well written (not to mention your grammar is very nearly impeccable, except a few minor mistakes), and it really makes me want to read on. I can't wait to read the next episode! <3 <3 Great job, Vee!

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