Talk:Your Heart Is A Muscle/@comment-16827713-20130326164102

YEEAH! I'M A JUDGE! (booty shake) No. SERIOUS MODE.

So, I loved this Rainy. Coaldust's emotions were displayed perfectly, and there were no spelling or grammar mistakes. However, there are a few things I would like to point out:

I, personally, don't think cats pick up flowers with their paws. I think it's the teeth. And when Coaldust brushes down Deersoul's fur, I don't think that would be a paw, perhaps a tongue...? I'm just  noting the fact that more humanlike behaviour was used.

Like Robo, I enjoyed the fact that the night before was left completely up to us. This might be picky, but although I liked it, others like to be told the details of everything. And in this example, I would like to be told a little more about that night.

The song choice: I didn't like it that much. And the chorus didn't really fit the song,

The plot was excellent; lots of good lanuage was used and the emotions and thoughts were displayed perfectlty. There was a good amount of story, and you didn't tell us all the information; we could infer it ourselves, which I liked. :D

So, overall, I enjoyed this very very much. Great work Rainy! A 7.5. :D Well done!