Talk:Two Birds/@comment-1829516-20170710045118

(Comment for WFWA Awards)

SPOILERS

Okay, so I hate Talonpaw. She's written really well, but her whole personality makes me absolutely despise her. She's way too paranoid and she's selfish, only thinking about herself and destroying her brother's life.

Creekpaw is my son. I love him and everything about him. He started off small and nobody liked him and then rose to being adored by the Clan! He didn't deserve all the crap Talonpaw did to him. I'm just glad it seemed like Ravenstar didn't believe he did it and let him out of his 'prison' after only a few moons. I just hope they find out what really happened, I'm getting tired of Talonpaw's manipulation.

I would've loved more chapters on their kitten life, maybe to see how her as a kit impacted her decisions as an apprentice? Maybe there was so back story there that could've developed on her paranoid and crazed personality.

My only beef is terms like 'hell' and 'god' being used, mainly cause they don't really have those concepts and use Dark Forest and StarClan. Other than that and some spelling errors, it's really well written and kept me really intrigued and excited to keep reading!! I'll definitely be waiting for more.

Spoilers end!