Talk:Shadowed Lies/@comment-5342796-20160725034647



AW, I love Beechpaw and Birchpaw. The other characters you've introduced so far are all interesting and diverse as well.

I really liked the whole idea you had going with Blossomwater there. In all the not so good apprentice-mentor relationship things I've seen, the idea of having a mentor be blind and still a warrior has never cropped up. The thing is, you sympathize with both sides. Of course you feel terrible for Blossomwater for being shamed in front of the Clan by her new apprentice... but you also at least understand why Beechpaw was dismayed; we all have those little prejudices we have to overcome, and sometimes it takes a lot to change our minds.

Hopefully there will be a lot of development with their relationship! I think Blossomwater could maybe teach Beechpaw things that a mentor with sight could never.

Hmm, now the mystery of the gold and blue eyes. Echo seems nice enough. Interesting that she's been hanging on the fringes of Clan life, waiting for a chance to ask for help. What's her back story? I really want to know now. And of course I want to know about the things she mentioned... how has the Clan not realized they're there? What are they? :O

You have an excellent writing style! It's succinct and not overstated. As soon as one mystery is solved, another crops up, so the reader always wants to keep going.

Judging by the title, the plot is going to get darker and more complex. I'm already sensing the "shadow" part, but as for the lies part, I am very curious to know how things get twisted around, as they often do.

I REALLY liked this story. Excellent job!!!

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