Talk:Showdown(Part 1)/@comment-8248793-20130613205906

This was AMAZING!!! I love the parts where Brookfall was with her parents, talking.

Her parents seemed nervous, almost scared of Brookfall, telling us that she has changed a lot since the war. Brookfall looked appalled when she heard that she had a brother, but then they warmed up quickly. That was adorable!

Brookfall has a lot on her mind, and you made her character perfect! She was unstable at the beginning, and then she started to get better, but when something happens in war, she always does her duty. I really like that.

Arti, I love your stories, and I hope you continue to write more! <3