Talk:Changlings: Split stars/@comment-8248793-20131112022725

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Great start Luna! :)

Though I would suggest making the chapters a little longer, and don't make it one paragraph. It kind of messes up the reading.

I love all the action and the words you've used so far, and I certainly love how quick the emotions change. It's a personality that most characters don't have, so its interesting.

Another thing, maybe its something like a flu or something, but the fact that she passes out everytime she smells the other Clans seem a little unrealistic. Maybe change it so she feels ill or something, not passing out.

But overrall, its a great start, and I hope you do more soon!

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