Talk:Singularity/@comment-28076378-20170306150920

Spoliers

Prologue, Chapter 1, & 2

I was hooked as soon as I started the prologue. Its beautiful. I'm assuming Dawnpaw died, or went crazy, or both, maybe. I feel bad for Sagepaw. He feels like he could have saved her, even if there was nothing he could have done. Your description is great too.

All the characters are interesting in this, my favorite is Sagepaw. Dawnpaw is great, i've never seen a cat like her before. She confuses me, but I like her. I can get why her Clan feels uneasy with her. Why does she feel like her mind is trapped in her body? Like I said above, I think she goes crazy?

I wonder how she really was able to figure out how RiverClan was planning to take back sunningrocks? that was pretty amazing. I think after this, her Clanmates will start respecting her more, but still remain wary.

There was one error that I noticed in chapter 2. '...Next to him, Gullkit took a step...' He's an apprentice. I don't feel like this story is rushed at all.

Great job!

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