Talk:Hawkfire's Story/@comment-5137480-20130623224046

This has a really good plot!

I really like how you switched POVs, yet managed to make it work without first-person. It is really rushed at some points, and you could lengthen the chapters. Sometimes you really need to work on your spelling, though it's just typos. Their relationship is really rushed - how did two cats fall in love by just seeing each other? Tigerclaw normally isn't so bloodthirsty that he'd do this. I'm surprised that Bluestar'd consider exiling them. It is all your fanfic, though.