Talk:We Can't Stay/@comment-26432133-20170724225915

wfwa judge's comment-

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First off, I must confess that I finished reading this yesterday, but I was busy watching Iron Man so I didn't have time to comment. Then, this morning, I was busy watching Iron Man 2 and Iron Man 3 so rip.

But heck this story is so good I wanna scream. As I read, I could sense from the very beginning that there was something off with Gorsethorn. I hate and love his character- hate because, you know, who wouldn't, and love because he's so much better than 99% of the usual love interest of a protagonist.

I really wish Smoke/Storm could've happened, but I understand that Stormshine's really scarred. Smokewhisp is so sweet, he's a good, good boy. As for Stormshine, she was really refreshing in the way that she was so blind to Gorsethorn. Smokewhisp, both while he was a friend to Stormshine and while he was a little more, was such a good friend he's honestly my favorite character in this story.

The kits are really nice, and I love how Stormshine comes to think of them as her own. It's not just a favor to Mistshade anymore, which is so lovely and I wanna hug her now.

So, since We Can't Stay was nominated Best Cliche-Kicker, I've gotta say that it does amazingly at kicking the butt of the usual protagonist-and-her-lover tale. Gorsethorn was abusive, selfish, manipulative, and possessive. He bogged Stormshine down rather than raise her up like Smokewhisp did. Gorsethorn scarred her, something that rarely happens to a protagonist.

Overall this story is awesome. The characters are beautiful and can I squeeze Storm and Smoke to death please. Great job, Brighty