Talk:Loved and Lost/@comment-5488450-20121220153844

I am going to make a confession. When I first opened this story and saw that it was for a contest my expectations weren’t all that high. Because, (no offense to contests but) with all of the requirements for what you must have and who the characters must be, it kind of gives no freedom for the story to be quite as original. But this. THIS. THIS. Was amazing. It was unexplainably amazing. Wow.

I loved all the choices you left your charries to make. Choices between two cats they knew they loved, choices between their hearts and their loyalties, choices between what they believed in and where they belonged. So sweet and heart-wrenching. And watching the consequences of their choices was great too.

Also, the battle was intense. I love how cramped crowded and overfloded you made it. I felt numb when Berrypaw’s mate died, but I must admit I didn’t feel nearly as bad for Owlpaw’s mate. *shugs* I never really liked her.

The ending was great though. I LOVED LOVED LOVED your epilogue. One of the best things was probably the fact that the forbidden romance actually survived and was still going. It is the first fanfic I have read where the forbidden romance wasn’t caught, or one of the cats was killed, or they just decided to end it on their own. It added a great touch to your story.

One thing you could work on might be how quickly the cats fell in love. Owl and Rose was understandable as they knew each other for a while, but there was never anything between Berry and the deputy until you pointed it out all-of-a-suddenly.