Talk:Lost in Heart/@comment-24143898-20150312073043

(competition post :o)

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There are some aspects in this story that I have never seen before, which has really interested me. Why would a Clan cat be forced to be a kittypet? That was something interesting that I liked.

However, I did spot that sometimes, you didn't start a new line when a new character spoke. Do you mind fixing that? The thing is, it's good grammar to miss lines, and no person likes to read a block of words. I know you've done it right most of the time, but this is just a reminder.

Also, I know that you're thinking of extending the prologue, but I do feel it needs to be longer than just a few sentences, if you know what I mean :3.

Anyway, I feel that this has great potential for a story! <3 I'm watching for more!

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