Talk:Froststar's Prophecy/@comment-26432133-20170103054239

(commenting as I read along)

Hey, um, I don't understand how Froststar will birth a Clan if she's already a -star.

Kits are usually kicked out of the nursery once a kitting happens, btw

Starmist is a name that I would think to be considered taboo, since it starts with star

Tbh, Chapter One was pretty pointless. The rule you should remember as a writer is to only write what's relevant to the story, and I don't see how a tour of camp is going to affect Frostkit at all.

I like the idea of Passionfur being bitten, and when Frostpaw thinks, Littermate?, I wonder if there's some drama between Passionffur and her brother, unless it's just Frostpaw learning her mother has a littermate.

All in all, I can see potential, but a lot has to be fixed. Keep going, though!