Talk:Goodclan V.S. Evilclan/@comment-32946794-20170203141736

Hey Swan! Good to see you writing again. I will just point out one thing I noticed with your stories, okay?

The names.

EvilClan and GoodClan are...... really bad names, I'm gonna be bluntly honest. It's a little lame. How about NightClan and DayClan? DarkClan and BrightClan? At some point I even had DuskClan and DawnClan.

Second... Cat names. Uhh.... You see, there are pretty odd. Think about the names in the books. They are pretty odd, up to a point mary-sueish. What cat would name their kit Guardiankit? Evilkit? Deathkit? And I get that one Clan is supposed to be dark and edgy and the other one bright and happy, but like this: Once I had a concept for a story - I never actually made it - where there were two Clans, one good and one bad. Leaders were called Beauty of the Day and Beauty of the Night. In SunClan, the good Clan, everyone was named after flowers, and colors, and animals and all the bright things, while in MoonClan, everyone was called dark something, black something, night something, stuff like that.

When you name a kit Evilkit, you're basically saying that this will be his future. While a lot of villains have very cliché names in canon, there are a lot of cats that don't - Mapleshade is a bit villain-ish, but it's not that bad. Sparrowfeather and Silverhawk are also good. If I'd heard either of them, I'd think that they're a normal cat. Or take Brightflower and Lilywhisker - they had nice names, and ended up in dark forest (recently confirmed and I'm fairly pissed about it). Strawberry was a good name in my opinion. Strawkit is not that bad, considering that we have Hayberry in canon. But majority of other names, not so much. Though I do think that you could name her Strawberry-something, like Strawberryclaw or something else. Do cats even know what angels and devils are?

Same goes for most of your stories. I see what you're aiming for, but there are better ways to interpret it. Hope I helped you!