Talk:The Night Prophecy/@comment-8248793-20160707034618

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Wow I'm impressed by the sheer amount of work you guys put in for this! You guys must have worked really hard and this is an impressive result!

I'll start with the critism. I felt as though there were parts of the chapters where you guys could have gone back and checked to make sure there weren't too many errors, but I still got the storyline. I also felt some parts were a bit rushed, but this story was actually pretty well paced, especially for a collab (those tend to be faster paced as two ppl working together produces different styles). I also find the ending really confusing, because I didn't get the whole fake Ravenflight thing and the whole Darkpelt/Phoenix deal.

But now to the good parts! I liked Streampelt's development. He was a concrete character and we saw how much he improved through out the story. I thought he was going to be conceited and the antagonist, but you proved me wrong! Ravenflight felt pretty developed, though not as much as he was just evil evil and evil.

Streampelt and Sealeaf were cute, though I felt we could have gone into them a bit more. We definitely could have gone into Featherpaw and Ravenflight as that was just sprung on us, especially with the time lapse where Ravenflight was nonexistant in the Clan.

Overall I loved the plot and action! You two spent a lot of time on this and I felt that you two did a great job doing this!

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