Talk:The Three Roses/@comment-5342796-20160320014018



The cover is so pretty c: i love it, and I love the title.

I like the premise of this 'fic! A father trying to lead his Clan and live with the grief over his mate's death; his daughters trying to escape the shadow of their mother's death and figure out the kind of lives they want to forge for themselves.

Just a few pointers. There are a few grammar mistakes (understandable, and don't worry, they don't greatly interfere with reading the story). Also I was confused at the part when Redkit and Spiderkit were already talking about having kits themselves even though they're so young. Unless they were just kidding :p

It's both heartwarming and incredibly sad, how Rosemary keeps returning to check on her family. I'm really rooting for all of them. And I love how you made this 'fic about family, I especially love how you give Coldstar and his daughters each a POV. Not many 'fics are written with such a central focus on that theme, so kudos to you.

Keep up the good work! <3 I'm excited for more c: Wonder if the past will return and influence the present... that conversation had some foreshadowing.

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