Talk:Breezepelt's Fury/@comment-5848758-20131115163643

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This has a great foundation. I love the idea of watching Breezepelt grow up as he is such a complex character!

But your spelling and grammar needs a bit of work. Rub each chapter through Word to correct any errors.

Then the chapters themselves. They are extremely short and so far nothing has really happened.

I think it is fair to grant this fanfic a 5/10. I will definitely be wating for more. :D