Talk:We Can't Stay/@comment-24143898-20150311051546

oh wow, I fanned this, but back then I didn't really do constructive crit., so competition post :o)

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This is a really lovely story, I know that, as I read it as it was coming out. <3 You could really feel Stormshine's emotions, and how she felt. Her being held back from warrior duties must've been painful.

And Gorsethorn... I really liked him at first, but when he did the throat thing with Night and Fallow, I started to freak. I hated him after that. He deserved to die in the way he did.

But in the end, SmokeXStorm won, I'll say that. <3 Smokewhisp is a lovely name, and he does like Stormshine - you could really see the emotions coming through. In other words, the theme that was coming through was really strong - it was very noticeable in the plotline.

This is one of my favourite stories on the wiki, and this was a beautiful piece of writing, Brighty <3

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