Talk:Affection/@comment-28076378-20171231034840

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This was an awesome story! I love the fact that Ashpaw and Cheetahpaw start out hating each other, and they both have some vaild reasons to dislike each other, but still, if they take a moment to talk... they could find out the other isn't so bad. I like both of them, but Ashpaw wins me over!

When I read the name "The Darkness", I laughed a little. All I can picture are a group of edgy twelve year old calling themselves the darkness xD That seems like a name you'd expect this evil and mean group to be called.

OH MY GOD. Ok, their mentors seriously need to just check this out, if their apprentices are really this shaken up, and caught no prey, then for the love of god, at least check! lol, they could have stopped so much stuff from happening if they weren't so quick to decide their apprentices are lying. Well, maybe Shadestar will! Leaders are a little more wise than warriors?

Oh. He thinks they're lying too. Dude, Shadestar! Send a patrol at least and look! These cats are so stubborn sometimes, sheesh! I feel bad for Ash and Cheetah, no one believes them, not even Emberpaw! At least this whole thing has melted their hatred for each other and they're now friends.

Hah! I knew Stormpaw was hiding something. Wasn't really expecting him to have killed someone though. I was more expecting it to be, he was a spy for The Darkness all along... and they were going to strike soon, but he loved his Clan! but - oh I'll shut up. I was very happy to read about their dumb mentors when they realized Ash and Cheetah were right all along C:

Oh wow... Ashpaw died. I really wasn't expecting that. Aw, they just now confess their love, then he dies... that's sad. I'm glad to see Cheetah as a warrior in the end - with a very nice name! Hopefully BurnClan has learned from the mistake of not listening to their apprentices now ^^

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