Talk:Shard of Ice/@comment-1703139-20140218010935

SPOILERS

Okay, constructively (I had so many issues spelling that argh) there were a few spelling errors. The one that really got me was 'nobal' which should have been 'noble'. If you just C&P this into a word document, let spellcheck do your work for you! :)

The only other thing was that Ash's death was really really sudden. Suddenly sudden. If you want to look into making your episodes longer, I would love to see that expanded. Maybe have it done somewhere that isn't in front of the entire Clan? Maybe have it more drawn out...I want to see what Snarl is thinking, what Ash thought, etc.

I really like this. I already feel for Shard and I want to see where the conflict is going to go. Erm...yeah. I loved it. :D