Talk:Looming War/@comment-8248793-20131201233846

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Certainly amazing, Brighty! Though one little mistake I shall point out. You wrote: "We will fight do the death." It should be: "We will fight to the death."

I like all the planning, the way the episode let us know what was going to happen. Though I do suggest making more paragraphs, so its easier to read, and it won't be so short.

Even though you seemed to have left out some parts, it actually helps the reader think, and visualize the scenes. It certainly made me feel the suspence and tension rising.

I really loved the character you gave Darkshadow. The evil inside of her, and how she's totally different from Sunheart. And a lot stronger.

I shall read the next, and await Before the Storm.

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