Talk:Wolfsong's Loyalty/@comment-8248793-20140222190419

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Woah you've really been working hard :) One thing I would recommend is spacing out those big paragraphs and making them little paragraphs instead. Big paragraphs are usually harder to read :P Also, if you're doing the writing in source mode, you should probably press enter twice so the paragraphs aren't so close to each other.

The big font is very ... big xD I don't find it irritating, but it's a big different from the regular font :3 I do love your idea so far, having Wolfkit born like evil-ish and the Dark Forest wanting to train her. This superpower thing is very surprising, and I can't wait to see how you take this story!

Another thing I would recommend is making a new paragraph each time someone speaks. For example: "Mapleshade?" Tigerstar mewed.

"Yes?"

That's what I would do instead of cramming it in one paragraph. I hope I helped, great story so far :)

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