Talk:Crystal Heart/@comment-27725192-20170611174644

Aaaaahhh that cover is so good! Anyways, so far Winterkit seems really interesting. I think that because she has no one else to turn to, she likes focusing on Morningpaw, a cat just as broken as her. I was momentarily alarmed at the age difference but it's not that weird - they're only one rank apart.

I did think the part with Morningpaw being blind was rather sudden. Tbh, it doesn't make much sense in the story and I don't see why the secret can be well-kept. He would've needed help getting around. Also, it's quite contradictory as if Morningpaw can glare at certain cats, it doesn't quite make sense that he is blind.

I also noticed a few grammar and spelling errors here and there. Overall, nice plot! If the inconsistencies could be fixed, then it would be wonderful. C: