Talk:Chance/One/@comment-28076378-20170527214725

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I was drawn in as soon as I finished the very first part. This looks like it'll be a cool story, I'm thinking it's going to be about Tansykit and Petalkit having an 'interesting' bond. At the moment I don't know what to think of the characters yet, but it's only the first chapter, plenty of time to get to know them.

I thought it was kind of funny how Petalkit was just sleeping through the battle, no big deal... then she sounded annoyed when her nap was disturbed, I thought of Anenome from Wings of Fire, honestly xD Sounds like something she'd do

I'm a little confused about something though, Grayflower is Tansykit and Petalkit's mother, but in a few parts it's sounding like Cloudrose is...? I don't know if this is a mistake or was intended, it's probably just another queen in the nursery. There was one spelling error I noticed.

"Oh, I'll be strong. I already am. For now, I already now that right now, right this minute... "

This is good so far, great job!

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