Talk:Seeking Revenge/@comment-16166566-20130812185017

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Stormy, this story is absolutly fantastic! I wasn't even in the first chapter, (which right now I'm reading Chater 9) And you got me hooked on this! I think my most favorite character in this whole story is Shade, because she is a couragous mother! Even thought she made her kits fight, you could tell that she really didn't want to. When Susan (Lily) is seen running away from the battle, everything got so intense and utterly breath taking when she was taken away by Brick, (I think it was him.) You described Susan's thoughts so well, yet you showed Bricks feelings as well.

But back to the moment before that, I was in so much suspense when Shade was trying to find food for her kits, and how she had a run in with that gang! You described everything and everyone so well, I felt like I was there! I loved the way you made the gang speak to Shade, and how depressed Shade was when she gave her collar up for her kits. That brought tears to my eyes, seeing her reaction, and why her collar was so important to her. But I can see that she was a strong mother, seeing as how she did that for her kits.

I love the name Jacques. Its so amazing. OH and I loved the way you described Shade's kittypet life, and I loved the connection between her and Scorch. I liked the way you described Susan's capture, and the was Shade reacted when Bone was going to fight her. Shade jumped in like a super hero and saved the day, until Susan and Jacques were found by Scorch, (I think,) Scorch kept there hide out  a secret, because they were his kit of course.

But what I don't understand is why Brick told them he was they're father? Then led them into a trap? That confused me a lot. But anyways, I enjoyed how Lilly expressed her name meaning poison, to Scourge. But anyways, over all I loved the story, the big battle and kittypet parts and I can't wait to read more!

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