Talk:Storm Clouds/@comment-26432133-20170407002757

(Contest Comment)

SPOILERS

The prologue kind of confused me as to why he'd just want power. Sorry for the short comment, but there isn't much to comment on.

(I'm just gonna jump straight to the judging right now sorry)

JUDGING:

Cloudstar could use a few improvements to his character. As you've only written the prologue, I can't see what pushed him to become evil, so I can't remark about that. He also does have the cliche of a power hungry maniacal villain.

OVERALL THOUGHTS

This story has potential, but there isn't much so far in it. I'd like to see where you take this in the future if you decide to continue writing the story. You are a pretty talented writer, so I'm disappointed there isn't much to read as of right now. I'm hoping that whatever you have/had planned for it would blow my initial thoughts of this out of the water- and I'm sure it will.