Talk:After The Death: Cometpaw Speaks/@comment-5137480-20131012233008

This was very rushed. I think I will definitely read more, but Hawky is right, there was a lot of errors. When someone speaks, start a new paragraph. Instead of "Hi." Cometpaw said. "Hello." Fallpaw replied, it'd be “Hi," Cometpaw said. "Hello!" Fallpaw replied. It should be I'm, not Im. Sqeaked is spelled squeaked. You should probably use more adjectives, so it's much easier to see. Things like what does Cometpaw look like? What is the camp like? Does Cometpaw miss ThunderClan? How was he named, as the cats don't know about comets?