Talk:Flames of Love/@comment-25531638-20140120054513

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This story broke my heart.

I suppose thats a good thing lol, because you know you've got me interested. I'm gonna apologize, because there's probably a lot of things I forgot to mention in this comment... yeah.

So, first of all, I ship BrackenXSnow. And you know what? I hardly ever ship couples that actually exist, to be honest, but this one I love. And I also love RedXMorning. Redclaw was my favorite character I think. He was just so... aggh. It was so depressing when he died, that was one of the things that killed me. As well as the death of the kits, that hurt too. So sad :(

Now I'm going to choose to say that I love how you gave Morningflower a POV too, and that she wasn't just some sort of goofy she-cat side character with no development. And the way you gave background into their apprenticeship was amazing.

The only things that bothered me a bit were the occasional typos/grammar mistakes, and the way the story ended. I mean, don't get me wrong. I loved the way it ended with Brackenheart and Snowbreeze not together, with Morningflower between them. It was sort of the thing that is perfectly heartbreaking. It's just how you phrased it-- I checked out What Life Became, and it doesn't contain a sequel. And the way that you sort of say "What are they going to do next?" at the end sort of sets up for one. I would suggest ending it more like they are all heartbroken because they can't be together like they wanted. I'm not sure that huge paragraph even made sense to you, oh well.

But anyways, look forward to What Life Became :3

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