Talk:The Fall/@comment-8248793-20160530031018

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Okay I really like the concept of this, how you had the four Clans go into this huge war. Sadly we don't get a RiverClan pov, because I feel that would balance everything out, though I suppose we do get a character because of Silvershade.

I'll start with Snowfire. She's interesting and unique, a quiet, not-ready leader who was born to lead. I find it good that you introduced her as hesitant, but as the section went on, you let her become more and more like the new leader. It's as if she is mentally preparing herself in this episode and at the end, she finds that she has to be ready now or never.

Ashpaw seems to be a cute little ball of fur and I'm worried about how Fogheart is going to end up treating him. his mentor seems so harsh and omg he killed Hawkfeather D: The ThunderCLan deputy sounded chill and would have been a good addition to the story, considering the grim times.

Ravenwing amuses me, but in a good way. I like his open humor and how he's super easygoing, despite the war. Silvershade obviously strikes him fancy and I'm interested to see how that relationship will go, and how Ivyblossom fits in this.

Good job! I like this already :)

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