Talk:Morning Dawn/@comment-24143898-20150312030418

(this be a competition post :3)

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This story does look promising! I really like some of the interesting names for your characters.

I can think of a few ways on how you could improve this fanfic. First, to make it easier to read, start a new line when a new character speaks - it's a lot easier for the writer.

Another way how I think you could improve is to give a bit more background to the prologue. I felt that it was a little bit sudden. First of all, what is this power? I'd like to know some more.

However, I really liked the prophecy, it rhymes c:.

Anyway, this seems like good potential, and I'll be looking for more c:

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