Talk:Thunder Rising/@comment-15560748-20170711024426

spoilers

part one

I honestly love your writing style. It's descriptive but flows at the same time, and the pacing is really nice. So kudos to you for that.

So Mischief so far. She's adorable and vulnerable and strong all at the same time, and I honestly love her can-do attitude. She's daring enough to at least think about and try putting up a fight, as well as hold her ground pretty well considering her background. I love how we don't get too much of her personality yet, so she the other sides of her can still reveal themselves, but I love the dynamic and contrasting aspects of her personality. It's nice that she's pretty fleshed out even in the first chapter.

I hope Brokenstar doesn't end up screwing her over. I love Mischief already!

part two

screams i love these thunderclan characters ahhh

I don't remember too much of Ravenpaw, but what I remember of him, I've loved. He's such a wonderful character, and we don't get much about him in the original series so I'm curious to see where you'll go here.

By the way, you wrote "Graystripe" instead of "Graypaw" in paragraph 2, so make sure to fix that, because I got a little confused for a second there.

tbc