Talk:Fire It Up/@comment-5488450-20140102225050

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wow this is really friggin good so far; I was upset to see you hadn't posted chapter one yet! I love a lot of things to this STARTING WITH THE FACT THAT THE CATS ARE NAMED AFTER US YAY

The characterization is also really good, I love the way you started it with a story-telling approach, those are always really interesting, and you did a fantastic job describing. The plot wasn't too rushed or too slow; just right!

The one thing I might point out however is that there is a lot of repition. A couple times you said the same thing once or twice is consequent sentences, just wording it a little differently. This kind of tripped up the flow a bit.

Other than that; it's fab! c: