Talk:The Story of Icewrath, Featherswirl, and Craneheart/@comment-1703139-20121209173559/@comment-1703139-20130224004016

Re-reading and reading the updates to this, can I just say if four toms liked me that would be MEGA awkard? And hard to write?

Also, as was pointed out by Icekit, they are 3.5 moons old. And alreayd they appear to be involved in a love square. I don't know if this is just me, but that's kind of....weird. I'd say grow them up a little, or at least downplay the romance until they are grown up. No kid is going to be in a battle over the love of a girl before they're in at least 5th grade. XD  Maybe wait til they're apprentices, because I had assumed that they'd become warriors when I wasn't reading. But they're still little....

Anyways, the other stuff I mentioned before could still use some work, but you have a great start and some great characters. :)