Talk:Beginning of the End/@comment-8248793-20131122031720

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Even though this is short (like all my episodes) this is a great start of a show! It shows Sunheart, and portrays her perfectly. This episode gives me a clear sight of what this show/series is going to be about.

Like Roo said below me, it might be a good idea to go through, and show the scenes more. Like show more of Darkshadow's personality and thoughts more when she takes over. And maybe portray more of the changes, and how everything is viewed from both sides.

Some things I recommend:

-Definitely show your characters more, and add details to draw a picture for us

-maybe just come back and add some more action to the ones here

This is great, and I'm going to read the next!

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