Talk:Amaranthine/@comment-28076378-20170729141535

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i love the description of this! it's kinda calming to read. The background is also really nice. The world you've set up is beautiful, I can almost imagine myself under those flowering trees.

I like Cherry so far (i dunno what to say about her), I don't know about Torrent at the moment. I also don't know what gender they are, but i'm a assuming a boy. He doesn't seem to have that much personality, but his pov is interesting to read from.

The Twilight Hunters are also a cool name -shrug- I wonder if this new group will even be a threat. They've done nothing so far... I wonder if Torrent's group is getting worked up for nothing.

In part two, there's a mistake saying "Their tails twitched nervously every one in a while."

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Overall, I think you've done well with this story. I can't finish reading today cause i won't have internet for a week or more. But once i've got it again, i'll finsh and make another comment c:

I also apologize that this is passed the deadline on the commenting contest. I thought I would have enough time to read by then, but i guess not. I've also realized i cannot do deadlines.

Anyway, great job on this so far, i love it!!!