Talk:The Exile of the (very) Young Queen/@comment-27144125-20160817152754

Hi. I just read ur story and now imma comment on it

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This is an interesting concept. ive only read one story on the wiki like it (Apprentice Queen)

Sparrowpaw and Echopaw are a cute couple!

Now here's some constructive criticism- over 10 kits?! im gonna be honest with you; that is way too much. And when Sparrowpaw seems excited about the kits, Echopaw acted like she didnt care. I dont know if u were going for that..?

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Anyways, hope I didnt offend u at all. Noice story btw