Talk:Riverstone 2056 Opening Ceremony/@comment-5488450-20121219225554

I really likes this story overall and found it quite easy to just sit back and enjoy, as well as a little fascinating in the way that you managed to describe the history of the clans and turn it into an Olympic ceremony; fusing two of your greatest passions.

The grammar and spelling were also very well. I could hardly detect any mistakes in your writing. Your word choice was also great, and you managed to capture the scene perfectly and help me visualize it. I also like the way you built the character even in a story that didn’t revolve around the characters as much. By showing their excitement in several ways and their reactions I was able to discover what kind of cats these were.

And for my critique, which I promised I would give. This didn’t really feel like cats to me. It felt more like I was watching humans. By giving them TVs, stadiums and shows you sort of drained some of the warrior touch. It felt more like a story about the Olympics than one about warriors.

Overrall, I still loved this story, and I think you have a great talent for writing ;)