Talk:Holi-Cats Episode 1: Moving in/@comment-8248793-20131029040058

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Certainly interesting :3

I love this idea, mixing spoof with our real life holidays. Though some names didn't really fit warrior names. For example: Freetail. Though I know why you did it.

And Turkeyclaw just suddenly appeared. He wasn't really with these cats, and the beginning was very sudden. Maybe approach it a little more? Like explain that they went to the bus, got in, get a little talk in. Then put this in.

And the caps. Try not to have so many caps, its hard to read, so big, and it shows too much excitement. Course you can use it, since you are doing spoof, but too many isn't right.

This is very funny, though you have some spelling mistakes. Hope to see you write more!

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