Talk:Thistleleaf's Mistake (old)/@comment-26432133-20170517025041

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There's quite a few switches in past and present tense which kinda confused me, so maybe you could clear those up? The prologue was interesting, it seems like the cat is abandoning her kits and hoping someone will adopt them? The first chapter also seems to open up with a looooottt of explanation, and it might be better if you could tone that down. And every time a character is introduced, they get a description as well. I like the idea, and lol Thistle you screwed up big time. And dang they're cruel to wanna kill kits O-o

Overall this story makes a lot of beginner mistakes- but hey, it's two years old, and you've improved a heck of a lot since then, Patch. Still a great job!