Talk:Pine Frost/@comment-25531638-20131110184826

Hehe is it just me or is there a fad going on with writing stories in this font?

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Well, I already gave my opinion on the prologue, but now I shall talk about the rest.

This is still really good. I think the writing flows very smoothly, and it is the perfect speed. Also, how you don't include something huge in each chapter, just small clues that leave readers interested.

And the fact that Frostpaw actually likes Pinepaw back... most stories it's like "the main character likes this she-cat, but she doesn't like him back" drama. I like this crush between them :)

So far I love this story, but I would suggest maybe giving Snakeheart a "soft side"... that's not exactly what I mean, but... like he thinks or at least tries to trick the kits into thinking he's doing good for them... if that made any sense to you xD

Okay. I'm done :D

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