Talk:Bronze Wing/@comment-25630395-20150124034846

SPOILERS

This is an interesting concept/plot! I like how you introduced Stonekit's eye 'problem' with Hollowmoon and Rosethorn. The prologue had a nice, mysterious air to it, too.

I'm not a grammar expert, but shouldn't: just kits' tales be ''just kit's tales? ''Because it's describing something that belongs to kits... I guess. Lol, I really don't know.

I was a bit confused at the beginning of the story. I didn't understand what was going on at first, and I think the introduction of battalion vs. regular warriors was a bit sudden, as well as the introduction of Stonepaw's father.

But this is a great piece, and I can't wait to see how it turns out!

ENDSPOILER