Talk:Rising Prophecy/@comment-5342796-20130828000101

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I think this is quite good for your first fanfic, Tall! It's nice that you put the thought into writing out the allegiances and all that. Some constructive criticism; it seems lik you rushed into things a lot in the first chaper. A lot of the flow was a little disjointed and kinda hard to follow; maybe go back and smooth over the transitions from one happenstance to the next?

Shiningpaw is a very pretty name; I like it. Looking forward to more!

