Talk:Threats of the Future/@comment-28076378-20170627142750

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you've done a nice job so far, it's a little confusing with what's going on though.

As was said below, it's a bit rushed, and there are things left unexplained. Why do Pepperstorm and Sparrowlight act the way they do around Bramblefire? And why are they getting mad at her for not attacking that tom when they could have easily done so themselves? it's just confusing me a bit.

This is the tom from their dreams I pressume. He kind of came out of no where - the whole part just felt a bit odd, but those are easy fixes. I really only have one problem with Hyena. It's really odd that he'd show himself to them and flat out tell them he's evil... it just seems werid, i don't think a villain would do that. I can see them trying to be kind and helpful, then showing their true intentions (Darktail from VOS could be used for an example) but you can do whatever you want with your villains

Perhaps add more detail in your description, and emotion, those two things always makes stories more interesting to me.

But overall this is good with a lot of potential! Keep up the great work!

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