Talk:Rise from the Ashes/@comment-8248793-20140825202315

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This is actually really good so far!

Just a reminder that you shouldn't have such huge paragraphs, it makes it harder to read. Perhaps you should make a new paragraph each time a new person speaks, or just not bunch everything together.

I really like your description, you're really good at describing your surrounding, and I like that! I also like Willow, she seems like a dynamic character, but the names of her kits are kind of depressing D: I hope Dying Cinders and Small Flame don't die.

I really can't wait for more, I really want to know what it's about!

<3

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