Talk:Falling Through The Stars/@comment-8248793-20140701205733

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That prologue was really intriguing, but I found it rather confusing. Did the kit die, or is it Lilykit? But other than that, it's a really good start.

Now I know I've done this before, but I find it disapproving that kits are starting to have likes, like crushes. (yes i did it too but I regret it now :P) People say apprentices is already bad enough, but since I approve of apprentice love, kit love is a bit too early.

You had a few spelling mistakes, but overall, I don't Lilykit's development was going really well, for a prologue and chapter one.

I think Rainkit is really cute, and they (lilykit and rainkit) are a good pair to be together with. This story is a great start, and I can't wait for more!

<3

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