Talk:Breezepelt: the becoming of a rogue/@comment-9017167-20130612170441

One little thing: When Nightcloud is dying, the voice says ''I sorry. You might want to change that to I'm sorry'' XD

This is a very good story so far. You have an interesting idea here, telling what you think happened to Breezepelt after The Last Hope. I look forward to reading more! :3