Talk:Fallen Star/@comment-44944319-20200208010715

This is very good. I'm intigued! This is an intresting idea, too. Riverstar becoming a kit is something i've never thought of before, so it was nice to see someone doing something original.

I have a complaint, though, and sorry if I come across as harsh, but the whole River killing Brownclaw thing and the meeting with StarClan isn't really plausible as such. If that did happen, I think StarClan would let River plead not guilty and/or reveal to him the evidence of him killing Brownclaw.

I do like the intreraction between River the kit and Blueclaw. How River tries to act mighty, and Blueclaw just laughs and asks if his heads on right. It was well written, Dogwood. I also like the way Loki described things in the second chapter- it was quite good.

Well done, Loki and Dogwood.