Talk:Pumpkin Moon/@comment-24143898-20170219071111

(now to rewrite the comment that wikia didn't like this morning... hhhh)

note: i'll be commenting on this in sections of three chapters at a time ^.^

SPOILERS

Prologue, Chapter One and Chapter Two:

This world comes across as a... different world as to what you'd usually come across. It's nice to see fanfictions like this once in a while ^.^ I think that was proved with the lava incident in the prologue (sure, that could happen in the real world, but I see that as being very very rare), and with Squeak. I'm interest to know what happened to him, why he was a cat and was turned into a duckling and yeahh... I'm assuming that the reason for that will be explained later.

Oh, yeah, and the powers. I almost forgot about the powers. Definitely not an ordinary world, haha..

I will give you some credit for the prologue: that situation does hook the reader in, and especially so considering the fact that there's also a cliffhanger-of-sorts at the end of it. So yeah, well done on that ^^

For characters, I think Stacy's coming off as interesting, though I've barely seen her. Idk what to think of Gouda/most of the other characters I've seen so far... but Flash seems like the cat who'd get into trouble. idk why.

I spotted a few misspellings of 'the' as 'teh' in what I've seen so far - two of them are in the second-to-last lines of their chapters (aka the prologue and the first chapter) and the other is somewhere around the middle of the second (Brams is too lazy to count lines rn xPP). Other than that I didn't notice anything ^.^

When I get the chance, I'll get to the rest, but good job so far C:

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