Talk:Not Letting Up/@comment-5342796-20160207045857



YES RAINSTORM GOT THEM OUT

Thank goodness because they were falling apart. The scene with them arguing was very realistic; there's no way you can endure all the stresses they have without losing your temper a bit. I do hope that they manage to regain their unity full force soon. I feel like Rainstorm gave them a beacon of hope to rally around, but I'm not quite sure if it's strong enough. They still have so much to contend with. She may have won this battle against Shadowfang, but he won't forget it;

The monologue at the beginning :O Who the heck is this? They don't seem very sinister. Mysterious, yes, but not really sinister. I'm inclined to be more curious than worried, though that might change; who knows?

And Flareheart. Poor thing. I wasn't a big fan of her at first but she's beginning to gain my sympathy because of all she's had to put up with. She's only trying to live her life the way she thinks she has to, and even the fact that she's begun to rebel against her mother--though of course not the same way the actual rebels do--is remarkable considering all the indoctrination poured into her. I think we don't realize sometimes the strength it takes to go against the grain, to stand for what we believe in; we don't give these young cats enough credit for making the choice to try to find their own path, their own concept of what is right and what is wrong.

UGH SNOW/LION. On the one hand I'm so glad because REALISTIC RELATIONSHIP PORTRAYAL. On the other hand my heart is breaking because Snowflare feels inable and overprotected, and Lionclaw feels hurt and rejected, and I just want the two of them to be happy.

Meanwhile Hawk and Rain consistently worrying for each other and having each other's backs is as fantastic ever. And the tension between Amber and Brown was very believable and well done; I'm kinda glad you included all the feuds, to be honest, because it was just a sensible way to portray the dynamic of the characters, instead of just having them be all like "WE'RE BFFS IN A WAR :D :D :D" you know?

AMAZING JOB. I love Beauty so much c: <3

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