Talk:Even So/@comment-5342796-20151031042726

PARTS ELEVEN - TWENTY

OH MY GOSH.

I DON'T BELIEVE IT. FAITH AND THE OTHER KITS ARE DEAD. I CAN'T BELIEVE THEY GOT CAUGHT--I suppose it's absolutely realistic, considering all the cats that were out searching for them, but I really thought they would make it.

It's a brutal price to pay for Lash's first real attempt to act on her urge to escape. Yet it makes her cause all the more urgent, despite it being such a severe consequence. You realize that Lash is wililng to risk everything to escape and be free; she really believes that the lives of the cats she loves so much will be much better when they've left. It shows you a lot about her character; she's unable to accept injustice, unable to deny her instincts, and unable to leave anyone behind. The way she mentors and guides her group of cats is incredible for her age.

And it makes me wonder. Why is anyone willing to betray her when she's been such a fair leader to them? What does the overseer have over their heads? Surely it can't just be blind loyalty?

The same questions running through Lash's mind are the ones running through mine, which means you've done an amazing job with suspense and build-up and clues. I'm sure you're dropping even more clues; they just make no sense right now. I can't wait for the moment that things fall into place, and more is revealed about the make-up of this group. There are so many odd things about the way the overseer rules, not the least how focused he is on power above survival--though I guess that for him specifically, power is survival.

Ember and Lash's talk was really sweet; it was short but poignant, and I'm glad that even if Gingersnap is distant right now, Lash still has friends. After losing Faith and having her old friends turn their backs on her, she needs all the support she can get. Also, I totally know I'm going to wind up shipping Ember and Lash... Let's see where their relationship goes.

Your sections are just SO good, jam-packed with symbolism, action, and plot advancement. And the characterization continues to be excellent! We're meeting some new cats now that the squads have changed, and I'm interested to see how their dynamic will be.

Again, I LOVE THIS STORY. How do you even think of this stuff? Amazing job, I honestly can't think of a single thing to criticize. Agggh it's so good!!!

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