Talk:Lost Love/@comment-8248793-20151129191907

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Interesting format you have, though I hope it's not just a short section of Hynn and a short section of Birchpelt C:

I'm not sure if you're just intending for this, but each time is always feel super short (not just about the length, the way when you read it) and I always feel like you could add more to the storyline instead of just describing how she felt at first. I definitely would go for more descriptive one-shots, like a story, but just without chapters!

But I do love the short beats, it adds effect, I just don't feel having the entire one-shot like this would be the best approach C; Of course if you want, go for it!

I like how you make their love stand out, instead of spending the first intro on describing the characters thoroughly and developing their love. It makes the story jump into the main point of the story, and makes in interested in finding out how their personalities match to cause them to love each other.

Good start!

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