A new point of view

my first short-story tell me if i did anything bad in it.

prolouge:

" heathertail, antpelt where were you" onestars angered meow sounded behind them."you are holding us all up"

antpelt responded to him "we found this loner on the border" he roughly pushed forward a small grey tom. but older than any senior warrior.

onestar looked angered "he probaly strayed off thunderclan territory, we'll give him back at the gathering".

chapter 1: "there it looks like windclan did decide to come" blackstars irritated meow sounded from the lowest branch of the great oak.

"sorry we were helld up by a stray loner "

"well onestar it sounds as if your blaming me for your warriors not being competent enough to tell the difference between a rabbit and a loner" firestar sounded angry.

onestar retorted "where else did he come from"

for the first time the loner spoke "why dont you ask me?"

mistyfoot hopped down "okay where did you come from and why are you here?" she questioned him

he gazed at her then said "i come from everywhere and nowhere"

lionblaze muttered " could he be anymore vague"

the loner snapped "could you be anyore disrespectful"

lionblaze bristled. everyone knew not to fight with him.

firestar padded forward "so your a loner"he inquired

the tom replied "i am a travellor"

everycat was angered by this replie. that was what sol was.

chapter 2:

"you cats come here" brambleclaw, leafpool, squirrelflight, firestar, lionblaze, jayfeather, and graystripe padded forward. they were dreaming. the loner spoke in the raspy voice that was his. "i am known for my knowledge on every subject ask me any question of advice" brambleclaw stepped forward suddenly they were alone inthe darkforest. there stood tigerstar,hawkfrost,darkstripe,thistleclaw,and brokenstar. "they cannot see us" brambleclaw asked him what is going on here?" the loner replied "they are rising reparing to a ttack our very souls".

brambleclaw asks "should i forgive squirellflight"

the loner answered "no she lied to you and is not your mate................................................."

if you want me to finish tell me and i will