Talk:Fiends/@comment-5197876-20160822045704

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whoa

okay, i really really like this. Violet, Willow, and Aurora are such solid characters so far, I think you did a really nice job of introducing them, and establishing who they are.

killing Mothfly was really sudden, but I really liked the touch as well? The last line of the prologue is really chilling in a way too, as well as the thoughts prior to it. the line 'not into the holly bush, but into our hearts' is so nice, it's so spooky but it hits hard, y'know?

and chapter one!

poor Blackbird?? first Roseleaf and Fernstripe, next this sickness that's probably going to kill Riverfur? weeps

i love the use of the word 'idyllic' it's so haunting in a way i have trouble describing, but just the way you used it in that line was incredble

' They reached for each other. He buried his face in her fur and felt the moons fall away -- he could have been an apprentice again, clinging to his best friend.

"I'm home again," sighed Violet.

It was strange, how he'd never left, but he'd been thinking the exact same thing.

'

^^this was so good i cry

overall, incredible! great work! c:

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