Talk:Days Until Heartbreak/@comment-5342796-20150628225116



Unbreakable

YOU LOVE HER, YOU BARELY KNOW HER! ICE WHAT ARE YOU DOING I DEMAND YOU BE MORE INDEPENDENT AND IF YOU WANT TO BE HONEST TELL HER WHAT YOU'RE HIDING/HAVE TO PROTECT HER FROM, BRO.

Obsession

Hm, very interesting... Ice is obviously hiding something, but I have no idea what it could be. Shineblossom appears to be blackmailing him... What does she have over his head?

Also, Sari is a very interesting character. She's very into self-preservation. Which is a refreshing change to see in a main character--one that trusts her own instincts rather than always worrying about the right thing.

I guess I just don't understand why Ice and Sari have such intense feelings for each other already? Like I dunno, I love them as friends so I would've really liked it if they formed a strong friendship before they fell in love. But maybe that's just how they roll c:

Also, I feel really bad for Aura. I feel like Sari betrayed her friendship... D: I also feel like Sari's going to regret making so many enemies, because betrayal stings worse than any rivalry, and Aura knows her too well to be trusted as an enemy. She can use those secrets against Sari.

Eternity

I liked the battle training section! It's nice to see Ice-less Sari for a bit, being her tough self! She makes a pretty good leader to be honest, except she needs to work on not being bitter towards Aura xD Poor, poor Aura.

I love the characters in this story, and I know it's going to get better and better. I can't wait to see what you have planned. Awesome job! <3