Talk:Permanent/@comment-5197876-20130915154727

THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL

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I seriously wish I could write like you. This is such an original idea, despite being a fanfic. This dove into action from the beginning, as FireClan rebelled.

SmokexGray IS SO CUUUUUTE, and I teared up when she was taken by whoever it was that stole her. The battle was heart-wrenching, and I could feel all the emotion churning through me.

Then Smokepaw wanting to leave, so he could escape all the memories was breath-taking, and him just saying goodbye was so beautiful.

Okay I need to finish the comment before I start crying.

I found no mistakes, and the writing style is flawless.

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