Talk:Breaking Everything/@comment-16166566-20130726151357

I really enjoyed this story, but the lengths of the chapter could of been longer. I have a few questions about the story:

What was the prophecy for the reflection in the water?

I have to say, the fact that Rock killed Jayfeather surprised me but back to the point:

I would of made the chapters longer and more descriptive about the surroundings but thats just my opinion.

Your grammer is amazing and you explained things so well! I have good hopes for you: 7/10