Talk:The Raven's Flight/@comment-27704197-20160310121523

Spoilers:

The dialogue isn't in proper format for writing. That's about it. Other than that it's awesome!

Ex of proper format for dialogue:

"I like cupcakes!" Ella said.

"I do too!" George smiled.

Cupcakes were the first thing that came to my mind.. Just make a new paragraph for each time a different person speaks! Other than that your story is really creative!

End Spoilers