Talk:The Curtain Rises/@comment-8248793-20140906000848

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I don't think it's Nightwhisker, it's too easy to just accuse him like that, especially finding all the clues in one episode.

Obviously I don't know what happens next, and I'm utterly thrilled to figure out what happens and who really killed Skyflower.

This was good length, and the details in it were perfect and very suspenseful. What I liked the most was how Swallowpaw took control, and how her attitude just proved that she was an outspoken apprentice.

My only problem was the fact that Moonshade acted like a complete idiot, and you made her sound like one. Usually main charries aren't introduced like that, and I have a feeling she's not stupid, but the way you said it made it look as though she was. I also had a problem with Swallowpaw, she was too rude for my taste, and I don't think she should be like that.

Adding on, I think you should have tried to add onto why they "forget" the dead and such, and the history of the Clan.

Other than that, I loved this first episode, and you really got me hooked! <3

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