Talk:Long Live (Songfic)/@comment-8248793-20150329001514

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Aw I wanted him to meet Tigerpaw(lily) in ShadowClan territory D: I hope she comes and saves him, though I don't think she'll do much to help Bluefang nowadays.

You're writing makes me feel like I am the character, which makes me feel geniunely sorry for Bluefang and all he's been through so far. I really like how you use heavy words to show us how bad Bluefang's situation kind of is. It really strengthens his thoughts and feelings to the readers.

This is really smooth (like most of your writings) and I like how you just go with the flow and keep adding new events. You don't take up too many sections to write a scene out, and you don't pause too long to jump into the next event. (like I do with songfics xD)

Anyways, still really good and I want another update soon :D <3

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