Talk:A Bloodthirsty Leader/@comment-34633311-20160819143402

spoilers probably

I understand that this is your first fanfiction, and might I say, it's pretty good! A few things I'd like to point out: there's a bit of some strange reasoning in this, which I understand and enjoy (as I do some myself, such as with For the Birds and Labyrinth) but it's a little bit stretched. That's one thing that I usually don't enjoy, but this was also kind of confusing for me. How exactly is Leafstar pregnant three times within...what is it, six moons? Since I normally try to be realistic, that would mean she'd be pregnant immediately after she gave birth??

Sorry for the massive amount of confusion I suffered here, but it's still pretty good.

end spoilers probably