Talk:If Whitestorm Lived.../@comment-24645319-20131116074440

If I were the writer, I'd start off at. Firestar's death.

There's something that makes no sense. Whitestorm died in the Darkest Hour, which was probably when Firestar died in this story. But when 'Whitestar' came back from his leadership ceremony JAYFETAHER was there and Jayfeather is from the. Power Of three.

This is a bit fast-paced, I suggest slowing it down a little.