Talk:The Forgotten Kit/@comment-24489212-20140526162205

Sorry, but I don´t like it... I mean, that it is hard to read, there are no full stops, and, well, a kit couldn´t defeat a eagle, a mother wouldn´t forget her kit, and no kit could keep as long as Blizzardkit alive, and keep going, reach a Clan of cats in time... What I suggest?

'Use paragraphs, full stops, stop calling cats mommy, cats don´t call that their mother, stop making Mary Sues, and use LOGIC- ''NO  MOTHER WOULD LEAVE HER KIT! '(Imagine Daisy.)''