Talk:Black Pelt, White Lie/@comment-26285531-20160105040315



I like how you started and wrapped this story up: both on a strange, mysterious note, making us want to read on and find out more about the plot and what secret Ashpelt is hiding!

I like the way you wrote your flashbacks and it kind of reminds me of Erin Hunter's style of writing - with italicization, first-person viewpoint.

I also liked the format of your story, the way you centered everything, and wrote almost in poem/short story format. I'd encourage not to use the format for all your stories because it really shortens the amount of content and doesn't give you the full impact of the story itself (I feel like), but I think it's still a unique way to write! :) <3

