Talk:Whitepaw's Adventure

This is good! You should work on capitalization though. And I can help you with coding if you like. :) Also, Hope this helps!  Thanks for  the Giving  I lub me some food 17:10, November 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * Both his parents are named 'Sun'....it's kinda repetitive. I know that there can be two cats with the same name (Ashfur and Ashfur- LOL) but idk.  Might wanna change that.
 * Sometimes you repeat things, ex: Lightheart also stood up. Lightheart stood up.