Talk:Popularity Sucks-/@comment-5342796-20160718015302



You know, I'm starting to think the crime referred to in the title is committed by Smokepaw. How much can she take before she goes over the edge? Of course, part of it is she's sort of overreacting to everything, and she's obsessed with Dustpaw XD But hey, perfect main charries are boring. She keeps it interesting.

Just a suggestion, in the 3rd paragraph, I'd suggest separating the part about Dashstar and the part where it switches to Smokepaw. I'm not sure if there was originally a break there and wiki screwed it up, but I was really confused by the POV switch.

The Gathering was interesting. Poor Clawpaw, lol. It's totally great that he just wants to be friends; Smokepaw could use a little less thought about romance in my opinion :p

The apprentice group is really amusing and I am secretly harboring hopes that they will eventually grow up and learn to be friends and be like "lol remember when we hated each other". But that's just me. I honestly have no idea where this is going and that adds to my curiosity!

nice job!

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