Talk:On the Side/@comment-25630395-20141205103647

I finally commente :)

1.I like how you introduced the sisters' different personalities really well. Usually (for me at least), intorductions have monotoned characters that don't really have a personality yet. But here, I could immediatly see that Storm and Shade wer kind of opposites.

2. The plot is interesting, but I think you could have elaborated a little more on why they are going off on a journey. I can infer, but it's a tad bit confusing.

3. I noticed two errors: Once, you called Mistystar ' Mistysta'. Second time, when Bramblestar says: There is too little strong warriors left in my Clan," shouldn't it be there are too little strong warriors left in my Clan? I'm no grammar expert though :)>

But overall, really good! I wil be watching for more (that sounds creepy) :3