Talk:Blocked Moon/@comment-5342796-20130801000558

>SPOILERS<

Wow. Okay. This is really good, Eevee. You should be really proud of this. The plot develops excellently throughout the whole book, with a gradual build-up as things start stacking on top of each other and adding up. On the other hand though, there are lots of minor trivial dilemmas like cranky queens and such to make it very Warriors-like, and keep the reader occupied.

Constructive criticism: I will say that the scene where each leader was explaining that Mothermouth was blocked got a tiny bit repetitive, though I see why it was included.

I do think it's a lot harder to write an intriguing, good fanfic when you're writing from several different Clans though, and you did a really good job of that here.

This is part of a series, I believes, so I'm off to read the next one :D <3

