Talk:Fiends/@comment-8248793-20160812181550

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Even though we only knew Roseleaf as a name in the prologue and still as a name here in chapter one, I still feel Blackbird's (heh in Vale it was Bluebird xD) pain at losing his to-be mate, although I'm excited because Violet's back and he obviously cares for her more :)

The moment the sisters got back was an emotional and cute lil part, I think I would have prefered if Blackbird only went to the den once, like maybe they went after the meeting and Riverfur and Blackbird talked until the sisters stumbled upon them? Like it felt like we were just there and suddenly we had to come back so the sisters could come back at the end of the chapter

I'm interested to see the development on the sickness (I THOUGHT YOU WERE DONE WITH TWISTS BUT NOPE) I really hope it's not going to kill Riverfur because I feel like that would cripple Blackbird beyond words since he already lost his mother and a potential mate to it.

But I really like your plot! I can see you've already developed it and I know because it's you it's going to be action packed and an amazing story :)

<3

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