Talk:Linked(Series)/@comment-25531638-20130819012529

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Dangerous Escape

I love the way how you made PebbleClan such a, um, "drama place" as I will put it. It adds to the story, and I can really feel Rainstar's frustration with everyone.

The Twolegs coming with guns was very sudden, which I actually think was good, because it had an element of surprise.

Failed Escape

I think Hailstar's depression after failing to keep her Clan well-protected after the Twoleg incident was definitely in depth and great. Although sometimes I felt that it was a bit dragged out, I still thought it was great.

Failed Security

The emotion in each of these is very touching, and it helps the reader relate, especially in this one. Thunder getting lost was the perfect excitement to enhance the chapter.

Lost Security

Oooh, Thunder's "new life". I can't wait to see how that plays out. But there's not really enough of this one to be constructive, so yeah xD

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