Talk:Determined to Prove/@comment-25506752-20141010125705

Hey Brambs! I enjoyed your story and Mudkit/paw and Shadekit/paw. Mudpaw reminds me a bit of Jayfeather and how he hated being pittied by his clanmates and wanted them to treat him as a normal clanmember not a poor useless cat.

I will suggest a little improvement with the part, when you mention Birchkit/paw is a snob. I would say put a little more information in with that, like; what does he do to be a snob? or put in short sentence in it where he is being a snobby cat. At the beginning he seems like a bit of an inpatient, pushy cat rather than a snob.

Great job anyway! I will be reading the rest of your stories!