Talk:Elders Tales/@comment-25531638-20130828141157

This is a great idea. I love the way you introduce us to Nightpounce's story with the little intro-thingy. That was good. But is Nightpounce telling a group of kits? Or is she lost in thought? If it's the former, you should probably add in a bit more detail about that.

Well Nighkit's perfect life seems to be getting set up for something interesting... I like how everything seems fine right now, but it will all explode later on.