Talk:Starlight, Heartlight/@comment-25531638-20130702014802

This was pretty amazing! You're sure to place in the contest.

I thought that the whole idea was very capturing. And I especially loved the poem! I just thought that maybe you should've dragged things out a little bit, and made Fawnfire feel worse about breaking Eagleshadow's heart. There were also a few grammar mistakes, and you mentioned that Eagleshadow and Fawnfire never had kits twice.

But over all, an amazing story!