Talk:Twelve Days/@comment-8248793-20170630184636

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This is a pretty cool beginning I have to say. It's definitely an eye-catching opening and I loved your first sentence! It shows the irony of Redstar's rule and the "strength" of WindClan that led to its downfall. It also made me anticipate WindClan being high strung and super powerful until I realized they were all supposed to die because of your prompt xD

I loved the way you narrated the first section! The descriptions written for the Scarlet Death were brief but enough for us to visualize what the painful disease seemed like. Redstar is one lucky cat to not have gotten the disease since everyone else did. Though I am curious if ThunderClan and RiverClan had extracted the disease since they were fighting against infected warriors...maybe that's a plot point of yours haha

I'll be honest, I was shocked by the savagery of the other two Clans. I wouldn't have expected them to tear down WindClan and kill all of their cats, regardless of feuds and other factors. So maybe you could have elaborated briefly on why the other Clans wanted WindClan completely decimated?

I have a feeling I know who Redstar becomes (I peeked at your form LOL) but I'm definitely excited to know how the quote on the top is going to be incorporated in! Great start! <3

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