Talk:The Forgotten Kit/@comment-24489212-20140526162205/@comment-24489212-20140526170841

Sorry, I never wanted to hurt anyone, but my stories-I write more thanIcyflower´s journey  are pretty much horrible. So I don´t want authors to write as me-horrible. And I got a bit carried off, I guess. But I am like that just in real life, so... ''So, Rapid.wabash: Add a bit more detail. Tell us what the cats and the camp look like, and more about the travelling. Where does he go? Does he get tired or want to give up? Show us more of the struggle with the hawk. Things like that would help make it a better, more interesting story. You have a good start, though. Keep writing :3''

I completly agree with that.