Talk:Pine Frost/@comment-11493954-20140118214048

I think you meant immature not unmature. You also put rif instead of rid. :P

I loved Shadowpaw, too bad she turned evil. But that created a great contrast between the siblings. Both had the influence of Snakeheart, yet Shadowpaw souldn't break away, and turned evil. Pinepaw was able to see past that. :)

The hissing in the beggining was certainly creepy, and that whole prologue started to show the setup of how Snakeheart took the kits away, instead of Paleflutter abandoning her.

Brilliant how you made Frostpaw hear Shadowpaw and Snakeheart's conversation. That was actually a really good way to show Pinepaw being good, father and daughter evil, and Frostpaw kind.