User blog:BeautifulSnowfur/My fanfic (finally):

 

Ok I know that normal people don't post their fanfics on blog posts, but I'm not normal XD.

No what I really wanted to say was, I think my fanfic has some mistakes in it, (bcause I wanted to make it perfect, like I said in some of my previous blogs) and I have been thinking about those mistakes of mine for a long time now, but I can't really straighten them out. Or, at least, I don't think I can.

Anyway, so the reason I posted my fanfiction on a blog post, is because I was wondering if whoever sees it would be able to tell me how to get rid of my mistakes. Also, if you see any mistakes besides the ones that I'm already aware of, plz please PLEASE post them in the comments below, weather the mistake is a minor mistake or a major one. And if you see any way I can make my story better (again, minor or major), please post that, too. I am not the kind of person who gets offended easily! So, even if you see a mistake that you think might offend me if you point it out to me, please write it anyway. I am almost virtually "unoffendable".

Anyway, the mistakes that I am already aware of, are at the very bottom of this blog, after the whole story. (Also, if you're wondering why this, my fanfic, looks so horrible, scroll all the way down till you see this *~* little sign thingy.)

And whoever posts a comment pointing out a new mistake, thank you so much! I want to make this story as perfect as possible (remember, even if you spot a minor mistake, tell me anyway - if you want).                                           

One more thing: apart from my wanting to make this book as good as possible, I also want to make it sound as much like an actual Warriors book as possible. So if you see anything that doesn't really look like what Erin Hunter would write, then post that in the comments, too (I might not so-called "correct" the "un-Erin Hunter" things that you may or may not post in the comments, FYI)

                 ALLEGIANCES               ~ THUNDERCLAN~ LEADER:             Shimmerstar- red                             she-cat with brown                              patches and amber                              eyes DEPUTY:             Blackfern- black she-                             cat with green eyes MEDICINE CAT': 'Littleberry- small  '''                             creamy gray and                             white she cat with                             blue eyes WARRIORS:        Brambleheart- silver                              tabby tom with blue                              eyes

                             Snowbreeze- white <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                             she cat with green <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                             eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                             Volefoot- light brown <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Stonespots- mottled long haired silver tabby tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Amberbreeze- she-cat with yellow pelt and amber eyes Apprentice, Oakpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(black tom with amber eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Lionclaw- dark tabby tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Swiftblaze- mottled orange tom with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Swallowfur- white she-cat with creamy gray spots and green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Rainfern- smoky dark gray tom with faint stripes and blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Poppyfur- tabby and white she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Ratclaw- red tabby tom with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Plumshade- tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sunbreeze- cream colored she cat with light brown eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpool- beautiful long haired gray she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sparrowflight- wiry long haired tabby she-cat with amber eyes APPRENTICES:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">         Oakpaw- black tom with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Firepaw- dark orange she-cat with orange eyes QUEENS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Lilyberry- white she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost- silver tabby with blue eyes, mother of Foxkit, Mistykit, and Leopardkit ELDERS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">            Thornheart- tom with long tabby fur and yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Dawnsong- she cat with long silver tabby fur and blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mouseclaw- black tom with dark blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">               ~ SHADOWCLAN<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">~ LEADER:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Ravenstar- small black tom with green eyes DEPUTY:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Pebbledust- light brown tom with amber eyes MEDICINE CAT: <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">      Toadspots- long haired black and white tom with yellow eyes WARRIORS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">         Snakefang- she-cat with amber fur and yellow eyes Apprentice, Blackpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(brown tom with one black paw and green eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Heatherfur- brown she-cat with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Barkstripe- gray tom with a black stripe and blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Greenberry- tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Moleclaw- small tom with gray-brown fur and amber eyes Apprentice, Leafpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(cream-colored tabby tom with blue eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Wildbird- tabby she-cat with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Stonetail- black tom with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Deerstripe- gray tom with long legs and amber eyes  Apprentice, Dustpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(yellow she-cat with green eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sootmist- smoky black long haired tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mousefern- tom with long gray pelt and bright blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Poolstorm- long haired tortoiseshell she-cat with amber eyes APPRENTICES:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Leafpaw- cream-colored tabby tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Blackpaw- brown tom with black paws and green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Dustpaw- yellow she-cat with green eyes QUEENS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Whitefur- long haired white she-cat with amber eyes ELDERS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Nutstripe- tabby and white tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Fawnspots- tabby tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mudpelt- brown tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Goosestrike- gray she-cat with bright amber eyes                    ~'WINDCLAN'<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">~ ''' LEADER:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Silverstar- long haired gray she-cat with black stripes and bright blue eyes DEPUTY:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Leopardfang- tom with a dark tabby pelt and bright amber eyes MEDICINE CAT:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">     Moonpool- tabby and white she-cat with green eyes  Apprentice, Thornleaf<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> (black tom with green eyes) WARRIORS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Blueflower- silver-blue she-cat with bright blue eyes Apprentice, Icepaw<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> (white she-cat with blue eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Nettlestrike- tabby and white she cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Runningbreeze- pure white tom with long legs and yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mintleaf- small gray tabby she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mudwhisker- black and brown tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Rabbitspots- gray she-cat with black spots and green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sandtail- tom with yellow fur and bright blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Birdfeather- gray she-cat with three black paws <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Redpelt- red tom with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Morningbreeze- tortoiseshell she-cat with brown eyes Apprentice, Seedpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(gray tom with yellow eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Stormheart- black tom with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Badgerclaw- gray and white tom with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Skyfur- brown she-cat with brown eyes Apprentice, Breezepaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(light brown she-cat with blue eyes) APPRENTICES:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Icepaw- white she-cat with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Thornleaf- black tom with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Seedpaw- gray tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Breezepaw- light brown she-cat with gray eyes QUEENS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Yellowbird- golden she-cat with brown eyes ELDERS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Buzzardstrike- silver tabby tom with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Gorsebriar- cream colored she-cat with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                  ~ RIVERCLAN<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">~ LEADER:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Waterstar- gray tom with blue eyes DEPUTY:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Icehawk- white long haired tom with amber eyes  Apprentice, Creekpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(long haired gray and white tom with blue eyes) MEDICINE CAT:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    Smokeblaze- long haired gray tom with amber eyes WARRIORS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">        Shadowstone- long haired smoky black tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Frostbird- white she-cat with silver patches and amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Shrewfur- tom with long creamy pelt and bright blue eyes Apprentice, Silverpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(silver she-cat with blue eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Streamfish- long haired white and brown tom with amber eyes  Apprentice, Bumblepaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(tabby tom with yellow eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Featherstripe- silver tabby she-cat with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Thistlefur- tabby tom with green eyes Apprentice, Sandpaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(long haired tabby she-cat with blue eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Robinheart- brown she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Reedshade- tom with light brown pelt and brown eyes APPRENTICES:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Creekpaw-  long haired gray and white tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sandpaw- long haired tabby she-cat with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Bumblepaw- tabby tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Silverpaw- silver she-cat with blue eyes QUEENS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">        Dapplefur- tortoiseshell she-cat with yellow eyes ELDERS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Duckjaw- ginger she-cat with amber eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Waspclaw- tabby she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Raggedeye- red long haired tom with one eye <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                   ~ SKYCLAN<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">~ LEADER:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                Applestar- she-cat with a light brown pelt and blue eyes DEPUTY:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Mistleaf- tortoiseshell and white she-cat with blue eyes MEDICINE CAT:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">        Vineleaf- long legged tortoiseshell she-cat with yellow eyes WARRIORS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Moonshade- she-cat with short blue gray pelt and bright blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Icefeather- long haired smoky gray tom with icy blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Stormfrost- pure white she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Fernstripe- silver  tabby tom with blue eyes  Apprentice, Jaypaw <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">(light gray tabby she-cat with green eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Wingflight- long legged black and white she-cat with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Robineye- black tom with yellow eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Deerwing- brown she-cat with blue eyes  Apprentice, Goldpaw<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> (yellow  tom with blue eyes) <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Grayfoot- white she-cat with three gray paws and blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Beechfur- brown and white tom with green eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Sunwater- orange she-cat with big orange eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Specklefur- black tom with white paws and tail tip APPRENTICES:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">         Goldpaw- yellow  tom with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Jaypaw- light gray tabby she-cat with yellow eyes QUEENS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">           Applestar- she-cat with a light brown pelt and blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Berryfur- brown she-cat with yellow eyes ELDERS:<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">          Birdclaw- gray and brown she-cat with blue eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Clawfoot- black she-cat with amber eyes CATS OUTSIDE THE CLANS <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Amelie- brown she-cat with distinct tiger stripes and gray eyes <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Shere Khan- muscular brown tom with tiger stripes and green eyes               '                     PROLOGUE:'' Her paws thrummed on the forest <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">floor. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Ferns, trees, and bramble thickets all swept past her as the she-cat ran, exitement surging through her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   She took no care, now, to pad quietly and stealthily, as she always did. She was too exited, and besides, why should she? The camp was far behind her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   But she couldn't run as fast as she always did. Not when she carried an extra weight, one that had slowed her down quiet a lot lately. And now she was going to tell him about it, about the good news. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    She slowed her pace, going along at a trot. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The silver she-cat was nearing Fourtrees now. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Apprehension rose in her belly, making her pause. What if he wasn't there? Maybe one of his clanmates had found him sneaking away. What if he was stopped from coming to meet her? And then, she could never tell him the news. At least, not until the next Gathering. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    She imagined herself walking up to him in the throng of cats, giving him a polite nod, telling him that she was going to have kits. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Not his kits. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Just. . .  Kits.<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">And then, he wouldn't look at her, with his eyes sparkling with exitement. He wouldn't be able to purr his hapiness. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">He would curtly congragulate her, give her a nod, then walk away, disapear into the crowd. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  She took a deep breath, forcing herself to expect his absence, then looked over the rise. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Her heart thumped as she searched the moonlit clearing for the signal. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">There! <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">A wave of relief swept through her as her gaze rested on a clump of ferns which was shaking vigorously in the wind. It wasn't noticeable enough to any other cat that might have been following, but definately noticeable enough to her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    The gray she-cat straightened up and looked behind her, in front of her, in every direction, her eyes narrowed and muscles tensed. She searched every thorn bush for accusing eyes, she looked for the flash of one of her clan mate's familiar pelts, or perhaps a cat from RiverClan. She strained her ears, listening for the sound of a twig snapping, or a shocked meow. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Nothing. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She sighed with relief. She wasn't going to be found out tonight. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The cat whirled around and clawed her way up a silver birch. She scrambled high up the white trunk, reaching the branch that she had picked out specifically for her agreed all-clear signal. The branch wasn't at all thick enough to support her weight, in contrast it was almost as thin as her own tail. But that was why she had picked it. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The silver she-cat clawed carefully higher until she was directly above the small branch. Then, holding on with her front claws with all her might, she released her hind claws and set them on the designated branch. The gray cat pressed down on the branch, purposefully making it sway unnaturaly, up and down, up and down. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She stopped and turned her head as far back as she could in that position, looking toward the clump of ferns again. She could barely make out the tiny pair of glowing green eyes that were hidden there, but she knew she saw them blink. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Knowing that the other cat had seen her signal, she scrambled down the tree again and raced down toward the Gathering place. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">As she neared the Great Rock, a brown tabby tom emerged from the fronds. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The silver she-cat brushed pelts with him and twined her tail with his, purring loudly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then she stopped. "Thistlefur," she mewed exitedly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Hmm?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Guess what?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"You know I don't like guessing." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Just do it!" she purred. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Let's see. . . You've become deputy?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"No, silly! Guess again." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"You've got an apprentice?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"No!" she purred. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Thistlefur lifted his head and looked into the she-cat's gleaming blue eyes. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Okay, I give up. What is it?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The silver cat reared up on her hind legs. "We're going to have kits!" she exclaimed. Then the gray she-cat let herself crash down on Thistlefur, and the two cats rolled back and forth on the ground in a mock fight. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Thistlefur raised a paw and batted his mate away easily, then stood up. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"No, really, Pebblefrost. Enough with the joke. What was it you really wanted to tell me?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost shook out her sandy pelt. "I'm not joking!" she mewed, her eyes wide. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   Thistlefur stared at Pebblefrost, hapiness flooding into his eyes. He opened his mouth to say something, but nothing came out. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost purred again and swiped her tongue over Thistlefur's ear. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  Then the she-cat stiffened as she heard the sound of fur brushing against leaves. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Before she could say anything, a familiar voice growled, "What's going on here?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  Pebblefrost whipped around and saw ThunderClan's deputy standing behind her. The black she - cat's green eyes were shining furiously. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I don't remember giving you orders to meet with a RiverClan warrior!" she meowed angrily. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   A pang of remorse hit Pebblefrost. It was all her fault. She <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">was the one who was carelessly stomping through the forest. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Blackfern - " <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">" No<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">. I don't want to hear it," Blackfern meowed coldly. "Get back to camp. You'll explain yourself to Shimmerstar." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The black she-cat walked away with her head held high. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost turned around and looked into her mate's green eyes. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">~A wave of overwhelming memories swept through Pebblefrost, almost knocking her over. She recalled all the good times she had spent with Thistlefur, how they had chased each other back and forth under the wide-spreading branches of Fourtrees, and how they had climbed up the Great Rock and talked about when they would train apprentices of their own. The she-cat remembered how Thistlefur had taken her to the river and taught her how to swim, and catch shining, wriggling fish. And those memories were already becoming bittersweet. Pebblefrost almost couldn't believe that this was happening. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   "So, I guess this is good-bye?" she meowed sadly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Thistlefur stepped forward and touched noses with the beautiful silver she-cat. "I'll never forget you," he meowed. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Good-bye, Thistlefur," Pebblefrost breathed. "I'll always love you." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The two cats entwined their tails for the last time under the stars. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   Blackfern's voice rang out from the top of the crest. "Pebblefrost! Get back here!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The gray she-cat turned back to Thistlefur and said, "And whatever happens, I promise I'll tell my kits about you." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                   CHAPTER ONE: <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">A  'soft' 'breeze 'whispered' 'through the <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">walls of the nursery den as dawn quietly snuck in. A small kit was curled up with her mother and littermates, snoring softly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">But the wind must have disturbed her gray fur, because the kit's ears twitched, and she woke up. Blinking in the soft daylight, the young gray cat raised her head, timidly checking to see if any other cat was stirring. When she realized that nobody was awake, the kit sighed with relief, then stood up and quietly padded out of the den. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Once outside, the gray cat looked around. Her gaze rested on some leaves, several fox-lengths away, lying next to a fallen tree. Eyes sparkling with excitement, the kit soundlessly hurtled herself across the clearing and dove into the leaves, sending them fluttering in all directions. The cat raced after a particular leaf that was floating too close to the ground. Snatching it up with her paws, she threw it into the air again, batting at it, not letting it touch the ground. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">All of a sudden, a soft call made the gray cat pause. "Mistykit!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Forgetting all about the leaf, the kit raised her tail and galloped away in the direction of the nursery. A beautiful silver tabby was leaning out of the entrance, annoyance sparkling in her eyes. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    "Mistykit, how many times do I need to tell you not to come out of the nursery without my permission?" the queen whispered sternly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit stopped in front of the silver queen. "I'm sorry, Pebblefrost. But I can't help it. The morning was so beautiful, I just had to go out." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost paused for a moment. "Okay. You can get up before anyone else, but only if you promise to be quiet." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit rubbed her head against Pebblefrost's shoulder affectionately. "I promise," she meowed. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   The gray kit straightened up and looked toward the far side of the camp. By that time the Clan was starting to stir. Cats were coming out of their dens and gathering under the Highrock, and a black she-cat walked out from a den in the rock. Mistykit was too far away to hear what she was saying, but it looked like the black cat was giving orders to the waiting warriors. Some of the cats were already gathering brambles, and weaving them into the camp walls. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">              Mistykit turned toward her mother. "Pebblefrost, can I see if there is anything I can help the Clan with?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The silver queen shook her head. "No, Mistykit. You can do that in three moons, when you have become an apprentice." The gray kit started to protest, but her mother was not done speaking. "Why don't you go and get me some fresh-kill instead? You can have some, too; you're already old enough to eat proper food now."

<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit's eyes shone with pleasure, and her tail gave a happy little flick. "Thank you!" she purred. The kit bounced joyfully away and stopped at the fresh-kill pile.

<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">There was little prey; a gray, bushy-tailed squirrel, a brilliant blue thrush, and a small mouse, but what caught Mistykit's eye was a juicy vole. She picked it up and started to carry it to the nursery, but just then a voice mewed her name. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The kit turned around and saw her older sister, Mothpaw, trotting towards her. The sun was shining on her pretty gray fur, and Mistykit wished she was as beautiful as her sister. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit spat out the vole from her jaws and meowed, "Hi Mothpaw!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Hi," Mothpaw returned. "Listen, do you want to take a walk with me up the ravine?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit lowered her head. At any other time, she would have loved to climb up the ravine for the first time, but she also wanted to have real  food.<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> She felt torn. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I. . . " <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Her sister's tail flicked against her shoulder. "Come on, it'll be fun! I won't let you fall." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I'm not scared!" she meowed indignantly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw whisked around, brushing her tail against Mistykit's nose, and walked away. "If you're not scared, then prove it!" she mewed over her shoulder. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit's eyes followed her sister, who stopped to say something to a young black tom before continuing on to the gorse tunnel. I guess going up the ravine is better than eating a peice of prey',' <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">she decided. Snatching up the vole, Mistykit hurried to the nursery and scooted underneath the brambles. ''' <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   Inside, a white, swollen-bellied queen lay in the back of the nursery, trying to get more sleep. Next to her was Pebblefrost, who was washing a sleepily protesting kit with her tongue and smoothing his reddish-brown fur. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">A tortoiseshell kit played with Pebblefrost's tail. The kit pounced on it, then started kicking it carefully with her hind paws. Pebblefrost turned around and gently pushed the she-kit away. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Leopardkit, stop that!" she scolded. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Leopardkit bounced away, then saw Mistykit. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Hi, Mistykit!" she meowed. She gasped when she saw the vole. "Is that for me?" Leopardkit looked at her mother. "May I eat it, Pebblefrost?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The gray queen nodded. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Wow, thanks, Pebblefrost! "she squeaked, then bent down and took a mouthful. "It's delicous!" Leopardkit exclaimed with her mouth full and her blue eyes shining. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Pebblefrost stopped washing her kit. "Go on, Foxkit. You can have some of that vole, too," she said, letting him scamper away to eat. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Pebblefrost," Mistykit began, "may I go up the ravine with Mothpaw?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    Pebblefrost thought for a moment. "Yes, you can go. But be back by sunhigh." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Yes, mother," said Mistykit. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    "And be careful!" Pebblefrost meowed as Mistykit ducked underneath the brambles again. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Outside, the sun shone brightly. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The Clan was buzzing with life, warriors milling about and securing the camp walls. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit walked toward the camp entrance, dodging warriors as they walked. She hoped Mothpaw was still waiting for her; it had taken too long to ask for permission. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then a tail flicked her flank. Mistykit looked to her side and saw Mothpaw, walking along beside her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Gladness welled up inside Mistykit. It was so fun to spend time with her sister. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Last one to the gorse tunnel is a dead mouse!" she yowled as she pelted away, ignoring a grunt of surprise from her sister. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit ran fast, but Mothpaw was still gaining on her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit put on a burst of speed. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The tunnel was getting closer, closer, closer. . .  <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">All of a sudden, Mothpaw jumped clear over Mistykit and touched the gorse tunnel. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Made it!" she announced cheerfully. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">       Mistykit sat down with a bump, out of breath. Why did she ever think she could outrun Mothpaw? Her sister was two times bigger than her! She let out a sigh. "Can we rest, please?" she asked. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  Mothpaw nodded. "Sure, but not here. Cats will be coming back from patrol and we will be in their way. Let's go here." she gestured with her tail to the side of the entrance. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The kit followed her sister and lay down on the ground. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  "Mothpaw," Mistykit complained after a few moments of resting, "I haven't eaten all day. Can we go back and take something from the fresh-kill pile?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit looked at her sister. "Tell you what," she decided, "when we get to the top of the ravine, I'll catch something for the both of us." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Okay! Can we go now?" Mistykit leaped to her paws as if merely the thought of eating gave her energy. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   Mothpaw flicked her tail in silent agreement, and the sisters walked through the tunnel. Emerging on the other side, Mistykit saw a path; they walked through that, too. After walking for a few tail-lengths, they stopped at a slope. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  Mistykit gasped. It was huge! The ground rose so high. The whole slope was almost completely covered with rocks, and bushes dotted the ground. Two giant boulders sat at the bottom of the slope, a rockfall in between them. Staring up over the ravine, Mistykit could just barely see the forest beyond. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then she noticed the smell. Wild, prey-rich forest scent. Mistykit longed to go to the forest. If only Pebblefrost had let me<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">After a few moments, Mistykit let out a snort of impatience. How were they going to get up the ravine while standing still? If she didn't say anything to Mothpaw soon, leaf-bare would come and freeze both cats' paws to the ground! <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She nudged her sister. "Mothpaw!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Uh, what? Oh, right. Ravine." Mistykit looked at her sister. She thought she saw a dreamy look in Mothpaw's eyes, but it was probably just the bright sun playing tricks on her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   Mothpaw shook herself and walked over to the rockfall and climbed her way up. Every now and then, she would pause, shake herself after a few moments, then walk a few more steps. Mistykit thought she had never seen a cat walk slower. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Finally Mothpaw arrived at the top. She walked a little way away from the rockfall so that she wouldn't be in her sister's way, then fell deep into thought again. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit tipped her head to one side. What <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">was Mothpaw thinking about? She decided that if any cat offered her one wish right now, she would ask for the ability to read minds. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    Mistykit padded to the small slope and put her paw carefully on the first sharp rock. Finding a dull surface, she stepped on the stone. Scanning the jumble of rocks in front of her, she looked for the next smooth area to place her soft kit pads on. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">A few rabbit hops later, Mistykit landed at the top of the mini slope. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">   All of a sudden, a weight dropped down next to her, nearly startling Mistykit out of her fur. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw let out a  mrrow <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">of laughter. "Well, come on," she meowed. "We haven't got all day, you know." She turned around and walked away, and her sister trotted to catch up. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw led Mistykit along a mud gully and stopped at another massive boulder. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Right," said Mothpaw. "I'll climb up this rock first to show you how it's done." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She watched as Mothpaw scrabbled upward. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Notice how I. . . use the dents. . . in this stone. . . to climb," Mothpaw managed to choke out as she heaved herself up the rock and onto the top. "Now you try." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit looked at the first ledge in the rock and crouched down, then leaped forward and hooked her claws onto it. She reached out with her forepaw and caught hold of a crack, then propelled herself to another dent. She gripped it and pushed herself up, then realized that she was at the top of the giant stone. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I did it!" she said breathlessly, turning toward Mothpaw. "That was fun." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit looked back toward the camp, realizing that she was level with the tree tops. "Wow," she breathed. She hadn't realized that she was so high up. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit turned her gaze back to Mothpaw. "So, which way now?" she asked. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw turned around and walked toward a stony path. "This way." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">As Mistykit followed, she noticed that the sky was was darkening. Clouds had swum over to cover the sun in the bright gray sky. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit sighed. She had hoped that it would stay sunny throughout the whole day, but now it looked like it might rain again. It's been gray and gloomy for <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">ages , <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit thought ' '<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">frustratedly . When is it going to stop?''<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    Then she realized that Mothpaw had stopped walking and was waiting for her to catch up. She stopped herself just in time to aviod bumping into a walk of rock which rose high above the ground. Mistykit could tell that above the rock was the forest; when she backed away she could see the branch tips of the trees poking out. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Now, you have to be carefull here," said Mothpaw. "If you misjudge the jump, you'll bump into the cliff." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then, before Mistykit could say anything in reply, she leaped high into the air, caught the rock with her forepaws, and pulled herself out of sight, leaving Mistykit to stare after her in wonder. How did she get to be so good at jumping? <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw's gray head peeped out from over the cliff. "Come on. It's easy!" she mewed, making the kit even more surprised. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit paused for a moment. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">What if she didn't jump high enough? What if she slipped off at the last second? ''Don't worry! ''<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She told herself. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Making up her mind to jump, Mistykit took a deep breath, crouched, tensed her muscles, and using all the strength she had, she sprang into the air. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She was aware of her body getting higher and higher, and as she got closer to the top of the rock, she stretched out her front paws like her sister did. Then, closer still, she gripped the stone and tried to haul herself up. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">A pang of fear shot through her as her back legs scrabbled in empty air. She dug her front claws in, but they just scraped against stone. She was slipping, slipping. . . <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  All of a sudden, she felt Mothpaw's jaws close around her scruff, an instant after her paws lost hold of the rock. Heart beating, she felt herself being pulled away. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw set her sister down in the grassy cliff. As soon as she found her footing, Mistykit straightened up and nuzzled Mothpaw gratefully. "Thank you!" she exclaimed. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw shook her head. "you wouldn't have had such a bad fall, if I didn't catch you," she meowed, then added with a glint of amusement, "but you  do <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">need to work on your jumping, you furball." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit sat down. "And why is that?" she asked. "Aren't SkyClan apprentices the cats who need to work on jumping?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw took a playfull swipe at her sister's ear. "Be quiet," she purred. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then she stared off into the trees. "No, really," she breathed as the kit opened her mouth to say something. "I think I can smell mouse." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit nodded her head, and Mothpaw went off into the thick tangle of trees. Mistykit could hear some scuffling noises beneath the roots of a maple, and she could smell fresh-kill. Mothpaw padded quietly toward the sound, her paws not even brushing against the leaves. When she was near enough, she shot her paw into the roots, and the scuffling stopped. The next moment she was walking back to her sister with a plump gray mouse dangling from her jaws. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit's mouth watered and her stomach growled as Mothpaw layed the mouse down in front of her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Go on," meowed her sister. "I'm not supposed to eat until I have caught prey for the whole Clan." and with that she walked away into the forest again, probably to hunt, Mistykit thought. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The kit bent her head and took her first mouthfull of mouse. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She had never eaten anything better. It tasted of the forest, and so warm and fresh. She took another big bite and rolled it around in her mouth, savoring the delicous, warm flavors. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Many long moments later, Mistykit had finished the delicous mouse, and Mothpaw had come back with a squirrel, a pigeon, and two mice hanging by their tails. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw dropped the prey. "I think it's time we got back to camp, don't you?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I guess," said Mistykit. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Well then, how about helping me carry all this fresh-kill? Here, take the mice." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">As they walked through the gorse tunnel and into camp, Mistykit noticed that the sun was shining brightly again. ''Good! '' <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Then Shimmerstar, who was standing in the clearing, yowled, "Let all those cats old enough to fetch their own prey gather beneath the Highrock!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Immediately all the cats who were mending the camp walls, and some cats who were in their dens, stopped what they were doing and hurried to the center of the camp. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The kit and her sister quickly deposited their prey in the fresh-kill pile and went to join the others, but Mistykit noticed that instead of going over to her denmates, Mothpaw sat next her mentor, Volefoot. What's <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">that  all about<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">?  ''Is she mad at the other apprentices? ' ''There's no time to wonder. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She told ' '<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">herself ''. Go and find a place to sit! ''<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit darted around, looking for her mother, while warriors around her purred with amusement. At last she found Pebblefrost, who was sitting near the back of the Clan with her kits. She ran to them embarrassedly just as Shimmerstar started speaking. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"We have gained victory in the battle with RiverClan yesterday, and I give thanks to all my warriors for obtaining that victory. But, there are two apprentices who fought like warriors. Mothpaw and Sparrowpaw, come here," Shimmerstar beckoned to them with her tail. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The sisters padded to the leader with barely veiled excitement and stood beside her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I, Shimmerstar, leader of ThunderClan, call upon my warrior ancestors to look down upon these apprentices. They have trained hard to understand the ways of your noble code, and I commend them to you as warriors in their turn." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpaw's eyes were glittering with excitement, and Sparrowpaw was trembling. So <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">that's  ''what's going on! My sisters are going to be <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">warriors ! '' <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Sparrowpaw, Mothpaw," Shimmerstar went on, "do you promise to uphold the warrior code and to protect and defend this Clan, even at the cost of your life?" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">The two apprentice's voices rang out in unison as they replied, "I do." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Then by the power of StarClan, I give you your warrior names. Sparrowpaw, from this moment on you will be known as Sparrowflight. StarClan honors your bravery and your enthusiasm, and we welcome you as a full warrior of ThunderClan." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Shimmerstar took a step forward and lay her muzzle on Sparrowflight's lowered head, and the new warrior gave the leader's shoulder a lick, then walked away to join the other warriors, her eyes flaming with happiness. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Shimmerstar looked at the gray apprentice. "Mothpaw, from this moment on you will be known as Mothpool. ThunderClan honors your courage and strength, and we welcome you as a full member of ThunderClan." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothpool's tongue rasped over Shimmerstar's shoulder, then the warrior turned and padded to her clanmates, obviously trying to keep from bouncing like a new apprentice. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">As soon as she reached the cats, the whole clearing erupted into cheering. "Mothpool! Sparrowflight!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Mothpool! Sparrowflight!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mistykit ran to her sisters, chanting their names as she went. She reached Sparrowflight and gave her shoulder a lick, then did the same to Mothstorm. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Congragulations!" she yowled. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Thanks!" Sparrowflight purred. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Mothstorm just stayed silent, her eyes brimming with happiness. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">               ~  ~  ~  ~  ~  ~  ~  ~ <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">                         ` ° ` ° ` ° ` <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Let me be the warrior! You be the dog." Mistykit said. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Leopardkit walked up to her sister until they stood nose-to-nose. She was obviously trying to sound ferocious, but her eyes were glinting with amusement as she said, "No! I  hate<span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;"> dogs! They're so stinky, and-" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"How do you know they're stinky?" asked Snowbreeze, who was eating fresh-kill nearby. "You've never met one before." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I. . .  Well. . ." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Okay, fine. Let's find another game to play," said Mistykit, backing up and rubbing her nose. It almost hurt from being squashed against Leopardkit's nose. "Let's play. . ." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"I know!" exclaimed Leopardkit after a few moments. She leaned over to Mistykit's ear and whispered, "We can go to Littleberry and ask her for a bit of moss to play with. Then, we can go to Snowbreeze, look up at her with big, cute eyes, and she might play moss-ball with us!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"But how do you know it will work?" Mistykit whispered back. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Well, I heard Swallowfur and Plumshade talking about how cute Lilyberry's kits are, so we must be cute, too! Snowbreeze is bound to play with us if we act cute enough." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    Mistykit looked at Snowbreeze, who gazed at them suspicously before taking another mouthfull of her squirrel. "I don't know. . ." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Oh, come on!" Leopardkit exclaimed accidently, then dropped her voice back to a whisper. "It's worth a try." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Fine," said Mistykit. "But Snowbreeze was just looking at us." <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">    "Then we'll ask someone else." Leopardkit started walking toward the medicine den. "Come on!" <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"Wait!" Mistykit hissed. She looked over her shoulder, making sure that Snowbreeze wasn't about to ask them where they were going. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">No, she hadn't noticed them. She was too busy munching on her squirrel. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">  Mistykit pelted after her sister, who was waiting impatiently for her beside the tunnel of ferns. Then both kits plunged into the green tunnel, emerging in a grassy clearing that was surrounded by more ferns. The air in the clearing was filled with the sharp tang of herbs. Rays of sunlight shone into the enclosed space, reflecting itself on a small pool next to the wall of fronds, and a tall rock stood at the edge of the clearing, a wide crack running down its middle. It was hollow enough for a cat to use it as it's den. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">"This way!" Leopardkit said. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">She turned and pushed through an opening in the ferns, Mistykit following close behind her. <span style="font-family:Helvetica,Arial,'DroidSans',sans-serif;line-height:19.9999942779541px;">Darkness enveloped the kits as they went through the ferns. To be continued...

Okay, that's all! But of course, I am going to write more, as I am planning to write a normal Erin Hunter's Warriors long book. So, here are the mistakes that I already know of: Mistykit acts like she's like, I don't know, five moons old, but she is really only 3 moons old. I want her to act and talk like her age, but I don't know how. Any help? Also, even though ThunderClan had had a battle with RiverClan the day before, I did not describe any of the warriors to be battle scarred, or any physical signs of battle on them, at all. If I knew how to correct that, I would've, but I don't know how to. . . ? Okay I knew that I noticed the maximum 6 more mistakes in here, but I forgot what and where they were now. I guess I am going to post this now, and I'll just post my mistakes that I forgot, in the comments. Just one more thing that I wanted to say about my fanfic: I haven't planned out even half of this fanfic book, I am literally making it up as I go along, and that's how I want it to be. But I am almost (not all the way, because I don't know the future) sure that I will not just stop in the middle of my fanfiction and not write any more. It's too fun to write for me to do that. Just so you know...Also, if anyone has an idea about what the "climax", or main exciting part, of this story will be (I already thought of one, and I am going to use it if I don't come up with anything else, but it's not a good one.), then, if you want, could you post it in the comments? Thx. :)


 * ~* PS. Oh, wow. I clicked "publish", and now it's all one big mess, as you can see. it didn't look like this when I first pasted my fanfic on here! Oh, well. I don't have enough time to correct it, so I'll just leave it like that, very hard to read. Sorry that I can't fix it and hope you can make sense of the (almost) gibberish!