Talk:Ripples/@comment-8248793-20130722211647

Spoiler Alert.

I loved all the chapters so far. So I'll say them seperately.

Zaffie: The way Silverpaw said "surivival", made me feel like they were in terrible danger. The Others felt real, and dangerous. The description was nice, because it explained what the Others could do.

Stareh: Poor marshberry! This chapter made me even more scared for the cats. The Others can do so much damage, and it seems that the clans don't stand a chance. Your plot was great, and like Zaffie's, had excellent description.

Red: Hollystrike's speech was amazing. She seems shy, but a fierce warrior. Good qualities in times like this. I remember that you are "siblings" with Stareh's character, and the things going on were the same. I like the way your chapter went, and I thought it was fantastic.

So all three had their good points, and I couldn't fins any kinds of grammar mistakes. So I hope this collab keeps going well.

End of Spoiler Alert