Talk:Flicker/@comment-26285531-20150911062024

YO FIREY - finally got around to reading this awesome "Flicker" I keep seeing around~

competition post



One:

So this is a half-dystopia, half-rogue/every man for himself? COOL. I really do love things like this, because in the end it's great to watch the good cat get all the glory. :P

So for the technical things, the first part had a few grammatical errors~

Okay wow, I instantly fell in love with Lux the moment she stole that mouse. Like, ulterior actions, she's the kind who can steal your nose and get away without you noticing.

Oh no! So Lux has been helping Leo out with his family issues and lack of prey for so long, and this is how he thanks her? LEO YOU INSULTED MY FAVORITE CAT (even though this is only the first chapter lol) K, starting a Leo hate club~

Anyhoo, awesome job! Definitely reading more.

Two:

NO, SHE'S CAUGHT. I hate you so much, ye little grapefruit Leo.

But Lux is so awesome that I can tell this isn't the end of it.

When the Enforcement caught Lux "stealing," and Leo stood there like a lifeless stick, what caught my attention the most was this so-called "Fire Range." Seems Lux's home was there, along with her family, who also died there. Questions, questions! I'd really like to find out what the Fire Range.

K. That's really cool. A huge underground tavern, just like above, but without the sun? I don't know if anyone else thinks differently, but even with the same atmosphere (almost) and abundancy of prey and greenery, life without the sun would be terrible for me. I can't live outside of a natural world.

Yes, you do need to find a way to free them, Lux! I know you can, because you're so great. I was literally laughing when Lux caught four mice in one go while the other cats were having difficulty catching a single piece of prey LOL.

I'm seriously waiting for Lux to free herself...and her inmates. Because whatever vulgar activities the Enforcement and the cats of higher authority are up to, Lux is in the middle of it, and she's in trouble.

(Sorry, I only got to 2 chapters. I'm definitely gonna read more though, this is great)

