Talk:Into the Wild (Rewritten)/@comment-26513435-20180731001003

suggestions.

I have a few suggestions for you.

In chapter 17, you spelled Runningwind as Runningwing.

In chapter 24, you spelled Whitestorm as Whitwstorm.

In chapter 24, you have Darkstripe kill Earthpaw. Can you maybe change it so that Darkstripe does not kill him. Maybe have Firepaw stop him at the last moment? Maybe have Earthpaw get chased away along with Brokenstar.

Also can you please have the Shadowclan apprentices show up more in the into the wild rewrite. Rainpaw, Brownpaw, Wetpaw, Littlepaw, and Earthpaw.

Can you please accept some of these suggestions? Like Earthpaw not dying?