Talk:Deep Down Lies/@comment-25630395-20150419075645

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That prologue creeped me out for some reason... it was so mysterious and cryptic. Good job!

So I think that the idea behind this story is pretty interesting, what with the 'plan' mentioned in the prologue, and the ending to Ch. 1. I think that this story has a lot of potential.

I would have liked to have more of an introduction to the characters and setting in the first chapter, as I thought it was a bit abrupt. The events were kind of just listed there, instead of 'flowing'. Maybe put in some dialogue to explore Nightsky's personality?

But overall, great job and I  think you guys are off to a good start!

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