Talk:My Dirty Little Secret/@comment-26432133-20170710014809

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Whoa I'm really hooked on this! First off, I love Fogstar, trying to control her unruly Clan rather than excusing their misbehavior like most leaders. It's something we rarely see within the canon. I mean, Firestar would probably do that, but ThunderClan was just sooooo speshul that they didn't ever do any wrong. Second, I can see a Brindlefrost-Brownfire thing? Oooo. I do enjoy how that bit of the story isn't gobbling up all the "screentime" but it's still really interesting and I wanna read more.

I kind of feel like Dawnstripe will come back, but who knows, he could've just been there to make Brownfire jealous haha. As for nitpicks, I don't really have anything to say? I did notice once that it said "shouldn't of" during the Gathering, while it should've been "shouldn't've"- the contraction is "should not have", not "should not of". Other than that, I really love this story and no doubt I'm gonna stalk it.