Talk:Life's Game/@comment-27725192-20170324185910

This is really nice, Holly! I like Skyblaze so far and I think it was cruel to cast out the rogues that helped the Clan. Wow, that ending... ;c It was perfect and heartbreaking. One concern is, add a new paragraph every time you're doing dialogue so the reader doesn't get confused because often I got confused on who was saying what, so that's why. Either way, I love the story and I think you should start a sequel if you haven't already ;)