Talk:Many Moons Later/@comment-5848758-20131012200131

This has a great idea-it just needs more drive.

First and foremost, (please don't get offended) but your grammar is appalling. Run your chapter through Word or something before you post it.

Another thing that irritates me is the way you put capitals in front of the prefixes in the warriors names. Also, please don't put speech in italics;it is annoying and I find it hard to distinguish between thoughts and feelings.

Enough of the negative stuff-I like this si keep writing!!!:D