Talk:Journey Looming/@comment-8248793-20150906144735

(group post yes)

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Oh man do I miss Solitary. I don't know if I ever liked Wisp but I'm either still not attacked to him or just not? I'm sorry, I just he's very lovable and I do love his character development (it's very unique), I just don't see him as someone I'll get very attached to in this story.

I should probably (I had trouble spelling that....?) reread this season and maybe even season one, because I have no idea what just happened lol

Also I think you made it way too obvious who the traitor is. Like one moment you showed us that scene, then the next we realize Pounceskip is the one who encouraged the leaving of the cats. And then you emphasized that nobody trusts him. Perhaps your point was to have that she-cat figure it out and that's the mystery but if you wanted Pounceskip to go by unnoticed, you shouldn't have had him change Whitestar's mind.

But I feel as though you put a lot of feelings and emotions in this. I like how Wisp is trying so hard to change, and that you don't overload us with his emotions, but there's enough for us to feel for the characters.

I don't have any real guesses on the she-cats because I think Wisp will meet her later on rather than it being someone familiar.

Unless it's Scorch.

Anyways, good job! <3

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