Talk:Moons of Shadow, Suns of Light/@comment-8248793-20140618191156

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This is really good so far, Silver :) I love how you had four sections of the Clan, each specialized in one part of the Clan duties.

I ship SoftXWhite :3 They look so cute together! I also like how Whitepaw really want to leadership, even though he's so young. The plot is very unique, not like the original Clans that were made in the Warriors Series.

Though I have to point out that you switch tenses a lot in the story. I believe you're using first person, but at some parts of the chapter, you would switch to third person. You should try to watch out for that :)

But I definitely love how this is coming along, it's very interesting and I can't wait for more, Silver! <3

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