Talk:Mapleshade's Heart/@comment-2143393-20130624001115/@comment-2143393-20130624165912

I see that you fixed the mistakes. :) But there's one more thing; you don't need to write Maplekit's P.O.V. Because Maplekit's P.O.V means that you're writing in first person from Maplekit's point of view. You can't have a book that's from Maplekit's P.O.V in third person.

You are not writing it from Maplekit's P.O.V; you are simply following her in your story.

This how you wrote it: "Maplekit was tired, so she followed her father back to the nursery, where she laid down next to her mother, and let the black wave of sleep take her."

If the story was from Maplekit's P.O.V, it would be like this: "I was tired, so I followed my father back to the nursery where I laid down next to my mother, and let the black wave of sleep take me."

So, all in all, P.O.V means first person, so you cannot have a P.O.V in third person. :) Hope I helped!