Talk:Dewdrops/@comment-8248793-20141016012317

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The scene is very well designed, Dewstorm has been one of the top first ships that I loved. Crowstorm was portrayed well, and I found it rather cute.

The story was definitely real, you took the real content and changed it to Dewheart's point of view, which worked rather well in these scenes. I did notice that you didn't add much of your own ideas, which was fine, but it was rather dull to read the same scene I wrote, but in a different POV.

There is definitely no grammarical mistakes I see, I found the story rich and exciting, despite the reality that it was directly from the show. Dewstorm, as I said, was one of my fac couples, and I loved how you put them perfectly together.

Now I have to say that his death was abrupt. Yes, I know the show had a terrible scene where he died, but I felt as though that was the time you should have elongated and made it more developed.

Other than that, I loved it!

17/20

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