Talk:Warrior/@comment-26285531-20151217024658



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I loved part two!! <3 You can clearly see that Ravenflight is so freaking nervous and scared to become the 'leader', but I could also tell Ravenflight kind of still wanted it. Like, you want it but you're not confident in your abilities to do what you're doing. And seeee, Ravenflight's fair when she issues orders and such.

Okay, like I can agree with her shock, if she's going to show down a Raider patrol before even taking an assessment first.

That ending was perf <33 I can't wait to see what happens in part three.

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You put a lot of description into the battle itself, which I liked. I could see Ravenflight conversing in her mind, about, how if it was her fault or not (which it was definitely not her fault). And Ravenflight|x|Aspenpelt? Ravenflight|x|Arctic??? D:

I really like the flashback, Firey. “Promise me, my little raven,” she whispers, “Just promise me this.” That part was absolutely beautiful.

And I loved how you ended the chapter with nearly the same note as before, even though Ravenflight now knows Arctic's name. That gives it kind of a turnabout edge to the story, which I thought is really interesting. Great job! <3

