Talk:Frostpool's Rage/@comment-1956227-20170125010240

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Wow okay time to put my master reviewing to the test.

Okay, let's get the constructive criticism out of the way first. You've definitely improved! There's still some grammatical mistakes, like for example, "Yeah yeah, lets hunt i'm starving!"

With any I that goes with that sort of thing like I'm, I'll, I, that general thing, the I will be capitalized, just a reminder since I used to forget that a lot xD.

I'd say you'd have to find a good balance between description, because too much description will cause info dumping, which trust me I have a bad habit of doing.

Okay, now for my personal opinion, I'm sensing a possible ship between Eagle and Frost?

Welp, I'm bad at reviewing, most I can say is just litle gramar things, other then that, I like the idea of this and I'm excited to see where it'll go next!