Talk:Let It Burn/@comment-25926899-20151012235432

part two (spoilers)

the only thing i would change (and it's really just a stylistic preference) is instead of using capitals for characters speaking loudly, i'd just put it in italics. it can be assumed by the words/the reactions/the descriptions of the voices that they're shouting.

i've said it before, but your world building is incredible i love this setting so much and this plot sounds like it's gonna be super intense but there's still a lot of mystery surrounding their antagonist which i really love. ughh this is just so beautifully written.

also something i noticed was gale and ray didn't seem to have any sort of problem with their father although you said in the previous chapter that they resent him for being away so much.

and speaking of their father o noooo he's leaving and o noooooooo he's stealin' from his neighbors i like phoenix's reaction when she realizes he's been doing that it felt very realistic and unfortunately so that she didn't care when the cats who could be starving thanks to her father were those she knew. it's sad but yes very realistic and i love that she didn't have a problem until that fact came about.

elliott nooooo poor thing that scene was rly emotional & greatly upsetting but i like this background for him and i'm eager to see the reactions when the truth comes out (it is gonna come out right???).

the north end/peak cats!! i'm interested in them tbh. like i don't rly have a problem with them not sure if i should but hey it's not their fault they're in a more fortunate area (i mean if they've been there for generations...). i assume they're just sorta brought up to have that sense of superiority and hunter at least seems friendly so i assume they're not terrible they're just looking out for themselves yeah??? i'm curious to get to know some of them & i wonder what the north end and the peak esp actually look like??

so yeah this is an incredible frickin story and i love it and i eagerly await more <3