Talk:Nothing Left To Say / Rocks (Night Visions songfic)/@comment-8248793-20141026162908

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I have to admit this one was hard to follow. I think your biggest mistake when writing so far is that you jump to things too quickly.

I'm still confused on whether or not Clover is a FeatherClan cat or a MeadowClan cat. I mean, why is his Clan in StarClan?

And what in the world happened with Song? How is she mean but nice at the same time? If she knows he's Mossleap's son, how come she doens't just bring him to Flame, rather than talk with him instead? How is Elyssa still alive if Flame knows that she betrayed her?

Those are my questions for the rogue group part. Now I still liked how you included the fact that Flame was influenced/possessed by demons, and it was a very unique plot idea that ended with Flame's death.

I'm really confused on what happened with that plump dude. How did Clover end up down in the tunnels, and how did he get back to MeadowClan if that's where he was led to in the first place which ended up to be tunnels? That part REALLY confused me.

But I liked this one, it had a lot of plot to it, and it made it rather exciting, even though it was hard to follow :)

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