Talk:The Prophecy Of Doom/@comment-5488450-20130725202244

This looks like a really interesting concept, however there were a few things I thought I should point out, which would make the story easier to understand:

-In the prologue, it was really hard to tell who was saying what. It makes it much easier to understand the stories if you start a new paragraph every time a different person speaks. Elsewise, it is really challenging to tell who is saying what.

-I’d like to suggest slowing down a little. Chapter 1 was a little quick paced but that was fine. During the prologue, however, I was a little confused when it went from talking, to watching a throat being split, to a battle between Clans and then the death of someone’s brother all within minutes. Again, if you split it into more small paragraphs it would be easier to understand.

-Also, just noticed that the Prologue wasn’t given the usual header. I recommend fixing that for formatting sakes and because it does look more professional when all of your section beginnings are properly formatted.

But the idea seems really cool and I can’t wait to see where you go with it!