Talk:Fire Fight/@comment-5137480-20130603202237

Mmhmm. I'll be commenting on the the sections and chapters. :D

History: ShadeClan: This is a quite good section, though it might leave you wondering: who actually is the threat? How did they lose hope? How come there aren't many she-cats?

Apprentices and Mentors: This is the best section. Though, one question: Why are she-cats normally mentors? Also, you might want to use easier words to help the reader understand.

Nurseryplace: This one's a bit confusing, because it's strange that she-cats all have kits at the same time. What if some are early? Or late? Will they still be apprentices at the same time?

Fire Fight: It explains a lot, and leaves you with no questions.

Great job! :D