Talk:Broken Pieces/@comment-8248793-20131124175101

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Wow! I love this one because it shows suspense, lots of action, and probably the start of all the problems and stuff that will happen.

And the part where Poppystar names Sunheart the new deputy, my heart started to beat so fast. That was a great point to stop, no matter how short this was. I can't wait to see what happens next.

I like twigclaw's character. The way he doesn't back down, and his courage. Darkshadow's moves are still a bit too sudden, and I would suggest making the fighting longer.

This is all great, and I shall read the next one soon!

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