Talk:Even So/@comment-15560748-20150823210708

competition post

SPOILERS

Set 1

ONE ~ I love the way you introduced Lash. You give her a pretty solid personality, though I'm willing to see how she'll grow and change. You give us an insight on how she thinks, and I'm starting to wonder what happens to her, where she lives, and who all these cats are (Faith <33). The intro pulled me right in, and I really love this story already.

TWO I'm starting to love Faith. I kinda think that to Lash, her name really lives up to her personality. It's all really sweet. Yeah, and the overseer is a horrible cat. Because one cat doesn't seem underenthusiastic or overenthusiastic, you start injuring them. It's stupid.But I really get Lash's opinions and stuff.

THREE I can see that Lash really loves her cats. Like they're all family to her because she doesn't really have one. Embers also seems a bit interesting in a way. I wondering how he'll grow and change and stuff ;)

FOUR Bear is more of a follower. I can see that. Unlike Lash, who's a fighter, Bear is more of a follower based on what Lash tells us. I have a feeling that something will go wrong with Lash's expedition out there.

FIVE Of course something bad has to happen for a plot twist. Stormcloud seems pretty cool though; he must've known that these cats mean a lot to Lash. Everything was a bit out of the blue, but it was still really good for this chapter.

SIX Why Gingersnap? Gingersnap seemed like a good guy. And the overseer is an idiot again. This story is really interesting, and I love the way you introduce them all. I wonder what happens to Gingersnap D:

I'll probably do some more later.