Talk:Separated/@comment-4751506-20140206120422

This is great so far! It's already kind of sad how the mother had to leave her kits and go off to participate in a fight she probably won't come back from. I also like how you didn't completely explain what was going on, though you left enough information to keep the reader hanging. I'm interested to learn about what the angry cats were doing - are they running from another threat? Are they the monsters the mother was telling her kits about? - so I hope we'll find out soon!

I did notice you had one or two spelling errors - in the first line, it should be 'thick' instead of 'thich'. And saying '...with her tail,' instead of '...by her tail' might sound a little bit better. That's just me being picky though. :)

This is really brilliant, and I can't wait to see how it turns out. Keep writing - we'll all be rooting for you in WFWrimo!

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