Talk:Bloody Shadows/@comment-26285531-20151023044424

Hey Sea!



Okay, so I absolutely loved this. It was so well written, and though I don't have time to comment much now, I have to say this is one of your best fanfics! Keep up the good work!

ONE~

The way you start off the story is brilliant. I feel every word is carefully placed so that it gives you a chilled feeling throughout the chapter. The words were descriptive too, what which is important for this story because you need to imagine more than read to understand what is happening. c:

Other than that, I felt the chapter along with all the other ones could have been longer. Other than that, beautiful start! It really made me want to read more.

TWO~

Ooh, the setup for this part was really good. You could really understand that Shadow's ulteriority and level of coolness and understanding of the world she stood in was so complicated and extraordinary. I couldn't wait to get to Chapter Three at this part. :D

THREE~

Okay, so this part confused me a little. Did Shadow drag the sleeping medicine cat apprentice to the shore? Because I don't think there was a written description or motive of her doing that. But I think the flashback of her brother Gorse was really well-placed in the story, and kind of gave you a hint of the motive that makes Shadow so bloodthirsty and 'cruel'. She must be really skilled to drag a cat all the way to the shore without waking them up xD

The last part was absolutely horrifying, but truly set the theme. This is getting really good.

FOUR/FIVE~

Okay, I was majorly confused at the part of her "nightmare" tbh, but I won't launch into the tangent because I've read the other comments and everything. But, I thought you could have clarified a little on the difference between nightmare and real life.

Five was really good. It's really chilling the way Shadow said Time for some blood. I really, really liked Chapter Five. So, Shadow is trying to take out the Clan cats one by one, just for the one kill they committed against her? Not the best plan, it seems to me.

I'll get in a comment for the other chapters later. Nice work, Sea, I really liked this story, and about your last comment I would love to see a sequel! :P <3

