Talk:Burn/@comment-8248793-20160418012133

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Ooh a new story! The prologue was a great way to pull us in, especially because it connects so much to chapter one. I think you should include more suspicion about Warren in the prologue however, because I got the feeling from Pike that he was loyal and she was distraught over his death, but now he's suspected as a traitor...maybe specify? Unless you want to arouse confusion at this early stage than its okay haha

But I love the new character. Ginger is fiery and you've had outspoken characters before, but I like how easily she throws herself into something without thinking twice about it. I bet her and Grayson have a lot of fun tales to tell c:

I love Kenna's balance with Ginger and how she's the opposite, the more controlled of the two. She and Tyson seems like a cute little couple :3

The thing about Ginger's mom and Al's dad confused me, but that's to be expected because you only got through chapter one. I really like this new idea and I hope to see more :) (though you should totally finish PZ and LIB and stuff xD) (AND VALE!)

<3

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