Talk:Dead of Night/@comment-1333071-20110625142819

This is actually really good, but I noticed something with your grammar:

''"I....I can't." She concluded, closing her eyes.''

"She" should not be capitalized because it's the same sentence. Also, at the end of quotations, if you aren't finishing the sentence, you should have a comma instead of a period.

Glad I could help! Enjoying it so far!