Talk:Evolved (A Horror Fanfiction)/@comment-39524212-20200125152724

Okay I’m gonna do one of those constructive comments again if that’s okay!


 * Spoilers

Ooh even from the prologue I’m getting some creepy, spooky vibes. First of all, Stormheart is obviously shocked that Mistlick is sending the prophecy to Paxpaw (good prophecy, btw). And then we find out that Paxpaw is her son, and he killed her! I’m surprised that Mistlick trusts Paxpaw that much, even though he killed her.

Okay! Moving onto chapter one. You did a great job of making me feel bad for Paxpaw, even though he killed his parents. He’s a murderer, but I kind of feel bad. Anyways, I really want to know who the tortoiseshell she-cat is. I think I have an idea, especially because she’s half-transparent and doesn’t glitter. I’m guessing that she’s a Dark Forest cat, and I’m also guessing that it’s Mapleshade......

This is really good so far, and I can’t wait for it to get even creepier! I’m very excited for when “what remains will be killed”

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