Talk:Shadows of Ash/@comment-25630395-20150318121231

( competition comment :D)

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Even though I don't know anything about Ash, I must say the story was written well. There was a lot of foreshadowing, and I feel like the personalities came out really well. I like Copper, because it seems like she has a free spirit.

A suggestion: The part when Tawny and Speck got killed was a little 'random' and sudden. I mean, I understand that the main 'plotline' takes place in the RP, but it was just kind of unclear what the two cats were doing and why they were killing for Talon? Idk, but that seems what it was, like they were killing because Talon was in pain...??

Good job, though!

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