Talk:Foxstar's Decisions/@comment-28905188-20170826220318



Prologue

Very nice beginning! It's very unexpected for readers reading the start of the story but very good and the whole prologue lures the readers/me to keep on reading to find out what's coming up next. It makes me feel the need for ShadowClan to survive.

Chapter One

I like how you changed the quote from "everyone who can catch their own prey" to "everyone who can lurk in the shadows". Fits ShadowClan very well. I'm not trying to be rude and I'm not saying that you have to change the character name, but I just wanted to let you know there is an actual character in Warriors named Timberfur: http://warriors.wikia.com/wiki/Timberfur. Anyway overall Chapter One was really good.

Overall

The whole thing was great, and I like how you made the characters - their names(especially Nightdusk and Darkstream) and their personality! I like how you colored the chapter titles. This story has a good potential, and I can't wait to see what comes next!

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