Talk:The Rising Star/@comment-24143898-20170123040838

Okay, so I'll comment on this episode as I go~

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The situation that Snowfire is in is indeed an interesting one, as seen in this and the previous episode. It's not like how some people do with this sort of thing (and admittedly I have done this lol), when they let StarClan decide who the next leader's gonna be and so on. It creates some interest for me. As for her so far, she's dealing with taking over the leadership role well, despite her reluctance - which is quite noticeable, especially when she says that she wants to keep her warrior name for a while before taking her leader name on. She's making a brave decision... but idk where it's going to lead her in the future.

Fogheart seems shifty for some reason. I'm not sure what to think of him still, but he doesn't seem like the nicest cat in the world - and I don't trust him. And who is that cat who he'd come across? Is it a ThunderClan cat or something??? That's what it feels like to me. Otherwise, I'd guess that he's a rogue. Ashpaw, don't listen to your mentor, tell Darkstar about what happened!!! As for Ashpaw himself, I'm growing fond of him, he seems p cool <3

I don't have much to comment on in Ravenwing's part, although I think that something's gonna happen between him and Silvershade. Ravenshade. It's going to happen, I swear, especially reading Silvershade's chapter... Sandsplash is a bit like the third wheel with that, oh dear. (yeah, don't have much to comment on with Silvershade, either)

There was a spelling mistake that I spotted in Ravenwing's part (I think? I think it's meant to be 'sweet' and not 'sweets', wherever it is). I also think, like in the first episode, that some of the sentences are a little too long and need to be shortened. (That is just my opinion, and you don't have to change if you don't want to.)

Good work, Bird :D I'll be reading more

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