Talk:If Tigerstar was good/@comment-17759525-20130923003531

I think something went wrong with the coding...

I like this idea, though. I like how you use the first part of the actual Warriors book and then morph it into your own storyline. You do have a couple of minor grammatical errors (For example: out numbered should be outnumbered, "Retreat Thunderclan! Retreat!" should read "Retreat, ThunderClan! Retreat!" Given, not everyone capitalizes Clan for some reason, but most do.) Overall, though, I like this idea! I can't wait to see more :3