Talk:Shard of Ice/@comment-1703139-20130519150351

I like the plot, but sloooooooooow down. Let the details come, let it be longer and slower and let us digest what's going on. The ghosts are kind of sudden and why are they there? What are they talking about? Does Ash know them?

Her death too is swift. Make Snarl seem more ominous and evil. Give him a clear reason. Give us thoughts and descriptions and details.

But as far as the story goes so far, me gusta. :)