Talk:Misty's Error/@comment-24143898-20150403230137

(hey Snowfur, coming to comment on your other story, this is a competition post as well so...)

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Once again, I feel that you have a strength with bringing the main character's emotions across - in this case, Mistykit's. That is one thing that I like.

The story flowed along well, and any mistakes that were made didn't effect your writing.

If there's one thing I would improve, it would be some of the dialogue. There is this patch of dialogue in one of the early chapters, and there's not much details of what the kits are actually doing. If you expanded that part a little bit more, and added a bit more detail, that would fix that issue.

Other than that, this is great, and I do hope you'll continue to write this. <3

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