Talk:Smokeheart's Struggle/@comment-5137480-20130319175156


 * attemps to make a long comment*


 * Here there is a perfect mix of rmotions, but sometime it's a little bit to strong. As in, when ThunderClan attacks, I attemped to throw a pen out the window. >.<


 * There is a lot of  __spirits. Ex., Lightspirit, Stormspirit, Stonespirit, Nightspirit.. (I think that's all)


 * Very few spelling and grammar mistakes, which I hardly noticed.


 * Sometime you might of been able to put a picture in the mind a bit better. But during Flamestar's death, there was a picture I never want to see again. O.O

Overall, it's a very good story. 9/10, as nothing is perfect.