Talk:Shaken Battle/@comment-8248793-20130910033958

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THis is rather a short episode, but don't worry, my episodes are fairly short, and the ones on the reading list are rather sucky. :P

Some of the paragraphs were very long. If some of the readers are anything like me, they wouldn't want to read super long paragraphs. Maybe change those a bit.

Now Sunpaw's change is a bit sudden. Maybe explain how Sunpaw changed, and why she is like this. How did Shadowpaw affect Sunpaw? How did Sunpaw affect Shadowpaw? Things like these could be answered.

Now I liked the emoitions expressed by Shadowpaw. The grief, the shallow feeling of death. All described very well. Left to Be is pretty exciting, and I'm more than happy that this was brought forth by the reading club. :D

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