Talk:Heart of the Beast/@comment-27725192-20170409224659

Wow...

All I can say is wow...

First of all, I love the character development of Ravyn! He seems to be a smart, selfless, natural leader. At first I thought he was on of those creepo toms that hit on she-cats like Ashlyn and has his soldiers [Jas and Everett] bring them to him and I thought he was hitting on Ash at the beginning. But I felt like there was something more to him what with the "a story of a villain who deserved more" at the top. One thing I don't quite understand is why he needed Ash in the first place? But anyways, after his selfless side was revealed, I began to love his character and I think he's the most developed character in this story.

Ashlyn kind of reminds me of myself in the beginning chapters especially the way she went into the Dark Woods despite Jade's warnings and how she responded to Ray's flirting (Go Ashlyn!) but after a while her character began to fade and Ray kind of stole her thunder. It began to be hard to follow Ash's thoughts after a while but she came back at the end so I guess it's okay.

JAS! WHY??? I'll admit, I could tell a main character would die and I was kind of hoping for it but so soon after Jasret or Evermine? I prefer Evermine lol. But they confessed as she was dying so that's good. I like the color of roses thing - that's really creative. And poor Everett, getting tortured by Averitha.

Speaking of Averitha. She's like the perfect villain. She's power-hungry and does anything to get what she wants including killing Jasmine >:( and enslaving Ray. And she's kind of Ashlyn's love rival? I love the part where Ash calls Ray her mate to Averitha's face lol.

Anyways, this story is seriously amazing, it's better than my entry (which I sort of abandoned?) lol! :D