Talk:StarClan's Attack/@comment-35946924-20180621181716/@comment-29762264-20180621201818

i think you should try using paragraphs, like when Lakegust said "Sorry, sorry" you could have done another paragraph wit hthat as the starter. it makes it easier to read. and you might want to make the prologue longer, because while it does set of the story, i think you could add more action into it. other than that i like where the story is going, and i'll be looking forwards to the next edit :3

-nighty