Talk:Loyal Seas/@comment-5197876-20140701210137

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I'm here to judge for Holly's contest.

Okay so the title is a really bad pun, which instantly made me like the story. Seatail was a very unique character. In fact, I haven't read many stories where the main character was the villain, and it made this story stand out.

The declaration of war was interesting, and I was compelled to continue reading, hoping for the outcome.

Shinescale was a little bland honestly, but that didn't impact the story too badly.

I did feel that the SeaxShine was rather sudden. Was it spurned out of Seatail's hatred for ShadowClan or something? That part was confusing, and I admit, I spent a lot of time thinking about it.

Same with ShadowClan's war. Why declare war for the loss of one warrior? This slightly bothered me.

Your score is 16.5/20

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