Talk:Cool Kids/@comment-5342796-20151223053326



AHHHH SO I LOVE THIS

I LOVED IT THE FIRST TIME I READ IT AND THE THIRD TIME I READ IT (it's that good i just kept rereading it)

I love how you kept the lines between lyrics short; sometimes paragraphs work, but in this case the shorter lines gave it a very poetic, meaningful feel that flowed perfectly with the story.

You made Lilyshade's youth come fully alive, the pain and betrayal she felt when Duskwatcher chose Shinecloud, and how that pain festered into the need for revenge. And I absolutely adored the part at the end, when you tied in the scene at the cherry tree. That's arguably one of the most powerful scenes in Vale (at least when I was writing it XD) and it shows a lot about who Lilyshade and Blackheart are. You captured it and expanded upon it perfectly. You didn't push aside what Lilyshade did; you wrote it out in full description, and you didn't try to make an angel out of her--but you didn't make a devil either. You painted the entire spectrum of emotion and actions she experienced. You also managed to be incredibly descriptive while still keeping the story succinct, which takes true talent.

I'm really sorry I didn't comment sooner. This is an AMAZING songfic, and it honestly means SO much that you would base it off Vale. I can't believe my characters inspired you to write something this beautiful <3 I love you so much, you have such immeasurable talent and you're such a great writer & friend c:

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