Talk:To Merit Bliss/@comment-8248793-20170221020912

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I love your start btw. It's a great hook and it drew me in immediately with the action and description you filled into the dream. it really ties into maybe who Mosspaw will become and how he might become the villain (since i'm pretty sure this is your contest entry).

Mosspaw is a cute lil character, though idk if I'll be saying that later on in the story. I'm really drawn to him already, as he's more of a timid little creature who needs protecting. Of course, I want to see the relationship he has with the other apprentices and how that might tie into his later on change/development.

Also the connection to Yarrowpaw kinda intrigues me because having dreams connected to StarClan and having nightmares that will probably come true are two different things. Unless something bad happened to Yarrowpaw that will be explained later?

My theory so far is that Mosspaw becomes the villain/leader (since the cat in the dream defines himself as the leader...) and he screws things over :P just a guess, but knowing you, this will def be a tragic story

Great start! :D I'm excited to see how this will unravel <3

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