Talk:Violet Dusks/@comment-25630395-20170710155847

judge's comment for wfwa

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I enjoyed this story! The plot really picked up in the middle and you went straight into the action. The pace moved a bit quickly, and I felt that at times you jumped from one scene to another very quickly. But I was intruiged by Twigpaw's message and how exactly Rabbitpaw fit into the prophecy. I was a bit confused by the sudden introduction of the 'funnel shaped cloud'. Some more exposition would've been nice. Dustybrook's death also happened remarkably quickly- and it was sad, but since we had seen little of his character some emotional impact was lost.

So you were nominated for best protagonist for WFWA! I can definitely see why Rabbitpaw is a well-received protagonist. At first I found her to be sue-ish and her reaction to popularity irritated me a bit, how utterly awful to have people fighting over you! But I soon discovered she wasn't like that and she was quite realistic. It seemed like some of the apprentices secretly hated her and were glad to prove themselves better.

She has many flaws, most of which are relatable. Many of us can probably understand being helpless when expected to help, letting down someone, or balking in the face of danger. That's what I like about her. She's young and naturally will fail at times. I'm actually greatly looking forwards to seeing her (hopefully) heroic journey, and how she can come back from failing and regain her image in the Clan.

Excellent job, best of luck with WFWA!

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