Talk:Sleepless Nights/@comment-24766822-20151120213655

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I'm really glad I looked through the recent activity and found this! It really is a diamond among gems! But let me dispense with the niceties and proceed to the matter at hand...

I find that in many fanfictions that start out throwing an immense amount of action at the reader give them a "Wait, what in the name of StarClan is happening?" thought. But while reading this precisely and masterfully written sequence, all I felt was a sense admiration and excitement. It was written shortly enough that it didn't feel drawn-out and tiresome, but not too short as to inflict that feeling of confusion that I mentioned above. And I could almost hear Nightpaw's cry of It's not fair!

The Sylphs seem really cool, yet terrible... are they like elementals, since you mentioned one young Sylph was battering the apprentices with wind? Also, I have a distinct feeling that the Sylphs are far from gone... I think they're just waiting for the right time to strike.

I'm interested to see how Nightpaw's clanmates interact with him/her (that isn't clear yet), especially since he/she seems like an outcast. Will they sympathize with Nightpaw, or treat him/her like an outsider? Or will it be a little mix of both? Hmm...

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So far this story is very short, so I'll end this here. But it is really an incredible start to a story, and I'm so excited to see more of your writing. Great job once again, Blade! I love it! <3