Talk:One Purr at a Time/@comment-8248793-20140125010138

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This is a great start Hawk! I really liked how your story is based off a special cat, (like one of my series :)) and I can't wait for you to write more.

To be honest, one of the things that bothered me the most was what you called everything. I mean "Moving Box" and "pink pelts" are very confusing, because we've been calling the, "Twolegs" and "monsters" in the warriors series. It's not wrong, but it gets confusing.

The part that got me the most was the perspectives. I didn't like how you switched from first person to third person and back again in the story. You should keep one perspective, unless you're switching characters and decide not to use first person (but you're not), and switching makes the writing confusing, and the story won't make sense.

Other than that, I loved the story, and I hope you write more soon!

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