Talk:Winxclaw's Choice/@comment-4751506-20131124161445

I agree with Firey down there - this is great! But you did seem to move a little quickly from one chapter to the next, though I did understand what you were getting at and I think it was a nice twist to have a medicine cat die on her way to the Moonstone! It definitely throws the Clan into turmoil, so you've created a nice problem for the cats to deal with there.

I didn't quite get why Stormpaw was made into Stormpelt at the end of all of the ceremonies - wasn't he the same age or older than Winxclaw and Runningriver and Blackshadow?

Other than that, this is really great! The grammar still needs a bit of fixing up, but I can do that for you if you'd like. :) I definitely think you have the potential of a great writer to impress us all with your skills. You've already impressed me!

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