Talk:Rise of the Vipers/@comment-26432133-20170207012005


 * decides to leave a constructive comment bc why not*

SCREEEEEAAAAAAAMMMMM firey you're such a great writer

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I like how you introduced the Vipers by having them attack Bryce. They're very clearly the villains, not just because of the episode's name. I'm wondering what you'll/you did (this was written last year XD) with the Vipers, because if the Great Firey just made them the cliche pick-a-fight-because-I-wanna villains- well that just wouldn't make sense at all.

Bryce is cool. The age difference between her sisters makes her very appealing. She's motherly, yet, y'know, still a sister. Her sisters are obviously super duper close to her heart- and rrrrgh now I feel like you're gonna kill one of them/both of them.

From Bryce and Nightshadow's interactions, I see her as a very serious character. (from this scene: "He raises an eyebrow. “I’m not going to take you to your death. The Coalition is a friendly group to cats like you. The only enemies we have are the Vipers.” “You haven’t explained to me who the Vipers are.” “You haven’t told me your name.” He counters cheekily. I purse my lips. “Fine,” I mutter sullenly, “I don’t mind.”)

Amberstar and Hawkstar- I can easily see them as good rulers to the Coalition. Hawkstar is reasonably untrusting while Amberstar is kindly trusting.

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fun fact: I should be doing my homework right now but NOPE I wrote this comment.....off to go do homework now