Talk:Love Has No Boundaries/@comment-8248793-20150429024208

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I have to say, I felt like a lot of this was rushed and it's a bit too centered around love. Like all of this is just love, love, and love. Foxfoot loves Silverbird. Sparrowpool loves Wolfheart. Rainblossom loves Foxfoot. Breezeheart loves Sparrowpool. None of them were developed enough to really be love, but yet this whole fic was about love.

But I found the love intriguing. It was interesting to know how the characters thought and how they fell in love. But I also thought the whole "oh I love a cat from another Clan" thing was overused. I mean both of the characters liked cats from different Clans. both characters were going to join the other Clan. You guys kinda used the same plot line for both couples.

But I loved your choice of plot. Instead of just weaving one of those story plots where there is a couple and they fall in love and stuff happens, you had two different scenerios, though they started the same.

Um I kinda found it unrealistic that Rainblossom and Sweetbreeze were talking during the battle. Something should have come to attack them before Rainblossom got the chance to stalk away. UNLESS the battle was already over and I didn't catch that.

I liked some of your characters, for example Whitepaw, Wolfheart, and a few others. But I felt as though the main characters, Foxfoot and Sparrowpool weren't so developed because they were the main characters. Both of you didn't really show how they're like, other than they tend to either zone out a lot or they just get fed up with their sister or something.

But I think you both did great with the love scenes (though you should still try to develop the love more before jumping in). Keep going!

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