Talk:Sky Guardians/@comment-26998763-20160306020820



prologue

So, the prologue, as I can see, was made for explaining the Maze Challenge. It explains pretty well, but you could consider adding more detail to what happens. Also, if this has any reference to the Hunger Games, tell me.

chapter one

Hare Coat seemed like a really interesting character to me, although you did not specify his age. He seemed more of a mentor to Fallen Clouds, was that it? Also, you could have specified where they were in that chapter, like, were they on a mountain, or just a rocky path? Fallen Clouds also kind of overreacted to hurting his shoulder, but maybe he fell on a sharp rock, I don't know. The idea of the two training seemed cool though, like the fact that they had to be mentored or trained to compete.

chapter two

This was a very mysterious chapter. It gave diversity in the character POV's, switching from one competing to one not competing. Also, I liked the fact that there was a secret intertwining Hunter Storm and Fallen Clouds, that seemed cool. And when they were arguing, that made me think that even though they were mad, they were still somehow connected. Their personalities kind of contradicted each others'.

chapter three

I really want to hear what Hare Coat has to say, he seems to be my favorite so far, acting as the peacemaker and mentor, being mature enough to cool down the argument in chapter two.

overall

I can't wait to see what happens next! Please keep writing this and developing these really cool characters.

~Katy out.