Talk:Battle of The Shadow Bringers/@comment-8248793-20131201234529

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I do see that your spacing seems to be weird. Either you're spacing with source mode, or its funky :P But I do recommend trying to fix that.

Some errors you made. You wrote: " But I force myself to tay strong." It should be " But I force myself to stay strong. " Also you wrote: " Before she can go anywhere, I leap at her's and slash through it with my claws." The it in that sentence doesn't tell us what it is, though I do believe you mean her throat.

I love that last scene. The one where Sunheart and Darkshadow fights. It is truely a great battle. Spiderface died a little quick, and you might want to add on to her death.

If you can somehow fix the spacing, you need to seperate the parts that is being told from Darkshadow's POV, and Sunheart's POV. If not, maybe just do ~*~

This is a great episode, and I shall read the last one!

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