Talk:A new day , a new adventure : sequel to a new day , a new hope/@comment-24192114-20131219011722

Wow, this is... interesting. There are quite a few grammatical errors, and spelling errors. For instance, you repeatedly did not capatalize the beginning of sentances when cats were talking, and you left out several commas. It's also kind of short for a whole book... maybe you could make this one chapter of the whole book. Also, you didn't give very many details about the "adventure", and about Trueheart's injureys. It is an interesting idea... it just needs some changes.