Talk:Wisdom/@comment-8248793-20170706214826

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I love the beginning! it has such excellent description and I was drawn into the she-cat, who I can see is Riverpaw and what she did to her brother. I'm curious to know if Riverpaw has any powers of her own since Redpaw has his Wisdom?

Tye! I totally forgot I made him to be part of your story and that he was evil xD I was definitely shocked when you revealed it, although I think you could have expanded more on the topic of how he might have controlled Redpaw. And an explanation on why Redpaw has his Wisdom and what it is could be helpful too! I'm a little confused on what he's capable of doing.

I really like Riverpaw's character! She's relatable and a great sister figure that make up a good hero and I'm glad she hasn't completely given into the whole "my sibling is perfect!" phase but she's still protective and a good sister. You had very good character development with her, as we see her begin to doubt her beliefs of her brother's goodness.

This was a good story! There are a few grammar mistakes you can fix with a sweep through and just remember for dialogue, make sure you're clear with who is talking and every time a new person talks, you need to make a new paragraph.

Other than that, I enjoyed it! <3

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