Talk:A Collection of Songfics/@comment-5488450-20130724144448

Aw this is really sweet, I thought you did a good job reflecting on her life and it was bittersweet but rather heartwarming at the same time and I really did like that :)

There were only a few things I could point out, actually;


 * The length, and I'm assuming this is one of your first sonfics so this is perfectly fine for that, but I felt like you were cutting off a lot of the emotion witht the lyrics.
 * The connection to the song and the lyrics. The ending was perfectly find with that, but I wish perhaphs you may have made more a veredict to the song during the whole thing, which is, after all, what a songfic, is about
 * And uh, I'm trying to find a third thing so that it won't be two bullets cos that would be awkward but I honestly can't, which is really good considering this is (I'm assuming)one of your first songfics :D

Looking forward to the next ones :)