Talk:A Collection of Songfics/@comment-1703139-20130723194246

I really like this! You definitely have talent, but here's a few hints. :)


 * You called Crowpaw Crowfeather a few times.  Be careful of that!


 * To make the story easier to differentiate from the lyrics, you might want to make the lyrics bold as well, or put a : before your story lines so they'll be aligned differently.


 * I wish this was longer.  It was so good and I could feel the things, but I wanted to see the memories, feel her pain more.

I love how you tied the song in at the end. And the adjectives and verbs were awesome and descriptive. :)  Keep writing!