Talk:If Bluestar Never Gave Up Her Kits/@comment-7270915-20130621010015

Well, this is very interesting, and well written. You should clean up those first paragraphs (indenting whenever a new person speaks), to make it easier to read. And you should have more clearly defined pause between Bluefur making that promise and making her kits apprentices.

And LIONHEART! Poor cat. I actually like him. (Not LIKE him like him, but like as a character.)