Talk:Firestar(Part 2)/@comment-4751506-20130114214442

Oh dear. Oh dear, oh, dear, oh dear. (did I really just say 'oh dear' four times?)

I like how at the end, you put in a little of Badgerstrike's own like, remorse and his regret and his inner turmoil. Even though you haven't included his entire story yet, it's nice to give us that sort of inkling. :3

I also love how you described the battle scene, that was simply phenomenal. You weren't like, over-excessively (that's like, a double positive, isn't it?) gory and descriptive, but you made sure that the reader wasn't completely floundering without a clue what was happening. Very nice. :D

MY THIRD FAVORITE THING was the very last bit. Where you said, "curling in on myself to prevent the jagged edges of what was once my heart from cutting me too deeply." That was some fantastic word play right there.

So overall, Arti, you probably don't need to hear this from me, but that was simply amazing. Perfect. Beautiful. <3 (like you. :D)