Talk:Life of Crime/@comment-5488450-20140106003648

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Aww this is the sweetest, saddest thing ever, I was seriously almost crying at the end, and just asdfghjk

I really love Shadesongs character; idk maybe she reminds me of myself a bit with the whole secluded kind of thing, but although it's only one chapter; you've shown us a good deal of her. She quite clearly misses Trouttail a lot and through the way you described that pain there's a lot the user can make out about her.

Trouttail sounds like a really sweet cat too; I love how so far he's one of the primary characters despite the fact that he's dead. It really shows how important he was to Shadesong.

The plot buildup is really good and I love your details and your style of writing is absolutely brilliant.

My only suggestion might be making the text a wee bti darker because I had to squit just a little to read it!

Elsewise it's perfect!