Talk:Glow in the Dark/@comment-7270915-20130701160325

Well, you are my fellow contestant, but I'm going to give constructive criticism on this anyway. (Besides, you did it too, so I went, why not?)

It's the stupidity of the characters that bothers me the most. The Twolegs are too stupid to realize that there are a group of cats here and they should just take them to a pound, rather than take them out with the forest. That's what actual Twolegs would do. Of course, you don't have to change this - it is your story after all.

Rainstar is unbelievably stupid. Obviously, he is the founder of RainClan (hence Rainstar, I suppose.) This Clan would never have survived its first couple of days with this kind of a leader. You need a strong leader to found a new group, country, etc.

And what bothered me the most was what happened with Flashfur at the end. He believed Rainstar. He didn't even try to run off with Blossomfur. That goes completely against his character.

So yeah, that's my rant. Sorry for ranting, but I really felt the need too.