Talk:Bleeding Out (Night Visions songfic)/@comment-8248793-20141024205317

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To be absolutely honest, this was really confusing and hard to follow.

First of all, the start was abrupt, but very nicely done. It was kinda strange, seeing Mossleap just dying on the ground.

And then I was extremely confused with the part how Birdnose and Mossleap were dying together and how he had ten minutes that seemed like three moons because Cloverkit became Cloverpaw. Wasn't Cloverkit like 2 or 1 moons old when they came? And then his parents got killed and then he became an apprentice?

The poem in the middle was very sweet, and I thought it was a great addition to this songfic. This wasn't bad, but it was just hard to follow.

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