Talk:The Ancestors/@comment-26285531-20160210043038



augh I'm pretty behind with this show, I can't believe you're nearly done with this preface. x_x

This was really good! FIre and Rainbow's relationship is really unfolding in front of us as readers and I can tell how much they protect and stick with each other. Great job on that! This really sets a tone for the rest of the preface.

The only thing I was quite confused about was that there were a lot of disconnected ideas in this episode, like how Fire and Rainbow could share dreams by twining tails, or more about the Elders. You've also introduced a lot of characters in this episode, which went by pretty fast, so I wasn't really sure who is who and their relationship to another cat.

There were a few grammar mistakes here and there, which were just a little confusing but I'm sure you can fix up. In all honesty this show is shaping up really well and I'm glad you've brought back Fire and Rainbow in this preface to weave together an even better story building off of the main ideas we know about these characters. Great job; I'm excited to keep reading!

