Talk:New Day/@comment-25653434-20151118102311

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Wow Rainy I have to say, this is really amazingly written and already so well developed. I can really relate to Breezepaw and her sarcasm. I also like how different of a character she is, not just some plain character. I also love her constrast to Daisypaw, it created this really good odd couple dynamic.

I love your choice of words and decriptions, it really creates a picture in my mind. The decription of the steeing sun I thought was especially good and realy amde a vivid picture. I also love how you use a vast vocabulaty to encance the story line but it is not over the top, just the perfect ammount of flowery language to really make the story strong.

The change in tone I also find very interesting like the part where Daisypaw was being chased by Breezepaw and she let out a "blood-curtling scream" I actually thought something happened to her but it was good because it really showed their firendship I think.

One other thing I really liked is how the character's named matched their personality and desciption, not just therandom names like the ones I think of for my characters XD

Well I am off now to continue reading. Amazing work Rainy, I am very much looking forewards to reading the next episodes!

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