Talk:Warrior/@comment-5342796-20151206160007



THIRTEEN

That was really heartbreaking. It must have been so hard for Artic to turn on the cats he's known for so long... I'm worried about him, about the cloak of numbness he had to do in order to prove himself loyal to IceClan. I agree with him; I'm really glad that he has Ravenflight with him. He needs someone to tether him to the earth, to remind him who he is and why he's doing this.

The scene at the beginning when Ravenflight was mourning Aspenpelt </3 Just shatter my heart into a billion bits, why don't you? I felt her loss so strongly. You're so good at writing emotions, it's incredible.

FOURTEEN

AWWWWWWWWWWW ARTIC AND RAVENFLIGHT ARE SO CUTE AHHH. The affectionate way he talks about her is just so cute man, and even in the lowest of times the thought or sight of her seems to steady him--goals <3

I'm glad that some of the other fly warriors are starting to accept him at least a little bit, seeing that not only are his skills useful, he's not a bad cat himself either.

and I'm glad to hear that others can see why Gwyn did what she did too. I'm really sad for Aspenpelt, but I don't blame her entirely either. She was desperate to escape, and unlike Artic, she didn't have a single cat on her side in IceClan -- well, besides Artic, and he didn't really count at that point.

Artic is becoming a part of the team, and I have a feeling he and Ravenflight are going to turn the patrol into a force to be reckoned with. i just hope Artic won't completely destroy himself in the process. At least this battle was easier to fight; these cats weren't faces he recognized, and their bloodthirsty rage made it a matter of survival.

FIFTEEN

GWYN? GWYN? IS HE INSANE? HE'S GOING TO MAKE THEM WORK WITH THE CAT WHO KILLED THE CAT SHE'S GOING TO REPLACE? DOES HE WANT THIS PATROL TO FAIL? JUST WHEN ARTIC HAS STARTED TO ASSIMILATE... GOD BLACKTHORN DO YOU HAVE ANY SENSE AT ALL?

But on the other hand, I AM incredibly eager for Gwyn to be pulled back into the storyline. Maybe Artic can be to her what Ravenflight was to him, a link to IceClan, someone to accept her before the rest of them do.

THEY TOLD EACH OTHER THEY LOVED EACH OTHER. GAHHH THAT PART WAS SO CUTE I'M JUST

THE EMOTIONS ARE

VERY VERY HIGH

''*sobs*

SIXTEEN

Oh wow that was really intense. My heart broke when Ravenflight and Artic fought, even though I know that they have legitimate reasons to do so.

And the dream... that was really painful. Just the fact that Aspenpaw was there, and we were reminded of how much he and Ravenflight meant to each other... and then you reminded us of how fractured Ravenflight's kithood had been as well.

The ending line was really deep. No ghosts can haunt like the ghosts of your own creation. Ravenflight is still shadowed by the memory of what she did, especially now that she knows what it's cost Gwyn, and therefore cost Artic, who she loves, who loves Gwyn.

I wonder where Artic is. Did he maybe already find Gwyn?

SEVENTEEN

NOOOO I WANT GWYN BACK D:

I can feel the emotions and conflicts--both inside and outside the cats--building up. I'm scared for what's coming.

Also, flashback of LIL' ARTIC. WHAT A CUTIE I JUST WANNA PICK HIM UP AND CUDDLE HIM FOREVER AND EVER.

I want Ravenflight and Artic to just have time to be with each other and learn how to be together and heal all their past wounds, but I know that it's a war and that's not going to happen any time soon... Things are going to keep happening and hurting my babies :(

THIS STORY IS SO GOOD OKAY. I KNOW I SAY THAT A LOT BUT JUST...

YOU CAN COMBINE EXCELLENT CHARACTERIZATION AND EMOTION WITH STELLAR PLOT TWISTS AND ACTION AND THAT JUST TAKES SUCH TALENT GOD FIREY THIS IS SO GOOD ILY

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