Talk:Rosefeather's Lesson/@comment-25531638-20131113175206

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Even though this is a short story, you've somehow managed to fit a ton of depth and character development into it. I love how you go deeper into what it's like to be a queen, and have kits.

I also like how Rosefeather makes herself believe that she's doing nothing wrong about not feeding Dovekit, because he's so small. It's hard to sympathize with a character, if they're completely bad to the core, if you know what I mean.

Also, and Finchpool's remark about taking care of Chirpkit. That was the perfect foreshadowing for Orchidtail's death. And I thought the whole idea of the "deal" was really creative as well.

There was just one thing that was kind of weird though. It doesn't exactly seem like StarClan cats would offer a deal that... bad... I suppose? (great word choice Stormy) I understand if the Dark Forest warriors pretending to be StarClan cats is a bit cliche, but that sort of confused me.

So yeah... this is excellent :)

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