Talk:Wickedflame's Desire/@comment-29771144-20170608081117

This is really good so far!

Spoilers/Summary (I've never done this before so bare with me)!!!!!!!!!!

Prologue:

The prologue was nicely placed in StarClan; I felt as though it added a certain darker theme to this fanfiction.

To be completely honest, I feel as though BrackenStar was sort of a bit of a rushed character. That could be his personality but I don't know.

Chapter 1:

I feel so bad for WickedFlame! His mate and kits perished before he could see them! Sad I tell you, sad...

I have to admit, I find WolfMask a bit annoying and I'm glad you killed her off. Adds a little more drama as well.

Chapter 2:

I sort of hope, (thanks to the beginning of this chapter), that WickedFlame and BrightWing will become mates, but then WickedFlame kills her, I don't know...

BriskStar seems to really be a thoughtful leader, and I like her.

Hope this wasn't too bad!!! P.s. My fav character so far is BrightWing (no idea why)