Talk:I Promise/@comment-8248793-20150424031053

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This is a unique idea~ Are they like Japanese or what lol like I kinda recognize it from (coughmangacough).

River is awfully cute and I love how you made Creek the overprotective brother. It makes the story much more sweet (and bittersweet if you're like me). You developed the characters really well and I find all of them so adorable in their own way :)

I feel really sorry for Riverpaw. I don't understand why her mentor is so mean to her, but I can see her naive personality and how it's costing her. Creekpaw is certainly more mature and I'm glad he's doing all he can to protect her.

That scene where Creekstrike just rejected her was a bit unrealistic. Cats (or people) don't just disown their sister because their sister hurt their apprentice. Perhaps you should have said he was terribly angry and was disappointed that she was his sister??

Gah, I feel so sorry for Riverpaw(spirit). even though I usually despise stories where they overexaggerate the character being bullied, this one was perfectly balanced and it really hit my emotions hard. Perhaps it's because how you made Riverspirit. Her innocence and way of thinking is really sad, and I wish Creekstrike could have been nicer.

Omg I mean I didn't expect Riverspirit to kill Lilysong because i actually shipped Lilysong w/ Creekstrike and Riverspirit was just freaking adorable I loved her D;

You really wove a brilliant story and gah that ending D:

This was great! <3

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