Talk:Fading Until You Can't Tell Anymore/@comment-8248793-20140319035806

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Very interesting Falcon! But one thing I didn't like abput it was the length of your chapter 2 (?) and 3. like how the lines were one line long. It just annoys me, I dunno why.

Now all this torture is a bit sudden. You should describe where it came from more than how it affects Seawater. It's very quick and I can't really tell what it is. I assume you'll tell us more later on in the story.

Now I did like how you started to story, and how Seawater gets along with her Clan. This is an interesting idea, and I can't wait to see what happens next :)

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