Talk:Bluefur Goes To Riverclan/@comment-26936355-20190619101052

it's been long since i've been active... so i read through your story because i was interested!

the first thing i noticed was the lack of spacing. on this platform, sadly, you must use doublespace, and i understand some users may hate it with a passion, but it really makes a difference. here i see a huge textblock and this usually scares away many readers and make them feel claustrophobic, so you may want to consider adding spacing (especially with character speech tags).

despite the inconvenience- i really like your descriptive language used in this story! even in short text, you managed to build tension using short and simple sentences, and i really liked that about this fanfic.

also- some users don't like having the introduction table in front of their fic, so you may want to consider removing it (especially when now it doesn't really work anymore?)

but overall- this story is reeling me in! i'd come back for more :) keep on writing, and may the stars light your path!