Talk:Hold Your Breath/@comment-25630395-20150107094713

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( I'm still commenting Firey c:)

Wow. This was a bit of a 'traditional' love story... but not really. I like how you made it seem like the characters were destined for each other... but then made us debate that like a chapter later.

I also loved how you developed the characters. Amberheart was my favoritttee xD She can be best friends with my Amberheart :p

What happened to Shadowflicker? She kind of disappeared off the face of the earth, lol (or did she die and for some reason I missed that).

And I found it kind of odd how Firesong kept getting hurt and waking up in the medicine den. ( but maybe she's just accident prone) (like me).

And how'd you come up with this title?

Good job, Firey! (If you want my opinion, I give it a 9/10)