Talk:Demons (Night Visions songfic)/@comment-8248793-20141011181820

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I have to say, this was the most rushed songfic of all in the Night Visions Series. The love between Flame and Mosspaw was very rushed, like before, Flame(gaze) never showed any affection for Mosspaw, and suddenly she loves him.

I felt as though the transition from him looking for Flame to him teleporting to the camp was strange. You didn't really explain what happened to him, but I thought it was a nice twist to the story for you to move the scene to the White Ashes.

I certainly thought that this was the most confusing. You're starting to add more and more new characters in, making the story confusing and just hard to follow. I would stick to the characters you've introduced, or properly introduce the new characters.

Other than that, this is still pretty good, and I will follow this series!

<3

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