Talk:Rise of the Vipers/@comment-25630395-20170614163139

SPOILERS

I've actually read this before, but I was lazy and didn't leave a comment xD. Here we go-

Firstly, I love how you have already established individual voices for each character. Bryce has to stay strong for her sisters, but I feel as though she's very vulnerable within. Jewel, Ruby, and Emeralnd have different personalities. I love the relationship between the four sisters- you established that really well, so it makes Bryce's motivations all the more believable. She seems closest to Jewel, I belive?

The beginning moved slowly, which is fine as it allowed for plenty of exposition. I like the pace you found in the middle where the action started. You gave a really nice introduction to the world without spoonfeeding me anything. I felt the interaction between Nightshadow and Bryce moved a bit quickly, I guess? Like the banter and then emotional confidence he made to her at the end. Still, not a big deal.

The ending was perfect- I'm so anxious to read the next one now! And I'm really worried about her sisters, if they die my heart will break.

Amazing job!

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