Talk:Withered/@comment-26285531-20151229184654

This is really good! I especially liked the prologue, when you put a lot of details/description on how her relationship with Owlmoon has "withered" away. One thing I would say is to put more lines into one paragraph. One-line paragraphs, I feel like, are more for short stories or poems, and it doesn't really last up to the effect of the words when written in single lines.

You end each section/chapter with a lingering note that makes us want to read further into the story, which I love about all of your writing. The story so far is great! :D Keep it up! <3