Talk:Nebula/@comment-24143898-20170128050525

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I don't have too much to comment on for this at this point in the story (considering that the chapters are quite short), so I hope you don't mind ^^ *mind you though, it is nice to see some stories with shorter chapters, I don't really see enough of those)

I can see that you've been testing gender norms again, Stork - never see enough of those either. Padre and Conocido (that name I can't really spell, bleh) appear to be attracted to the same gender, at least (so they'd be gay???). And Raji's bisexual, from what the story says, although we don't see her.

Those eagles are going to come back later for sure (yesss, I did read that trivia section, how could I not? >:D) - muahahaha

idrk what to think of Nebula tbh. I do like Supernova, though, he seems cool.

as for the two siblings' relationship... it's gonna deteriorate. I think Pippa proves that... Supernova's fallen for her and as a result is losing the closeness that he once had with Nebula.

I do have one nitpicky thing - I feel as though Supernova's description should be in the first chapter, rather than the preface??? it doesn't seem to quite fit with the preface, imo. you don't need to change it, but that's just something that I was kinda iffy with.

But this is a good start so far, and I'll read more if you write more ^^

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