Talk:The Ocean/@comment-15560748-20150818182207

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Wow. Just, ''wow. ''

I absolutely love this story, I think it's one of the best on the wiki that I've read. Thank you Firey for reccommending this story to me :)

The character development in The Ocean is REALLY good. Most of the main characters have solid personailities, and we can kinda anticipate what Hollytail might do next. Hollytail is a very interesting character, because she has many different pats to her personality. At times, she is kind, but ambitious, hot-headed but forgiving, doubtful but strong.

I like Hollytail a lot because she's very relatable. She isn't the Mary-Sue type of charcater, and she hasn't really done anything too special to actually be a "main character". We see a good story from the eyes of a regular cat. It's amazing.

The pace of the story suits the plotline really well. It's pretty slow, and easy to drink all the words in, and the setting and what happens is easier to imagine and create in your mind.

I feel like Hollytail knows why she likes Wave so much, deep down inside, but she won't tell her. I think Hollytail likes Wave because he brings the "old" Finchflight back, with Foxfang too. Hollytail probably misses them a lot, and Wave brings them back to her in her beautifully written personality.

Everything about this story is absolutely fantabulous, and I can't wait for you to finish it! I still really want to know more about what will happen, who Foxfang's killer is, and how thechange of events will make Hollytail's relationships with Finchflight, Wave, and her clanmates better or worse.

Great job! <33

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