Talk:The Dreamer/@comment-5488450-20130804125931

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Holy...wow. This was absolutely amazing. The way you used all four perpectives to cover up the greatest battle and the eeirness of it all. Again, a suggestion might be to slow down a bit-not with the pace of the writing but I can see a fair amountof conventional errors that clearly came from rushing as you wrote. I may recommend running this through word for spelling and grammatical errors. They didn't make it harder to understand but they were a bit distracting :)

But the tension was really well done in this. I love the way you left Echo alive, and those final dark words from Deathstar were whoahh... Their powers did a great job of tying into this episode and I think all the deaths were really, really well done<3

The onyl other suggestion I may have would be to make the ending less grim and more of a closer. Sure, while it's good to have some foreshadowing for season 2 you almost made it seem like they lost the battle or the next obstacle had already been detirmined and they knew what a challenge it would be.

I can't think of anything else to point out though, really excited for season 2 :D

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