Talk:Welcome to Reality/@comment-1703139-20131112000522

omfg how did I never see this before. Shame on you Nighty. Or maybe shame on me for just being extremely oblivious.

ANYWAYS

God. This is great. Like...unbelievably great. Never once was I like 'um...they're cats, wtf' because you just made it seem so natural, so real. The characters are vivid and totally realistic and I love them. The writing flows and makes me scream and it's just GREAT.

I think my favorite part though was that you didn't let Ravenpaw win. That sounds really bad, so let me explain: as a writer, it would be easy to let yourself be like 'oh, he's enraged, so he kills the cat who killed his family'. Not only does it provide later plot points, but it makes the thing continue to seem realistic and it makes you feel for Ravenpaw. You can't just be like 'Yeah, he's pretty awesome, but....'  You have to think about how even though he tried so hard, he still couldn't save them, still couldn't avenge them. And, freakish lover of the tragic that I am, that just made me really happy.

In other news...WRITE MORE!