Talk:The Sycamore/@comment-24766822-20140808234046

SPOILERS

I'm not going to list this in any particular order. :)

You know, I can see that even though Winter is in such a beautiful place, the pangs of loneliness are still there. Being lonely is a very strong emotion, and it can effect the reader in such a short amount of time.

But the loneliness is not as obvious, and I kind of wished you might have put that in to Chapter One, but I'm not sure if this is the end of the chapter or not.

Your descriptions are very good, and Slake is one of my favorite words.

You are MUCH MUCH MUCH better at first-person writing than I am!

Good job! I'm excited to see what comes next!