Talk:Shattered World/@comment-8248793-20171104151506

SPOILERS the fallen rose

I like how you incorporated the title and didn't necessarily use "rose" for a name but rather detailed featherstar/ember as the rose

Your description is astounding :) Like Pinefur said below, I felt Emberstorm's feelings and thoughts as if they were my own, and I sort of felt a panic myself when he killed Duskfoot, even his need to be near Featherstar. Despite this, I think you could have implied the love story more, unless that was never intended to be a serious part of this prompt! it was a bit rushed!

But nevertheless, it was a good one-shot and I enjoyed seeing the development of Emberstorm and his increasing franticness to gain the leadership despite his growing feelings for Featherstar.

Keep up the good work :)

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