Talk:Even So/@comment-7410018-20150903055712

~spoilers~

I'm just gonna comment on the first three episodes for now, and then maybe continue reading later and leave another comment (which doesn't necessarily have to be a  part of the club thing).

One:

All right. I was enthralled by this story immediately. You had really good descriptions, and I like the way that you set up this dystopian society that they live in. It always being stormy is a unique idea, and one that I have not seen before.

The descriptions of the "social hierarchy" are good too- the writing conveys how difficult it can be for cats like Lash.

Two:

The way you wrote the characters interacting here is great. I like the fact that not every cat feels completely hopeless, and some are still young and optimistic. As for the overseer... when he came over to Lash I did feel the suspense and I was nervous. And the fact that this situation was normal just helps add to the dystopian society feel.

Here's where I noticed how well your writing flows too. It's not choppy, it's not too fast, and it's not too slow. It's pleasant to read.

Three:

Okay, I think this is a big one: Your characters. You are really good at coming up with interesting and individual characters. You didn't speak about Bear or Gingersnap or the other parts of Lash's team for that long, but in that amount of time in which you did, you set up some great supporting characters. A lot of stories (especially mine) are guilty of having their main characters sorted out, and then just have a lot of filler characters, there because they have to be, who seem one dimensional and boring, and they just don't compliment the story. That obviously isn't a problem for you. All of the character descriptions are great.

But one thing I'm curious about - why do some of them have rogue names, and some of them have Clan names? Do they just keep the names from wherever they are from? Is it a ranking thing? Did I miss something?

Yeah, but anyways, I can't really even think of anything that you need to improve on so far, this is pretty amazing.

~end spoilers~