Talk:Intoxicating Touch/@comment-5342796-20150708161607



RAZOR WHAT ARE YOU DOING

Melodypaw D: She was such a sweet character, like a little light in Winterleaf's darkened life... aND THEN YOU RIPPED HER AWAY.

I have to admit, I was not expecting this story to get as dark as it did. Like, I thought it'd just be a typical romance... and I do like romance, but this is so much better. You've added this whole new strange, unfamiliar element with the toxic waste changing cats.

There were a few minor punctuation errors/spelling errors I noticed, like for example when you show a cat's possession, you put an apostrophe after their name. So it'd be "Winterleaf's adoptive sister", not "Winterleafs adoptive sister". And I think you called Winterleaf Whiteleaf once.

But it was really good other than that! I'm amazed by your writing skills and your plot skills. Already you've built up so much suspense: Why does Spiderstar want Quakestorm dead? What's going to happen next? What's the main threat? What will Winterleaf do?

Awesome job, Razor!

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