Talk:The Light of the Shadows: The Quest Begins/@comment-32946794-20160920153427/@comment-32946794-20160921155128

Im sorry if it hurt your "feelings", that was not my intention. My point was that maybe you should scatter all the she-cats you had as hunters within the tribe and add more toms? I didnt want to offend you and it wasnt meant to be rude. Im not sure what kind of citisism you mean though, before if you mean ANY critisism, constructive or not, then you should get used to it because when it comes to writing in general, constructive critisism is important.

Other than that the story looks good. I like stories about the tribe.