Talk:Blood and Revenge/@comment-4751506-20130712012407

...whoa. I have to say, I did not see that one coming. But it makes Rainy's and my characters so much awesomer, because they're related to Shadowsong. She's the best cat in the forest! Absolutely--

Right. Okay, so in this episode, I noticed there were quite a few grammar errors, but I can imagine you were going pretty speedy. 'Loosing,' instead of 'losing,' that sort of thing. Not too big, but just enough to be noticed and taken note of. I remember looking back at Tall Rock Tumbles and the Pilot and beling like, 'Whoa o: Arti's writing has improved by screenwriting (well, writing technically) a television show. Other than mechanics / grammatical errors, there wasn't much confusing or otherwise about this episode. It was really well thought out, and the only problem (minor, I'm telling you) was the points of view switched a little harshly and abruptly. Nothing else was too out-standing!

THIS. EPISODE. THOUGH. HEART FREAKIN' WRENCHING. Originally, I thought they were meaning to say either a) Oakclaw was their father, or b) it was Badgerstrike, and then we got an insight into Shadowsong's thoughts and that cleared everything right up (because Oakclaw is way too young to have kits). Also, the bit about Gorse x Brook. *snorts* Seriously though...did they actually...do the deed...? Because I think you mentioned somwhere something about kits and I don't remember totally but I'm hoping there will be more? And using Riverkit as bait, that is mother-truggin' low. Especially since he's the most adorable thing ever. <3

But yee. This episode was fantastic. <3