Talk:Wrath/@comment-8248793-20150509220242

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I have to admit, this is really good. I'm not saying I didn't expect it to be, I just meant it's just an outstanding piece of writing and I'm glad you told me to read and comment on this.

I've never actually read any of your writings, but I can tell you'll grow to be a fantastic writer one day, Dark :)

Volepaw intrigues me. You did a wonderful job in giving him a concrete personality, something most writers (including me) don't do often. I liked the way you portray him, and how he fits in as the ShadowClan cats who couldn't defy Brokenstar (because it wouldn't actually make sense to have a rebel because he wouldn't be alive. you made him very realistic). Though I thought you could have put more to his relationships with Tansypaw. You made it seem like he didn't know her very well, and then perhaps they were girlfriend/boyfriend and then she was merely a friend?

I'm interested to know what "Yonder" means to this fic. I was kinda confused on why you caps it, but perhaps it's fairly important.

I also love the setting of this story, it's not one that a lot of people write. Everything flows perfectly and I feel right in the moment with Volepaw. I can't wait to see where the story goes, because I have a feeling it turns away from the Clans.

Good job so far!

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