Talk:Keep Your Hopes Up High and Your Head Down Low: Part 2/@comment-25531638-20130808200418

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I personally liked this part of the story best so far! It surprises me how you write these so quickly. Whenever I try to write, I just end up derping around on another tab.

I like how you made Badgerpaw not completely perfect, like how he had to sit out of battle. And the end, where the kit was killed, I thought that it was one of those moments where you're all tense because it's so violent and so interesting.

I thought the flashbacks in the middle greatly enhanced the story, but instead of putting --flashback-- or whatever at the top, you should to italics instead, and maybe something about the character thinking before it starts.

And the end-- a great cliffhanger. Awesome.

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As for your question at the end, that was so totally random x3. But I don't think I know what you're talking about, unless its like a weird whooshing sound that seems to come from the sky that I'm pretty sure is caused by airplanes.