Talk:The story begins/@comment-15560748-20150823171828

competition post

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Great job so far! I'm starting to like the charcaters, especially Moonfur.

You should probably space things out, so everything is a bit easier to read.

For example  :

'' '“Moonfur Moonfur!” I brimmed with happiness. ''

'' “Congratulations Moonfur.” He said doing the same to me as I did to him without thinking I licked him on the cheek and entwined my tail with his. ''

 After all my life has thrown at me Nightclaw had always been there for me, I realized through all of this I had fallen in love with him 

 “Finally.” He whispered my life is perfect I thought, or so I thought.' 

Is that okay?

But still great job!! :)

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