Talk:Time/@comment-8248793-20170723224734

So I finally found some time to read this story! I wanted to read it since you started it because it was such a cool idea :)

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So first off, your writing is beautiful! I love the smooth flow of the words and just the general emotions we get from your writing and just the way you send a message. You're going to be a brilliant writer when you grow up and continue practicing <3

I loved Amberfang's development! He starts out as a brash, arrogant apprentice but then he becomes a caring father and mate. It's cute to see how even though we only got snippets of the love story between Amber and Maple, it still felt real and solid. You had a wonderful way of turning Amber's character in five short parts.

The love story was honestly one of the cutest I've seen! I love the transition you see in each one, how Amber lowkey falls more and more in love with her and her with him. Few people can pull off only showing parts of a story and making it seem realistic as if we've gotten the full story and I think you did it perfectly. I connected with the characters even though we only got five parts with it and I still felt sorrow when Maple died!

The romance was cute, and I loved Maple's words at the end, how love is not a weakness, but a strength. It's a lesson I think she knew Amber needed to learn from the start <3

The time theme was very creative! I loved how you wrapped the story around Amber's impatience with time and how he thought he had all the time in the world to be the best warrior he could be but he found that he had so little time to spend with Maple, regardless of her death. A life is only so long and time really hunts you down.

This story was wonderful! I look forward to reading more of your work :) <3

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