Talk:Sayna's Poetry/@comment-8248793-20140808150938

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I have to say some of the gradients are very nice while others are kinda choppy :3

The Legend of Cinders

I have to disagree with Silver about the rhyming, it was great at some points, but you had some faults with your rhyming. But poetry isn't all abouy rhyming! I really liked how you can us a good idea about what Cinderpelt want, and what happened. And of course you did a good job with Cinderheart, and it was nice that it was in the same pattern.

The Cats of Shining Silverpelt

Your description of Silverpelt and StarClan was very accurate, and you did well fitting into a rhyming patterns at some points. The flow of the poem was very smooth, even if the rhymes didn't quite go together. :) (the gradients for this one is very nice c:)

Leafpool's Song

This poem was really touching, and I liked how you made it so they were like pulled into the love, rather than they had betrayed their Clan loving. I also like the touches of sorrow you put in the poem. :) (the gradients are faint, but also smooth)

The Power of Four

Well I read this last time, so I'll just say I like how you worded this, though the flow was tripped with the slight repetition. But congrats for the winning poem c:

The Fire of ThunderClan

Okay I really liked how you worded this one, to make it fit his description while rhyming. It was beautifully written, and it really matched Firestar. I also like the chanting part, but it did trip the flow of the poem a bit.

Shade of the Maple

This was really nice, you clearly stated in the poem that it was Mapleshade, and I could tell rather easily. This is actually good because then the reader has more of an idea of who and what you're talking about.

Out of the Rushing Water

This was short, but very sweet when you described the tribe and all.

The Warrior Clans

This is work in progress, but so far I really like ThunderClan and WindClan! You bring a new light and perspective to all four Clans, and I think it's nice that you did that :)

The River

God this is so sweet, I nearly cried at your last words <3 I really liked how you poured all of their emotions into this poem, making it sweet and heartbreaking.

Dust Motes Forever Falling

Amg the last line was perfect <3 I really loved this poem because your rhyming wasn't so off, so it really made the poem very poetic and beautiful.

Okay this is long bye <3

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