Talk:The Tree/@comment-17759525-20131122175809/@comment-17759525-20131126024558

Well, this is way overdue. I've been distracted with homework and life in general.

Alright, enough excuses.

CHAPTER FOUR

I like the description of Twolegplace. It can be hard to describe human things without using human words, but you do a very good job here :3

I like Socks's personality, too. He's that classic bubbly kittypet who doesn't understand the forest cats. Yay, kittypets :3

Socks has to explain the basket to Sun, yet back in Chapter One Sun stayed in a basket with Dixie and Beanie. Somehow I doubt he would have entirely forgotten what a basket is...

I do feel like you could add something more to this chapter. It feels short for some reason, and like something more exciting could happen in this scene.

CHAPTER FIVE

The description of Socks's nest is very good, and I like Sun's dream, too. It's just the kind of thing a forest cat would dream of when away from home.

The description of the forest is good here too. I especially like the line about the branches being like bent tails. It really gives good imagery. Socks has that kittypet curiosity, and I wonder if it'll be easy for Sun to leave Socks behind.

Nice job! I can't wait to see what happens next in Sun's journey :3