Talk:Dawn And Dusk/@comment-27725192-20170305175935

Wow, I really like the emotion you put into this story! Ugh, MistClan is very...bratty. I wonder why they're not called BeautyClan. Dawnfire seems like the only cat with sense. Also, you should add a new line for each dialogue whenever another cat speaks rather than it all being in one paragraph; sometimes I was confused on who was saying what.