Talk:Going, Going, Gone/@comment-8248793-20141016013342

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This was a very interesting idea, I loved how you did take some of the Cold scenes, and pieced it together in Leaf's POV.

My only problem was that it wasn't very...unique. Now I know it's supposed to follow the Cold show, but Leaf's story is more wide-ranged than other scenes. I felt as though perhaps you could have added in parts of your own story, (well more of it) than stuck to the actual scenes from Cold until Leaf's death.

There were no grammar mistakes.

The last part was the most confusing, I didn't understand what had happened, I thought Leaf died, and then the next part was... like what?

The first part of the story was rather choppy, but I do love the way you had your story planned out, and the way you told her death.

I have to say that this was very well done, and I enjoyed reading it!

17/20

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