Talk:Glow in the Dark/@comment-16166566-20130726150148

Ok you have a overall good story, and it was very interesting. But heres when I have to be a judge:

Questions:

Why did the flood come in the first place? Ever reader needs to know why something happened unless you explain it in the future.

How did Rainstar hold back the water with just his paws? I needed some better details with stuff like that.

Where did Ocean come from? I think you could've explained that a bit better.

I thought Fluff was just a kit? How did her and Ocean have kits? I really wished you'd explain that a bit more.

Why did Rainstar blame it all on Blossomfur for the twolegs coming?

Comments:

Overall this story was very interesting, and it caught my eye with the title. But then I noticed that the title has nothing to do with the story unless they're is a connection? I really enjoyed this story and I have very high hopes for you!