Talk:HollyClan, The Unspoken Truth/@comment-27153792-20160609215805

Awsome concept and Prolouge! A couple of things that I wanted to say:

First of all, the formatting is wrong (lol I actually had the exact same problem on my first fanfic.) You're not creating a new line for speach. Here's an example:

Example from story of what you're doing:

"Siiiiiiilverkiiiiiit?!" Silverkit heard someone mewl."Sweetheart, quiet down, your sister is sleeping." a soothing voice purred. Silverkit felt something poke her in the side. "will her eyes ever open?" she heard the same squeaky voice mew.

Example from story of what you should be doing:

"Siiiiiiilverkiiiiiit?!" Silverkit heard someone mewl.

"Sweetheart, quiet down, your sister is sleeping." a soothing voice purred. Silverkit felt something poke her in the side.

"Will her eyes ever open?" she heard the same squeaky voice mew.

Second of all, if you want to, you can make the word 'Prolouge' bigger so that it'll be bigger and more attention-grabbing. You can do this in the upper-left-hand corner, where it says 'paragraph'. click it and a drop down menu will appear. Click 'Heading' and it will be bigger!

Other that that, I love the story concept, as I said earlier! When I wrote one of my fanfictions, I started the story where the main character was a kit, and I found it kinda hard to get a good start. But from just the small beggining part, I can see that this is gonna be an awsome fanfiction!