Talk:Amaranthine/@comment-27725192-20170718164911

Aaaaahhh I love this so much. Okay, firstly Cherry seems quite interesting. I wonder about her future with Elzora and Nascha involved and it seems like they'll have many funny fights from now. Although, awww that scene with Cherry and Nascha was so cute <3 Now I'm sensing kind of a new friendship about to blossom between Cherry and Nascha, and possibly Elzora.

I do wonder about Torrent. He kind of reminds me of Turtle from WoF (with Cherry being Anemone lol) but he kind of lacks the character development if you see what I mean. I haven't seen him enough to understand his personality and he's the main character. And I feel like if this is his personality, it should have a more interesting twist to it. Like stubborn, guilty, fierce, I dunno, something along those lines. I kind of wish it was Cherry's PoV because she seems far more developed but oh well.

I love the big words too cause big words rock! I remember having a fic where I just mentioned the title at the end and it didn't give off much of an effect as I wanted it too. I have a feeling that it won't work out here either, instead you have to take that word and spread its meaning across the whole chapter, like work that feeling in there rather than briefly mention it at the end of each chapter and store all the feeling and emotion there.

Overall, I think this fanfiction has GREAT potential! Keep on writing! :D <3