Talk:Danger Cries/@comment-24740423-20150322014830

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ok first off i love your style of writing. i can like visualize everything and the story's flow is great. and the names are cool; i like brambleflare, and snowblossom is pretty uwu (wait were snowblossom's and snowflake's names a coincidence. like theyre both mother figure things to shadowpaw and--)

anyway. i caught a few errors. in the prologue you said "the wind caused him to tumbled backwards", somewhere else 'his' was spelt as 'hsi'.

autumn tho. "I am the leaf fall of your Clan, the end of green-leaf for every cat I meet." thaT QUOTE THO.

aww poor rainpaw. i knew she would die tho. vuv

i love shadowpaw. like i don't feel /sorry/ for him, but the regret he feels, even after being called a hero, is realistic (thatdoesntmakesensebut-). i think some stories would have the cat be all "ok if you say so im a hero!!"

that ending is cool. i don't expect a sequel, bc i mean what would be in it.

again, i love this ! thanks bro <3 (isthankstherightword)

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