Talk:Glow in the Dark/@comment-5342796-20130701163318

Wow. Sad ending. Poor Blossom.

Hm... okay. I don't really get why the Twolegs are stupid; I mean, that doesn't really affect me at all. And I really think Blossom is a sweet character you can sympathize with. Just a couple suggestions: One, you kinda zipped through the whole Blossom and Flash falling in love thing. Like, I know there was some time between when they first met and when he was thinking about being mates with her, but still... a little of their experience together would've helped that along. And I do agree with Ginger that Flashfur's rejection was really sudden... maybe make him not so sweet if he was going to break her heart like that? Maybe make him one of those Clan-based cats who put everything else second?

The whole Rainstar thing reminds me of Bluestar with the dogs. I don't think it's just stupidity, but I think maybe if you added something to show that he doesn't want to leave because this is where he's founded the Clan, it would help... I'm not sure. It seems really weird that he just blames it on Blossom. A little extra detail into his personality would help that along. Maybe he realizes it's his fault and blames her? You just need to show us a little more about that.

Overall, great story! I really like it :D