Talk:Beautiful (Fanfic)/@comment-1703139-20140421163950

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Love it! There are no mistakes (as far as I can see anyways lol) and it's a really well written piece. I like all the different storylines- Midnightpaw trying to fit in, Firefly keeping her pain to herself, Coral being a zombie...I mean what? lol  The only thing I would suggest is to maybe add in a little more details about their life at the den- I had no idea Firefly and Midnightpaw were siblings for an embaressingly long time and I didn't realize that they lived with other cats/weren't kittypets. Also, is Firefly a warrior or did she choose not to give up her rogue name? I was a little confuzed by that.

Anyways, I want moar! :D

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